ForumsArt, Music, and WritingPeriodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)

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DragonMistress
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First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.

Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:

It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).


Also:

The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted

As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.


OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
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surfthenet
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Fear

First time I come here
Trembles me with fear
They don't know why
Things that makes you cry

I ask a guy
He said I'm too shy
That makes me fine
They offer me wine

I drunk the whole night
This the might
Of this website
I will never set aside

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This is my first poet, It's about AG and Zophia(My favorite Mod, check my profile plz)

surfthenet
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sorry for double post

Things that makes you cry

Sorry, it should be 'things that makes me cry.

This the might

should be 'this is the might'

My English is not good, I'm an Indonesian. Btw, love this site a lot.

Krizaz
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Fear

Fear is not one, fear is many
Fear is the hope that is lost
Fear is for weak, some may say
Fear is hell, it's not a lie
Fear is anything, everything
But why?

Fear is not a thing
Fear can be nothing
Fear is what you believe,
is Fear
Stand up to Fear
but is it possible?

Fear is what you think is Fear
Fear is nothing but a second God
Fear is nothing but your imagination
Fear is what may keep you away
Fear is what may move you forward.
Fear is to overcome


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First Poem

adrecka_33
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I think I am going to have a real hard time judging this week. All the poems are really good.

goumas13
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I think I am going to have a real hard time judging this week. All the poems are really good.

This is good news, i hpe that there is a talent on AG, who maybe some day will edit some of his poems
thisisnotanalt
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The reason I commented on the rhyme scheme is that you have some rhymes, but they're scattered.

It's still good, and great for a first poem

samdawghomie
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It's still good, and great for a first poem


Thanks! It means alot coming from poeple like you.
The_AG_King
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Fear?
Never heard of it.
Doesnt seem like i know it,
not one bit.
Staring death in the face,
Or maybe just a spider.
Standing on the roof,
not wanting to go higher.
Looking at yourself,
No one else to see.
Sitting on the couch,
Not knowing who your gonna be.
Fear?
Never heard of it.

zOMG first real poem :P

The_AG_King
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Wanted to fix the end :]

Fear?
Never heard of it.
Doesnt seem like i do,
not one bit.
Staring death in the face,
Or maybe just a spider.
Standing on the roof,
not wanting to go higher.
Looking at yourself,
No one else to see.
Sitting on the couch,
Not knowing who your gonna be.
Fear?
Never heard of it.
Seems like you do,
But just a little bit.
...just a little

adrecka_33
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Alright it is once again time for judging. But before I do that I have a VERY IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT. I will no
longer be judging the poetry contest. But don't think me heartless to leave you judgeless. No, taking over judging
will be Wistress. She offered and I accepted. So from now on I will be right there along you guys writing poetry just
not judging it. Be on the look out, because Wistress will be posting the next theme and dates after this. Now to go
on to what you all have been waiting for.


First place goes to...:thisisnotanalt


It's intentions blood-soaked
forlorn, devoid of hope
no man or woman knows the reach of it's scope

it's a rotten denizen, untellably old
the warm ember that leaves you cold
the story we all know that remains untold

you need your senses, but they've deserted
every ounce of strength you have perverted
your mature psyche has been reverted

it's the man in the corner with the bloody knife
it's hesitant, pensive and pure strife
the gut-wrenching lurch that pervades your life

the feeling of falling and drowning on land
the feeling of can't when you already can
the feeling of sinking in quicksand

fear, the lurking shadow in the light
the indescribable shock and fright
against this foe, the strong have no might

the mark on everyone, the empty desolation
the living death that offers no reanimation
silently slow live cremation

as it raises the knife to pierce you
so it's being goes in, around and through
shrinking back, there's nothing to do. . . .

FEAR


Gosh Thisisnotanalt, it was so hard for me to chose between you and
pixie. But I finally chose yours because yours seemed to have everything a poem could, in
perfect layout. The rhyming was perfect. Yet still it contained a great story.


Second place is:Pixie214


I look into your eyes knowing I can't say a word,
you look straight past me like I'm one of the heard.
There are so many things I would like to say to you,
but the fear builds up; there is nothing I can do.

I stand at the cliff face, staring at the sea,
too scared to jump too scared to be me.
I fear myself and the children at school,
they hate me because I'm not them, I'm not cool.

I'm silent I'm the quiet one, hidden away,
I'm invisible if they see me they'll make me pay.
Sitting at the back I dream their fate,
too fearful to do it, to show my hate.


Pixie I picked yours cause I love how you wrote it in first person.
Wrote in a way that showed how people think about fear. How they
question it, avoid it, what causes fear. Good job!



Third place is:JereN


Feeling of life

What greater fear would a mother have,
than to outlive her child.
Or a fear of noble king,
to see a subject wild.

A fear of an elder folk,
is to be left alone.
And the fear of viking bold,
is to die at home.

Fear is the thing,
it makes you feel alive.
You feel it on your skin,
and all your hopes stand aside.

If you say you feel no fear,
so then you must be dead.
'cos all of us seek it dear,
and then hide under the bed.

JereN another great poem. Its a shame you can win twice in a row.



Now for our honorable mentions:


First is our MOST RANDOM: Zega


Fear likes potatoes, and so do I, because fear likes it
.

Interesting Zega Interesting.


Our First timers: surfthenet-Yours was very good Like how you brought the site into it. samdawghomie-Wow, I find it hard to believe that was the first Poem you wrote. Please keep up the good work. Krizaz- good emphasize on the theme. The_AG_King-So your not afraid of ANYTHING.


Shortest: shayneii


Trembling softly, BOOM!
A frightful flight, knocked the night
Towers crumbling down.

Again I really like when people write short poems cause it always proves that Short poems can have just as much meaning as long ones.


Used the biggest words
:LufffiStudios


glorious;
victorious;
notorious;
laborious
possessed.


Maverick4, I liked that even with a message like fear. You still made it positive.

Its been fun guys, I am a little sad I am not judging anymore. But
I think Wistress will be a great judge. And hay you never know I may be back one day. Thanks for the
Support. Bye for now.
wistress
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Thanks Adrecka.
You WILL be missed as judge but we are ALL looking forward to your poems. <clapping> I applaud you for a job well done <still clapping>.

Anyway THIS WEEKS THEME IS ANXIETY. The deadline is Friday, July 3rd. I am staying with the emotion based theme this week because I think they make more interesting poems. Good Luck!

Pixie214
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it was so hard for me to chose between you and
pixie.


I rally shouldn;t be this happy at getting second in a poetry competition but I feel like I did something right for once more smiley faces etc.

Its been fun guys, I am a little sad I am not judging anymore.


I think I only competed in 2 maybe 3 rounds but thanks. <adds to wistress' clapping>
shayneii
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Yay, shortest poem. xD I didn't really have time to write something so I jotted down a quick haiku. Thanks Adrecka for judging!

Now for anxiety, should create some interesting entries

The_AG_King
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I feel my inner demons awaken,
as the clock next to me turns to midnight,
As I must face their horrible face,
in this hour of fright.

Seeing myself in this pain and agony,
Waiting until the clock strikes one,
Trying not to lose control of myself,
To let this all be done,

But no, I must wait,
In pain and fear,
Hoping these demons dont get the best of me,
Hoping my end is not near...

the_manta
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Hmmm... The theme fits me... But I'm... I'm not a poet. I had something in mind, but I looked at it and thought, "Nah, that's not even worth reading."

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