Forums → Art, Music, and Writing → Poem on Jealousy (by Crazynaitor)

It was very cool for a first poem, I can tell that you put work into it.

It doesn't talk a lot about jealousy..

Bare is for nudity. Bear is for "grin and bear it"

Ah well sure I did my best shot.

I'm confuzzled. Which bare is the real bear?

Bear is the animal ManUtd!

HAHA Amazing!

Thanks Sbamo it took me about a half an hour to do it.

lol its kinda funny i thought it was pretty good =)

Uhhhh.... It's alright I guess.....

Nice poem Crazy I am not good at writing poems anyway.

Its alright I guess Crazy maybe a 7/10 from me.

Once i fell in love,
blind by it,
attracted to it.

i gave it my all,
i tried my best
but it failed the test

she discarded my gifts,
and my friends teased.

All because i was away.
and her feelings swayed.
Still healing from that day,

I saw her with another.

with flowers and chocolate.

I tried to look somewhere else

It was then I knew that I can't.

To me,she was still attractive
even after all those atrocities.
to me.

All that i could do now was to gawk in jealousy.
for all that I could do was to hide behind a tree.

this is my jealousy.

Not trying to insinuate anything but that is my first poem too(:
and yea,this is something i could predict of my future..
"even after all those atrocities.
to me."
i'm not very sure if that phrase was suitable for the poem.
can anyone tell me if it is?

Good poem...however I think the second stanza requires an extra line...

Have you read mine? Inspired by real life.....

There are here!

KingRyan