1st; The word caps are awful. At least 500-2000 words. 2nd. Themes are limiting. 3rd. People should be able to start submitting entries now. 4th. Adding an adjective into the theme makes it an opinion mater as to whether it qualifies or not, which muddles the judging. 5th. Also, one judge would be the best because three would have very differing opinions.
The ringing of gunfire echoed throughout the battlefield, men fell in their own pools of blood. The thumping of lead hitting the crude pillar a group of dirty, sweaty, tired men used as cover. The constant pounding, and the constant bullet whizzing over-head kept the men tense and on their toes. They could do nothing else except feel the strain of cement breaking off every second, feeling the pillar weaken with every bone crushing bullet.
One of the men braved himself and took a leap of faith, getting out of cover he took a quick look in the direction of the bullets. Just as he was about to sit down, he felt his head go numb and the pain set in. His eyes blanked out for a second, then he regained. He was in extraordinary pain now, feeling a liquid dripping down, the last sight he would ever see. The man died then and there, in his own pool of blood.
This caused an up-roar and bullets were now exchanged from behind the pillar & the hill of death. Men continued to fall, every minuet or so a man would scream in pain and fall to the ground with a thunderous thump. The hot shells of their bullets continued to spill, smoke oozing from their weapons. The stench of death was in the air, and the salty smell of blood was close behind.
After a few more hard and life threatening hours, the battlefield became silent, no more was the sound of bullets firing, no more the sound of bodies hitting the pavement. No more, was the death & destruction that had come upon this field. Yet the hill still remained, and the men on the hill lay lifelessâ¦â¦.
Sorry if it passed the limit, but the limit is too small!
Son, writing is one of the greatest skills you could recive. You will need it for the rest of your lifetime, and it can open doors to places you never knew you had within you.
Nah I'm a bit too lazy to waste my time lol.[/quote
Tch. ------------ [quote]What about my story? Anyone?
I'll look at it in a sec. --------
Yes that just means that you cannot be in the competition
I'll enter thoad's then. --------
Sure you can offer criticism....I know I need all the help I can get.
Most of the hiccups in your story are grammatical. This makes it a bit harder to read in places. Also, the story can have a lot of adverbs in places, which kind of obstructs the flow of the piecce some. That's really all for now, though. More CC at the judging, if anyone enters.
