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As most of us know, the last Tanka Contest died. This is the new Tanka Contest! Ta-daaaaa!
Tanka consists of five units (often treated as separate lines when Romanized or translated) usually with the following mora pattern:
5-7-5-7-7.
The 5-7-5 is called the kami-no-ku ("upper phrase", and the 7-7 is called the shimo-no-ku ("lower phrase". Tanka is a much older form of Japanese poetry than haiku.
Rules
1) Must be original. NO PLAGARIZING ALLOWED!
2) Has to fit the Theme.
3) Submition deadline will be inforced.
4) Only one submission per user
5) The winner cannot win twice in a row.
6) The Tanka MUST be created for this contest.
Easy enough? And If you are questioning Rule #5, it is because some people may be Beastly at any type of poetry and have really good submissions every week, and I am sure that you would want to win too right? See? Fairness makes the world go round. (not really) And if you are questioning Rule #6, it is on here because if you made something beforehand, that is giving you a better chance at winning, and it isn't fair to the other participants *if any)
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Music! Deadline is the May 29th, 2010 Judging will be Either the 30th or 31st.
Also, Me and Thepossum will be the judges. I am the first judge, Next week will be possums. Good Luck to all!
By few I wasn't refering to the number of quality entry, but the total number.
Don't go thinking I'm a jerk lol, everyone's entry is pretty decent this time!
Honorable mention
Avorne
Flowing, falling free
Rushing, roaring, running rain
Cold, calm, clear crystals
Waters beauty runs river deep
Yet it can be so shallow
I like this tanka on the whole, but your penultimate line is 8 syllables isntead of 7. I get a real sense of motion from this. You get an honorable mention for a good composition, even if it's not quite a tanka.
!Runners Up
thepossum
The stream always flows
Through time immemorial
The water in it
Has been on Earth forever
H2O helps life to thrive
I like the nature-like feel to this. And your tanka highlights the essential need for water by making a connection between earth, life and water. This tanka 'flows' (XD) very well.
samy
It's fluid motion
Tranquility and power
Ice, liquid, and gas
Water; it powers thousands
But it empowers us all.
I like your last line the most. It leaves an impression. However, I felt that your meter was rather choppy, which unfortunately left an impression, too. But I look forward to your next entry!
!Third Place!
Teeheegirl123
Powerful arms merge,
Enveloping you with fear
Drowning you alive
Till you're an empty body
Blank eyes looking to the sky...
This one way quite a shocker, lol. The imagery is well-constructed and I can feel a connection with this tanka. You mostly get third place because I thought the flow was a bit choppy.
!Second Place!
1337Player
It is H2O
It's not carbon dioxide.
Think it's H30?
Well you're very, very, wrong.
I like H2O, it's cool
The chemistry spin surprised me, and when I read the first line, I sighed a little. But, you managed to make it work, with quite a humorous well-made tanka. =]
First Place!
FallenSky
The quaint azure stream
Ubiquitous in its bed
Flows gently, with grace
And though the water changes
It is always there, serene
I thought that this poem had the strongest, most vivid imagery out of all of the entries, and lends itself to many interpretations. Nice job!
[b]Well done everybody! I look forward to the next contest! It's thepossum's turn to judge, right? Anyway, the next judge will decide the theme soon. Can't wait!
I hope I didn't leave anybody out. If so, I apologize. I didn't accept one person's entry because it was neither a tanka nor was it about water. XD
Well done everybody! I look forward to the next contest! It's thepossum's turn to judge, right? Anyway, the next judge will decide the theme soon. Can't wait!
Thanks everyone for all the formidable comments about my tanka, it means a lot to have won since it reflects ideas I've put in the essay I submitted to a litterature contest. Plus everyone did an amazing job this time around so it's all the more gratifying.
Good job everyone, and good luck for the next one!
I'll be having my contest results on the 11th of june so I'm pretty nervous but that sure gave me hope^^.
Alrighy then! My turn to judge. New theme: Fire!
It seemed the logical choice, considering the last theme was water.
Anyway, the deadline is next Thursday. Good luck!
Yay!!! Congratulations FallenSky! That was an awesome tanka... Congrats to all others too!
Yeah I think FallenSky deserved it. Let us know how your contest goes. =]
I'm working on my entry for 'fire' right now. ^^
Thanks for the support everyone, that's why I tend to stick to the Maw; people here are awesome.
I hope everyone amaze me with dazzling entries!
Yes, 2nd place! I've never gotten that high before. Well here's my entry.
It is a plasma
Just like a solar wind from,
the star, our hot sun,
Some people are killed by it
That is why it's dangerous.
Warming, burning hot
Glowing, lighting up the dark
Dancing, in the wind
Now the fire begins to fade
As does its hypnotic hold.
that's my entry - Also, thanks for the honourable mention, that was my first ever Tanka so it really boosts my confidence.
Now the fire begins to fade
Thanks Possum. I'm horrible with syllables, stupid accent of mine garbles them.
Amended version:
Warming, burning hot
Glowing, lighting up the dark
Dancing, in the wind
Now the fire is fading
and the darkness returning
there ya go possum. gettin nicer! XD lmfao.
anywayyyyyys I might enter this on. I like fire... ^3^
A single small flame
Can become an inferno
Takes away your air
Captivating consumption
Devastating expansion.
ta daaaaaa :3
rawr different old japanese stuff
It's my turn now so here goes.
Fire comes and goes
Once in a while on your nose
Burning it's path way
It is burned into my soul
The heat contained forever
Hmmm, I think I'll try something lighter in spirit for change.
The Lone Birthday Candle
By Teeheegirl123
Target in your sight
You breathe in with all your might,
Exhale at the light,
And above all those that die,
There's one flame still soaring high.
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