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DrElmer
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Some of you may be asking, what is a "Tanka"? Unfortunately, Dr Elmer cannot give you the answer off the top of his head, so he decided to ask Wikipedia for help.

Tanka consists of five units (often treated as separate lines when Romanized or translated) usually with the following mora pattern:

5-7-5-7-7.
The 5-7-5 is called the kami-no-ku ("upper phrase&quot, and the 7-7 is called the shimo-no-ku ("lower phrase&quot. Tanka is a much older form of Japanese poetry than haiku.


Thanks Wikipedia!

Now that you know what this "Tanka" thing is, let's look at the guidelines for the contest.
-Must follow the 5-7-5-7-7 syllable scheme.
-Must be in English
-No foul words that might make Dr Elmer cry
-It must fit the theme
-It will not win if it does not meet the deadline
-No exceptions!

There is currently no prize for this contest, but Dr Elmer and his super Tanka henchmen are out to fix that.

Dr Elmer (you may know him as DrElmer because armorgames does not allow underscores or spaces) will be the judge unless he says otherwise. He will appoint a new judge when there are expections.

Dr Elmer has no ideas for themes, unfortunately, and he needs your help. After a normal round, the winner would pick the next theme, but there haven't been any rounds yet and Dr Elmer is drawing a blank. So if you could please help him decide a theme, that would make him so happy and it would allow you to submit all your wonderful Tankas that you've got bottled up in there.

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Krizaz
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So it's like a Haiku, but suckier. Right?

Trees are very, very green
Life has no reflection, right?
Green is good. I guess.
5-7-5-7-7, is strange.
My tree got broken, it did.
Some mean guy cut it down, yep.

Haiku:

Tanka's can't be any fun - 5
Tanka's make my brain hurt, no fun - 7
Tanka's are strange, deranged. - 5

EnterOrion
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All of your Haiku's syllables are one above. Tanka is two syllables.

My tanka:

The reaping fire,
It kills everything around,
Everything shall die.
Once it's done, life will renew,
It's the cycle of trees' lives.

iamnotironman
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Krizaz thats not a tanka that went


7-7-5-10-7-7

A Tanka goes 5-7-5-7-7

Teeheegirl123
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The birds' songs, I hear
My colourful leaves, I see
Soft snowflakes, I feel
Through the misty clouds, I reach
What more could a tree ask for?

Dannydaninja
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5-7-5-7-7 TANKA:

Danny is happy
He now has 7 mil AP
Firetail_madness is mad
he goes away to get gun
he comes back and shoots danny


Lol. =D

jaza_m
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Swaying in the wind.
Birds atop, resting there heads.
Woken by loud noise,
They flee in all directions.
Where they once slept is no more.

iamnotironman
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Danny the theme is not Making Firetail Madness Mad.

FloydTC
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they are so ugly
why bother looking at them?
too many branches
trees are so dang annoying
but they give us air to breathe

Google567
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You standing there come
Before it gets you, run fast
It might be too late-5
May seem far from you, sadly though
It already swallowed you whole

Did I do it right?

FloydTC
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the last two lines should be seven syllables each, not eight. and the theme is trees.

Google567
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Yep, screwed again.
Thanks for telling me though Floyd.

Kyouzou
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Singing with the wind
Shining emerald in sunlight
Casting dappled shadows down
Twisted roots snaking through soil
Gold leaves shine in autumn light

There it's my first ever tanka, I hope its not too bad...

Ricador
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I high fived with my right hand and it took me like and hour to figure out what was going on.

iamnotironman
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Well,now we got 11 entries,but 3 are against the rules so if anyone wants to sneak one in today is the judging.

jdoggparty
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Now comes september
Some leaves fall, some change color
Just after the summer (whoops a rhyme?)
The humans are mezmerize
The birds continue their nests

tadah

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