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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'
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Spam? How the hell is this anything like canned meat? As to the judging, I believe EnterOrion is the judge, correct? If he is going to judge he needs to get a move on.
Patience, dammit. Judging isn't something that should be rushed.
Considering I'll be up the next 18 hours, I'll judge anyways.
I think I swallowed poison (or something that doesn't belong in me). D:
I feel like crap.
Judging is underway.
Hard judging. Again.
You are all too good at this.
Wrong Syllable Count otherwise it would have placed third award - TSL3_needed
Crushing pressure kills me
Snuffing my very life out
May as well die now
Seriously. Award says it all.
Refrigerator? - Graham
Pressure hurts me lots.
I wrote haikus about it.
Refrigerator.
I'm not even going to ask, that was so random. I lol'd though. Literally.
No More Breath Award - Thyll
I let the air out
Lungs constricted, can't get more
I writhe in the pain
Very good. Easily placed. I like the second line in particular.
I'll finish this tomorrow. I think I need to go . . . .
No these, are not placements.
No I thought you were going to judge it all! I got my hopes up for nothing! D:
[quote=EnterOrion]I'll finish this tomorrow. I think I need to go . . . .[/quote]
Well, it is going to be all here. Now.
No I thought you were going to judge it all! I got my hopes up for nothing! D:
That's one of the reasons I posted it instead of leaving. xD
Anxiety lulz.
Anyways. Finish:
Cheating Award - beastahayes
Beads of sweat roll down
I look down at his paper
The teacher calls me
I've totally been through that. Other than the getting called out part.
Stationary Award - Armpit
From every angle
Invisible walls close in
So I don't float off
I sorta got the feeling that the walls were there to keep you stationary. Good. Made me think.
Innuendo Award - Krizaz
It's always up there
It's always telling me how
Pressure, you suck balls
That was perverted for some reason. xD
Altitude Award - Dudeguy
My ears start to pop
Wether it be sea bottom
or acending plane
That is most certainly true.
Hyperventilation Award - Ernie
Hyperventilate
Seventy breaths per minute
Don't force this on me!
*claps* Awesome. Very good. Nice flow and vocabulary.
Measurement Award - aknerd
Moles, R, and Kelvin
Over Volume in liters
Pressure is simple
I don't get this one in the slightest beyond some kind of measurement. Now my head hurts.
Crushing Award - TerryLasVegas
Isobars dancing
As the record is broken
And the earth is crushed
That would have to be one hell of a pressure storm.
Fighting Award - FloydTC
I feel the pressure
of my fist against your face
you have a fat head
I lol'd. Whether I was supposed to, I don't know. But I did.
Pessimistic Award - MoonFairy
The crushing pressure
Keeps building up on us both
We should tell the truth.
Quit being so pessimistic. Makes me sad. D:
As for the poem, it's good.
Over Expecting Award - DrElmer
I've been pushed too far
More is expected of me
Than I can pull off
That happens all too often . . . .
Struggle Award - Teeheegirl
Everyone watching
Success or failure awaits
Too late to back down
It's good, 'nuff said.
Literal and Figurative Award - Samy
Diet coke and mentos
Or society and peers
Which is your pressure?
Nice. Very well done. I like the comparison between literal and figurative.
Is there? - XVERB
Tell me what to do?
don't pressure me into it!
theres too much pressure
Yes there is. Lol.
Conqueror Award - Parsat
Standing above clouds
The roof of the world conquered
Air too thin to breathe
This one was very good. Each line. Very good.
Power Award - FallenSky
Sky crumbles and fall
The cloudless panorama
Is one of no dreams
For some reason I got the feeling that this one was about positions of power. Hm.
Concrete Award - thepossum
Pressure is a beast,
A beast with various forms,
Abstract yet concrete.
I'll count it this time, only cause I was late and that would sorta make me a hypocrite if I didn't let you because you were late. Try to be on time though.
It's good. For sure.
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That's it for general awards. Now for a top 5. This is very hard, let me assure you. But that's mostly because I aim to please everyone.
Anyways, Bronze - MoonFairy
The crushing pressure
Keeps building up on us both
We should tell the truth.
Silver - Teeheegirl
Everyone watching
Success or failure awaits
Too late to back down
Gold - Parsat
Standing above clouds
The roof of the world conquered
Air too thin to breathe
Platinum - Ernie
Hyperventilate
Seventy breaths per minute
Don't force this on me!
Diamond and the merit winner - FallenSky
Sky crumbles and fall
The cloudless panorama
Is one of no dreams
Congratulations the winners. Of course, as always with me, if anyone has any issues I'll try my best to resolve them. Also counts if you want to know where you placed relative to everyone else or want more in depth criticism. Just message my profile.
New theme is Imperfection, and Ernie will set the deadline.
Enjoy.
@ thepossum, 'tis a smudge had me almost crying cause I was laughing s hard.
@FallenSky, Congratulations!
My haiku think will be someone OCD.
ERASEITERASEIT
Markings on the sheet.
Are making my eye twitchy.
It must dissapear.
Can't you imagine some neat freak in class staring at a mark on a paper and their eye twitching? XD That was my inspiration ^^
Congratz fallen I guess Orion got your symbolisim way bettr than I did; the the hiaku was still fantastic though
I don't get this one in the slightest beyond some kind of measurement. Now my head hurts.
I just haiku'd the ideal gas law.
Pressure (of a gas) X volume (in liters) = moles (1 mole (n) = 6.022 x 10^23 atoms or molecules) x constant "r" x temperature (in kelvin, which is just centigrade + 273 degrees).
or PV=NRT
or P = (NRT)/V
Now you know.
Well I'd like to conngratulate everyone for their fabulous entry.
A big thank you to EnterOrion for giving me a chance, this was my first haiku post on this thread so I was pretty nervous to go against all the usual participants ^^.
I wish you all good luck on the next theme!
No am perFcet i,;
like me I do am yodasS
avants no me good.
or if you'd prefer a deep meaningful phonyness.
Catatonia
Cognitive Cacophony
I cherish my faults.
Pressure (of a gas) X volume (in liters) = moles (1 mole (n) = 6.022 x 10^23 atoms or molecules) x constant "r" x temperature (in kelvin, which is just centigrade + 273 degrees).
Now I get it.
My head hurts from getting it though. D:
I've never heard of that though. So yes, it was very informative.
Now here's my entry.
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Surface
The pristine ocean
Home to the keenest of reefs
The boat sank promptly
Concrete, smog and death
nirvana, trees and wildlife
But on is perfect
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