So in the year 2552, in crows nest, thy had Master Chief, Terrence Hood, Miranda Keyes, Sergeant Johnson and Cortana all sitting in a chair except for Cortana, she was on the table. They we're all in the operation center.
Master Chief: We cannot stop the Covenant. Its a strong team of aliens. Mostly, there hunters. They are too strong mostly when i'm surely the only Spartan alive. Terrence Hood:Master Chief, Keep on the confidence. We will send you a warthog and a mongoose from a pelican to go to the Covenant. We need to shut down 3 towers so that they won't produce anymore flood forms. Miranda Keyes:Right, the flood. So are you saying that, to make flood forms, we need to shut down those barriers? Terrence Hood:Yes, after shutting down those 3 barriers, ill send you 1 pelican so you could come back after your mission if you survive. But, if we shut down those 3 barriers, it won't be over. After, we will need to destroy the prophet of truth, also there cave of flood forms then all the flood forms will be completely gone. After the ship came with thousands of flood, that was annoying before. Now, we will crush them. After that, we will need to team up or maybe not with the elites to destroy the covenant and brutes. Who knows what could happen. Sergeant Johnson:So what are you preparing as weaponry for us. Terrence Hood:Sergeant Johnson, it will be dangerous for you. We are sending 1 pelican with a mongoose inside it with a warthog getting hold outside of it and 4 marines. Not including the pilot. Also, we will give to each marines a assault rifle or battle rifle. To you Master Chief, you will have a sniper rifle and a assault rifle with 2 frag grenades and a bubble shield. We will start tomorrow. Master Chief: Thanks Terrence Hood
1) Use more punctutation. * 2) Spacings between paragraphs. 3) An introduction since it is the first part.
* If you intend to, and you write in Word, copy and paste the whole story, put it in notepad and change all punctuation. AG can't read symbols and punctuations from Word.
1.I think there is allot of punctuations. Who really would care anyways if they don't have allot??? 2.I did one spacing. Don't feel like doing too much for no reason. Ill only do it if I have to. 3.Well the prologue!!! It is a introduction.
Anyways heres the story:
Chapter 1: The Start-off
The next day...
Master Chief wakes up. He was still in his armor. No pajama's. So he did a little run around the crows nest to check around if everything is safe and fine. Everything was what he expected like usually. Just safe, fine and many marines sleeping. So then, Master Chief went in the Pelican and saw Terrence Hood just waiting with his Shot gun on his shoulders.
He went to him and said:Hey Terrence Hood, is everyone ready for the mission? I'm completely ready. Terrence Hood:Yes, we are all waiting for you since like 10 minutes. Sometimes, i don't like it when your late. Anyways, come in!
Master Chief walks inside the pelican. The pelican starts-off by flying in the air with a warthog. Terrence Hood waves bye-bye to Master Chief waves him bye-bye too. So the Pelican got out of crows nest. It went to space. All went good then they went to the Covenant. They landed at a tower. All the way on top of it. Then Master Chief got out and then 2 marines with a assault rifle came out. Then the 2 other marines with a battle rifle came out. When the pelican was gonna get out of there, a AA wraith shot some fuel rods at it. It got damaged. When it was in the sky, Master Chief and the Marines were nervous because it got destroyed.
... Perhaps you should consider writing works of fiction using your own characters. Not to offend (too much) but you're a bit far from the source material, and the established personalities didn't seem to show themselves in your work.
My opinions on what people would or wouldn't say/do aside (like taking a little run around the crows nest, oh how pleasant), your grammar is poor. That more than anything else makes it extremely hard to take your story seriously.
So Master Chief was nervous and the marines too. They we're all asking them self about how we're they gonna get out.
Master Chief with a disappointed head says:"Marines lets move now. We don't have time to stay here. Marine #1:"But whats the point. We will lose anyways. Us 5 versus like 300 ugly creatures."
All the marines starts shouting to each other and saying that they aren't well prepared to attack and that they should stay here doing nothing...Except for one marine (#2) that came up to Master Chief and said: "Ok Lets move.". Then he shouted:"Marines, if we stay here, flood forms will come. We got to go and disable the 3 towers.Quick!" Marine #3:"Are you sure you would actually want to get eaten by those big flood forms. Just by touching them its nasty." Marine #2:"HEY! Do you go to this marine training to get wuss out or to fight and protect yourself!"
Marine #3 gets blow up by the brute shot of a brute flood form.
Master Chief:"Marines, quick lets enter!"
So they all run inside. Master Chief was the first to enter with his assault rifle aiming through the front. But when he was going to the door. It didn't open. It should of. But some brutes locked the doors to make sure no flood forms comes.
Master Chief:"Marines protect the entrance. Get ready because flood forms will come. Everyone, ready your weapons!"
Everyone gets there assault rifle except for one with a battle rifle. And Master Chief was with his sniper rifle. Just waiting there. After a half a hour, nothing came, not even a noise. Just the noise of the wind. Then, what came was a small tank flood form. It was big. The Marines said:"Throw your grenades!". But they didn't have any. Just master chief. So he throwed one frag grenade. Then allot of human and elite flood forms came.
"Quick! Try to open something." said marine #5. Master Chief exclaimed:There, there is rocks. Place them as walls.
The marines and master chief got many rocks and drop there weapons. The wall wasn't high enough so infection forms came in. It ate up 1 marine (#4 with a assault rifle.) Now theres just marine #1 and 2. One with a battle rifle and the other with a assault rifle. Also Master Chief for sure. Master got his last frag grenade and throwed it on top of the rocks. Then marine #1 killed his friend that was getting eaten by a infection form. Also, he killed the infection form. So after, they took at the rocks and made sure that they won't even have a small entrance for any flood forms to come.
Master Chief whispers to each marines:"Ok, heres the plan. We break the glass of the door. Then we go to the elevator and then we go up and shut down the tower #1." Marine #1:"Yes sire. But about our warthog and mongoose, do you think it might be destroyed." Master Chief:"Yes probably, but its ok now. We would just walk. IF WE SURVIVE... To be continued
So Master Chief Exclaimed:" 1, 2 , 3 CHARGE! " Master chief entered and saw 2 brutes guarding the other doors but except for the door that they entered by. Marine #5 screamed: " CHARGE!" While they we're near the brutes.
A brute turned around got his spike grenade and throwed it at the Marine #2. Master Chief back-off and pushed the marine on the two brutes. Then, the 2 brutes died and also the marine that had a assault rifle.
Master Chief madly said: " Wtf! Why did you had to scream! We are in a mission to shut down the towers! If you do this again, you will see what could happen! " Marine #5 : "Sorry Chief. I though we we're gonna do a violent surprise attack " Master Chief: "This is no time for charging like what i just said before. I know it was my mistake but still, we are in war so you have to think!" Marine #5: "Yes Chief!"
Master Chief and the marine entered a door. The door automatically open. Then, Master Chief crouch while the marine sticked into a wall. They we're silently going to a grunt with his plasma pistol. Two meters left... Then when Master Chief used his fist, a drone saw him. then, the whole army of 10 drones came! The marine #5 throwed a random plasma grenade that he took from the grunt and throwed it at a drone. It sticked the drone and it killed 3 of them.
Master Chief Screamed: "RUN!" The marine #5 and Master Chief escaped until the rocks. He saw lots of flood forms and flood tanks. They ate the marine. then 5 drones came and sticked into the tank forms. Then, they ate them up! So Master Chief run back inside and easily killed both drones with his assault rifle. He climbed some stairs and waited. He was also hiding.
He saw a big war of 13 infection forms. 3 tank forms of infection and 5 infected drones. In the other side, they had 2 hunters, 5 brutes with each a brute shot, 1 grunt with a needler and 2 jackals sniping with a beam rifle. The 2 hunters just took there weapon and owned every small annoying infection forms. The 5 drone forms we're flying and got the 2 jackals but the jackals killed 1 drone while they we're sniping. The grunt ran away and the brutes we're owning the 3 tank forms with there brute shot. Then, a elite flood form jump from the top of a structure and jumped and infected 2 brutes. The brutes wasn't turning into a food form because its only infection forms that could do that. So now, they have 4 drone forms, 1 tank form and 1 elite form. And, 2 hunters, 3 brutes and 1 grunt with actually 2 plasma grenades but he was hiding behind the stairs of the other side. So the elite form took his plasma rifle and killed 1 brute. The other brutes got there brute shot and charged with there brute shot after the elite form. Then, all the flood drones killed the brutes. The hunters killed the tank form with there gun and then the flood drones did a circle and slowly killed a hunter. The other hunter killed 2 flood drones and then the 2 flood drones killed the last hunter. Then, the grunt came out and throwed the 2 plasma grenades in the air randomly. He was running away and then 1 grenade killed both flood drones and the other one went on the grunt. So no noise or alive people. Just Master Chief.
So, he silently went to the elevator like a thief. He activated the elevator and went up. To be continued!
Well, the prologue was in May 2nd. Then, the other was in may 3rd at around 1 Pm. And then, the other one was like 12 hours after and they had comments so i made another one. Then, the next one was a week later. Ill make my Chapter 4 in May 12. I'm getting some ideas.
