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murasaki9
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I love writing Haikus. My best friend taught me how to write them. He said ' It's not that hard. All you have to do is learn.' So I did and I fell in love with them. Here's my first Haiku:

Clear like Crystals
It is clear, you know
that what some don't know, we do
albeit, they will.
03/21/11

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CommanderDude7
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Fixing Link
Ill watch it now.

Maverick4
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Best example of Haikus, all in one easy to find location? The Haiku Contest! Enter, and mention you'd like feed back. Or contact recent winners for advice. Yours aren't that bad. Like you said in the OP, Practice is essential. I sucked a poetry in general, and practice has helped me get way better. (Anybody who's familiar with Little Big Box understands this) Good job, and Keep it up!

murasaki9
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Thank you, Maverick4. I'll be sure to do that.

Endscape
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the art of practice
as said &quotractice makes perfect"
learn, young apprentice.

CommanderDude7
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Words like knives slice my flesh
Snick and snack they cut me deep
Leaving only bone

Just a gloomy little one I thought of watching the rain.

KingLemon
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haha I practice haiku'ing on my facebook
here's some:
~Exactly!~
Paradoxical
Impossibilities are
Very Redundant

â~Chained Sins~
One by one it grows
Heavier and heavier
Ever bound to you.

â~Black Panther~
Silence stalks the night
Preying on those who dare mock
the darkness outside

that's just 3 of the 75 I current have made xD
Idk if you can see them, they should be open for everyone to see but if you want to check them out here's the link

murasaki9
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Thanks Kinglemon, I like your haiku's.

murasaki9
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Here's a haiku I just thought of:
Victory

Victory is mine
Let us them never forget that
I will always win

Mwa, ha, ha?

Ernie15
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Let us them never forget that


I think one of those pronouns needs to be kicked out of that line. Whether or not you choose to leave "us" or "them" in the poem depends only on whom you really feel should not forget that victory is yours.
master565
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This site

This is armor games
The forums here are awesome
The games are also

murasaki9
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Jeez! Ernie15, thank you for pointing that out! How could I make such a mistake!? I guess I just couldn't make up my mind whether I wanted 'us' or 'them' ha, ha! I meant 'us'. I didn't put the 'them' there on purpose.

I thought up another haiku:
Hold on
I know you are strong
Hold on one more moment now
The end will soon come.

By the way, Thank you for your haiku, master565.

Endscape
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.....

The end will soon come
to those who speak of his name
just call on Endscape

isnt their a thread in which u take the last line of wat was left by your predecessor and form a poem using it.... hmm.

murasaki9
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I'm sorry, what?
No, this isn't a thread for taking the last line of what was left by the last person and forming a poem using it. The bold 'Hold on' is supposed to be the title. This is for thread is for contributing haikus.

Maverick4
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isnt their a thread in which u take the last line of wat was left by your predecessor and form a poem using it....


May be you're thinking of 'First Line Poetry'?

https://ftp.armorgames.com/community/thread/5809903/first-line-poetry/page/97
murasaki9
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Thanks Maverick! Yes, that is what Endscape is thinking of. And that's not what I'm doing here.Sorry if it came across that way.

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