ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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EmperorPalpatine
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That doesn't make it any less of a nonessential parenthetical element [can be re/moved without changing the essential meaning of the sentence], which requires commas. link, link.

rayoflight3
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This is going in circles. That rule does not apply in this case. Why? Revisit the two versions:

1. Winter finally is here.
2. Winter is finally here.

Again, I ask: Assuming that the rule applies here, why is it that that the first version must be set off by commas, but the second version doesn't? Yes, the "finally" in the first sentence is an interrupting modifier, but as I noted above, commas do not resolve the interruption. In fact, they obstruct the flow even more, if anything. The rule described by your two links generally does not apply to adverbs.

And as I said before, in MIT link, the author specifically wrote, "you can often get away with interrupting the structure of the sentence with a short (one-word) modifier." This is one of those situations.

I'm done here. If you wish, you may continue this on my profile, though I'm not sure how else to convince you.

murasaki9
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This is a pointless discussion. I'm sorry, but it is. Just let people submit and if their haikus are incorrect grammatically or whatever, hey, they don't have to win the contest.

rayoflight3
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This is a pointless discussion. I'm sorry, but it is. Just let people submit and if their haikus are incorrect grammatically or whatever, hey, they don't have to win the contest.


The discussion has been transferred over to our respective profiles, but I don't think it's pointless. Wouldn't you agree that participants deserve a fair judging of their haikus? Docking points for trivial grammar mistakes is a petty way of judging, in my opinion. Plus, if the judges are going to scrutinize the haikus for grammar, you guys should have a mastery of grammar rules.

Like, you need a comma after "submit" in your second sentence. That's how stupid this grammar thing is. But I do agree that egregious mistakes are different and should count against the author.
EmperorPalpatine
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After further research, xerox's haiku will be accepted, but it contains weak structure and I advise improving it, although there will be no penalty if it remains unchanged.

Arceus12
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Ok EmperorPalpatine here is the full haiku whith the necesairy modifications

Paradise in ice,
Like an ice-cold block of ice
They live in ice now

nichodemus
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Popsicle

Pleasing shade of pink,
Scent of the blazing tropics,
Yet cool on the tongue.

nichodemus
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I hope I'm not too late! I don't know what time it is in the US now.

EmperorPalpatine
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No worries. Over 11hrs left.

nichodemus
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Ah, that's a relief. I presume the next one will be Xmas themed?

EmperorPalpatine
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I should be able to judge this round on Saturday. The new theme should be up then.

I presume the next one will be Xmas themed?

It's a bit late for Hanukkah.
GhostOfHorror
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Oh, I completely forgot about this. I'll try get something in before midnight.

MagicTree
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Blissful Cold

Blissful cold freezes,
Shards of ice make a mosaic
Snow rests, soft and silent
It's been a while.

MagicTree
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It's been a while.

Is not part of the haiku. Sorry.
I just wanted to say that it's been a while since I did one.
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So call'd paradise!
A white demon's tyranny
Traps hope down, frozen

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