ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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EnterOrion
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No placement? Not even a mention? Hmm...makes me feel that it isn't worth entering this round...


Not everyone gets placed in competitions, or even mentioned. Ever.

I would prefer you guys ask for criticism in private. Less clutter for the thread.

Having reviewed Parsat's haiku, the 8th line does in fact have eight syllables. Therefore, 2nd place is now first, and wins. This means Bronze wins!

I'll give you guys criticism shortly. Well, tomorrow, actually. Right now isn't a good time to do any super hard thinking or judging for me. I'm quite tired.
Parsat
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Blacksmith

Actually, "-ire" sounds count as one syllable, as I found when I judged the poetry contest about tankas. Please refer to the dictionary for reference.

EnterOrion
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Nomad

In which case, judging overruled.

I hate the English language. -.-

Kyouzou
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Jester

I second that motion! And doesn't everybody, I still get laughed at when my accent decides to rear its head unconditionally.

Cenere
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Jester

Okay, what, seriously. Who won? Parsat? Or Bronze??

Kyouzou
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Jester

I think we're going with Parsat

Bronze
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Shepherd

Well dangit EO, I took your word for gold. Sorry Cen.

Parsat wins!

playaholic
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Farmer

whoops typo there

when a lady falls,
i dash right to her side,
thats service to me

ok,i know i really suck now...

EnterOrion
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i dash right to her side,


6 syllables.
XVERB
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Nomad

service? uhh well i give this a shot. its my first try tho. don't lol at me):

the snow was heavy
as it was deep but a man
came to dig me out

i meant dig me out of the snow. i only had a few words / :

Freakenstein
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Orion, remember the first ones made, right as soon as you made the theme! ;-)

EnterOrion
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Orion, remember the first ones made, right as soon as you made the theme! ;-)


I do/did.
Bronze
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Shepherd

Just take a moment
You've come o'er hills and vast plains
For one last battle

Meh...

Ernie15
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"Waiter, I want ice."
"Would you like some food with that?"
"No thanks, just serve ice."

Pun-tastic.

XVERB
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haha haha ha ha he ahhhh.. i hate puns } :<

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