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umkay... I've seen a lot of people doing things like this (namely Jezz).

I have decided to make a thread to hold my ideas, stories, and notes to self... Right now, I have nothing finished, but I've got a few Ideas in store.

unless someone wants me to post my WoM character sheet. I may or may not do that. so, stay tuned.

1st order of business:
memo: Idea for horror story; man discovers reason for mysterious power outages in his neighborhood.

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The Blackout Murder
Part 2: In which Detective Spencer suspects foul play

A group of Policemen and their cars were outside on the Chandlersâ lawn.

âCause of death?â The gruff voice came from Captain Stephen Randall, captain of the local homicide unit.
He was a tall, tough-looking guy with broad shoulders, with light hair and a rugged face. He had green eyes and an emotionless mouth. His years of homicide work had hardened him. He had on a gray suit over a white button-up shirt, complete with slacks. He had a nice attitude, with a good sense of humor, but he was no-nonsense when it came to his work.

âUh⦠Stab wound to the heart by a knife,â Stephenâs lieutenant, Stanley Fairbanks replied. âWe think that while he was taking a knife to the dinner table, the power went out, he slipped, fell, and landed on the knife.â

Stanley was scrawny and meek-looking, especially compared to his commanding officer. Kind of short, pretty skinny, and he had a thin face. He didnât have too many distinguishing features, except His ears were larger than those of the average person. He was much more laid-back than Stephen, and didnât always stick to the subject, but he got his work done.

âOh, yeah? How do you know the wife didnât kill him?â

âItâs not possible. She was at the shopping mall when he was killed. He was just getting home from work, and she had already eaten. Besides that, there isnât a motive.â

âAnd thereâs no evidence of an intruder or a struggle?â

âNope. No fingerprints, no broken glass, no footprints⦠It all just seems to be a massive fluke.â

âItâs too bad,â Said the captain, accompanied by a heavy sigh, âI was hoping for something interesting. Nothing ever happens in this rinky-dink little town. â

Just then, Gerard arrived on the scene. He approached his colleagues. Gerard worked with The two whenever they were having trouble, but he decided to pop in and check out the case.

âSo, old Masonâs dead, huh?â He looked up at the door to the house. âItâs too bad. I heard he just surprised Ellie with a pool.â He chuckled to himself, âHe told me just the other day that she said no, but old Mason insisted.â

âThat is too bad,â said Stephen.

âMaybe I should get a pool,â said Stanley. The lieutenantâs rambling mind was his fatal flaw.

âHey, one of my friends is dead. Letâs be a little more respectful.â

âSorry, Ger,â was Stanleyâs reply. He knew Gerard hated that nickname, but didnât seem to care.

Gerard continued, âLetâs move on. What time did he die, Steve?â

âWe think sometime between 7:30 and 8:00. He had a meeting and didnât get home until around 7:15 and probably began to make dinner about 15-45 minutes later. The power went out three times between 7:30 and 8:00.â

Gerard had already asked Ellie what happened, and didnât bother asking how he died. âMind if I check out the body before your guys take it away, Steve?â

âNot a problem, heâs right in the kitchen.â

***

âSo, the knife pierced right through his heart? That seems unlikely, to say the least.â

âWell, itâs the only logical explanation, since he was the only person here.â Stanley wasnât too sure of it either, but it was all he had to work with.

âSo, how did he fall? The power was only out for about 3 seconds.â

âTake a look near the floor. Thereâs a puddle of water right by his feet. Do you see it? He probably didnât notice it when the lights went out and slipped in it. He dropped the knife and landed on it.â

âOh, yeah- wait a second, itâs perfectly rounded at the edges. No slide marks or anything. And his shoes arenât even wet. Besides, if the lights were out for about 3 seconds at a time, I think he would have noticed it before.â

âOh, say, we didnât notice that.â Said Stephen, slightly dumbfounded, âBut it doesnât change anything. There wasnât anybody home but Mason. We even have Ellieâs Credit card records that prove she didnât murder anybody- She bought $117 worth of clothes at Dillardâs at 7:21, a $40 microwave from Searâs at 7:37 and a $55 pair of shoes from PayLess at 7:57. Itâs just not possible, and the lack of motive makes it even less possible.â Captain Randall had this all jotted down in his notepad.

Gerard shook his head in contemplation before responding.
âWell, maybe that is the case. Maybe this is just a horrible accident, but Iâm having some slight doubts. This just doesnât feel right⦠Go ahead and take the body away, Iâll stay alert until I can find out exactly what happened.â He stared through the window, unmoving. âNothing like this has happened in this town since Tony Stain went missing.â

Everyone stood silent for a moment, before Stephen spoke up.

âAlright, weâd better carry this body away before it rots up the place. Go home, Gerard, get some rest. You need it.â
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Sorry if there are any mistakes or weird symbols. I tried to use Notepad, so Spellcheck didn't apply. I still went through and corrected everything that I caught.

Again, hope y'all like it! Part 3 coming... probably saturday.

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Erm... sorry... Imma post this version that doesn't have the symbols now.

The Blackout Murder
Part 2: In which Detective Spencer suspects foul play

A group of Policemen and their cars were outside on the Chandlers' lawn.

"Cause of death?" The gruff voice came from Captain Stephen Randall, captain of the local homicide unit.

He was a tall, tough-looking guy with broad shoulders, with light hair and a rugged face. He had green eyes and an emotionless mouth. His years of homicide work had hardened him. He had on a gray suit over a white button-up shirt, complete with slacks. He had a nice attitude, with a good sense of humor, but he was no-nonsense when it came to his work.

"Uh... Piercing wound to the heart by a knife," Stephen's lieutenant, Stanley Fairbanks replied. "We think that while he was taking a knife to the dinner table, the power went out, he slipped, fell, and landed on the knife."

Stanley was scrawny and meek-looking, especially compared to his commanding officer. Kind of short, pretty skinny, and he had a thin face. He didn't have too many distinguishing features, except His ears were larger than those of the average person. He was much more laid-back than Stephen, and didn't always stick to the subject, but he got his work done.
"Oh, yeah? How do you know the wife didn't kill him?"

"It's not possible. She was at the shopping mall when he was killed. He was just getting home from work, and she had already eaten. Besides that, there isn't a motive."

"And there's no evidence of an intruder or a struggle?"

"Nope. No fingerprints, no broken glass, no footprints... It all just seems to be a massive fluke."

"It's too bad,"Said the captain, accompanied by a heavy sigh, " was hoping for something interesting. Nothing ever happens in this rinky-dink little town."

Just then, Gerard arrived on the scene. He approached his colleagues, Stanley and Stephen. He had worked with The two whenever they were having trouble with one of their cases, but he decided to pop in and check out the case since it was just across the street.

"So, old Mason's dead, huh?" He looked up at the door to the house. "It's too bad. I heard he just surprised Ellie with a pool." He chuckled to himself, "He told me just the other day that she said no, but old Mason insisted."

"That is too bad," said Stephen.

"Maybe I should get a pool," said Stanley. The lieutenant's rambling mind was his fatal flaw.

"Hey, one of my friends is dead. Let's be a little more respectful."

"Sorry, Ger," was Stanley's reply. He knew Gerard hated that nickname, but didn't seem to care.

Gerard continued, "Let's move on. What time did he die, Steve?"
"We think sometime between 7:30 and 8:00. He had a meeting and didn't get home until around 7:15 and probably began to make dinner about 15-45 minutes later. The power went out three times between 7:30 and 8:00."

Gerard had already asked Ellie what happened, and didn't bother asking how he died again. "Mind if I check out the body before your guys take it away, Steve?"

"Not a problem, he�s right in the kitchen."

***

"So, the knife pierced right through his heart? That seems unlikely, to say the least."

"Well, it's the only logical explanation, since he was the only person here." Stanley wasn"t too sure of it either, but it was all he had to work with.

"So, how did he fall? The power was only out for about 3 seconds."

"Take a look near the floor. There is a puddle of water right by his feet. Do you see it? He probably didn't notice it when the lights went out and slipped in it. He dropped the knife and landed on it."

"Oh, yeah- wait a second, it's perfectly rounded at the edges. No slide marks or anything. And his shoes aren't even wet. Besides, if the lights were out for about 3 seconds at a time, I think he would have noticed it before."

"Oh, say, we didn't notice that." Said Stephen, slightly dumbfounded, "But it doesn't change anything. There wasn't anybody home but Mason. We even have Ellie's Credit card records to prove she didn't murder anybody- She bought $117 worth of clothes at Penny's at 7:21, a $40 microwave from Sear's at 7:37 and a $55 pair of shoes from PayLess at 7:57. It's just not possible, and the lack of motive makes it even less possible." Captain Randall had this all jotted down in his notepad.

Gerard shook his head in contemplation before responding.
"Well, maybe that is the case. Maybe this is just a horrible accident, but I'm having some slight doubts. whatever it is, this doesn't feel right... Go ahead and take the body away, I'll stay alert until I can find out exactly what happened." He stared through the window, unmoving. "Nothing like this has happened in this town since Tony Stain went missing."

Everyone stood silent for a moment, before Stephen spoke up.

"Alright, we'd better carry this body away before it rots up the place. Go home, Gerard, get some rest. You need it."
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Sorry, again... I added a few minor changes to the wording, but, hopefully, I fixed the screwed up symbols.

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Ahhh thats good.
I think it was murder... *shifty eyes*
But who killed him?
OMGz...
How did he die?

Manta, you tell good storiezz ^^

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How did he die?


Knife through the chest. the police think he tripped and landed on the knife while he was holding it (which sounds stupid, but there are weirder case files from police) but you'll be surprizzzzzzed...

And, now, a public service announcement:
Imma make an attempt at writing a song (Instruments and all!)! I'll be using Finale Song writer, and... ummm... huh. I have no idea how I'll ever get it on this site...
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Wait. I understood how he died I meant who killed him :P
Sorry.
*can't wait for the third part*!

Why don't you put it on youtube or something and give us a link?

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ohh... Whoops.

*Realizes his need for more sleep*

Oh, hey... good idea Jezz. I'll do that when I can. It's nothing special, I was just playing around with some chords on my pwnlectric guitar and I liked the sound of it... thought I would experiment with some other instruments, too.

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GO MANTA!

jezz
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dudeguy.. thats spam.
Make your posts longer that 7 words, kay?

I was just playing around with some chords on my pwnlectric guitar and I liked the sound of it... thought I would experiment with some other instruments, too.

Ahh thats cool. Can't wait to hear it!
Have you just got guitar at the moment?
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Well, I only play guitar and I kind of know drums, but Finale Songwriter lets me pick out instrumentals that go along well with what I write for my guitar.

It's really effective.

@Dudeguy: Thank yeh! but Imma have to agree with Jess... Plz dun spam in meh thread, K?

Kthxbai.

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So how many instruments ya play, Manta?

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Any type of guitar ('cept bass), and the french horn... not a fun instrument.

and now, for the sake of getting it off my chest...

~A List of Things That Bug Me~
-Dried up ketchup on the lid
-conceited and cocky people
-Studio audiences
-people who wear their pants way, way too low
-Bad grammar
-Being bested at my own game
-People who get no respect until you find out their pot heads (Happens at my school)
-Traffic lights that last upwards of 1 minute
-Crowds
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I feel better now, actually...

Don't worry. Real literature is coming this weekend.

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The way you word some sentences is interesting.

I like it.

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Sorry guize! I'm a procrastinator. No denying it. But I can guarantee I'll have part 3 up by Wednesday. And if I don't have it up by tomorrow afternoon... Feel free to facepalm me. Unkay?

Kthnxbai!

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~The Blackout Murder Part 3~
In which our hero decides to question Mr. Johann.

Gerard decided that if he was ever going to find out what was going on, he needed to ask around. But he had no idea where to start. There were no witnesses at all. So, that only left people that were nearby when the murder happened.

Everyone was home at the time, as it happened, so Gerard would ask Ellie's neighbors. She had three; one to the left, one to the right, and one behind her. He thought he'd ask Mr. Johann, Her neighbor to the left, first.

Mr. Johann was watching tv in the den when he heard a knock on his front door. "Damn... The IRS is after me again!" He pulled the door open and was face-to-chest with Gerard.

Mr. Johann was a very small man, and he was in his mid-50s. His wife had inexplicably divorced him last year (and managed to remarry 1 month later), but he lived neear his son, So he wasn't totally alone.

"Listen, you, I pay my taxes just like any other U.S. citizen!" He began to raise raise a fist.

Gerard interrupted the disoriented-looking man. "Hey! Stop! I'm here to question you about the accident yesterday!"

Mr. Johann paused for a moment, then continued his attack on the "IRS agent."

The confused and slightly angry detective was forced to subdue the equally confused man. He grabbed the oncoming fist, turned Mr. Johann around, and held his arm behind his back. "Listen to me. I am not whoever you think I am. I am Detective Gerard Spencer, and I am here to ask you about the fatal accident yesterday. Now, will you cooperate with me or not? Because if you don't, I will call the cops on you for attempted assault." Gerard wasn't even entirely sure if that was even a real charge, but as long as Johann didn't either, it didn't matter.

The Little man agreed.
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"So, Mr Johann, you were home yesterday between 7:00 and 8:00, correct?"

"Yes, That's right. The game was on. The Cowboys vs. The Red Sox, don't you know?"

Gerard wanted to correct him, but he didn't know what Johann meant to say in the first place. "Right... So, did you see or hear anything suspicious?"

"Like what?"

"Did you hear any loud noises or signs of a struggle, or maybe see someone out late at night carrying something?"

"Now that you mention it... I heard a pair of tires screeching next door. It sounded like they were in a tremendous hurry."

"That's good! Could you tell which neighbor it came from?"

"The young lady who lives to the right of me. I reckon she was trying to beat traffic." Mr. Johann sat in contemplation for a moment. "Why are you questioning me, anyway? The police are convinced it's an accident."

"I just need to make sure of eactly what happened. I don't want to let a criminal go on without consequences." Gerard carried on, "So you didn't see or hear anything else? Nothing?"

"Nope. Just some screeching tires."

Gerard jotted that down. "Ok, well thank you for your forced cooperaton. ...And, a tip: don't punch The IRS, ok?"

"No promises," he said, rather gruffly.

Gerard Made his way to the next neighbor, a Schulz family.
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I finally made part 3, everyone! Criticism is welcomed, but please refrain from insulting me.

Again, hope ya'll liked it!

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Go manta! Nice guy. You know what would be great? If you look at my thread. I dare you.

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