ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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Kyouzou
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haha floyd nice one, I give that credit just for pure comedic value

Yodadude53
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Whoosh! Goes a huge wave
Poseidon controls water
So don't mess with him.

Yodadude53
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I'll enter a new one:
Deep and treacherous
A deadly wave comes crashing
Down the sandy shore

Armpit
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Water is easy
I've already mastered it
What do I do now?

Armpit
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Armpit!

Snow is no object
As no snow knows no limits
And snow's nose so cold

Last line is 6 syllables


Wrong! Count them again. Five one-syllable words can't possibly equal six syllables. Count more carefully next time, because it's your terrible math skills that are costing me this contest.
Sargantfrosty
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Many have attempted
The only one victor though
Is just a big rock

lulz
Yeah I'm talking about the moon btw... just making sure you knew that o.O.

Teeheegirl123
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There is no more hope
My eyes close for the last time
My soul swims away

This is my final entry

Teeheegirl123
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*sigh* Wait, change that to,

Water controls me
My eyes close for the last time
My soul swims away

Ernie15
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Why did that entry make me think of Ponyo? :P

I guess I won't win now. Swimming souls beat crashing waves any day.

Parsat
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Based on The Sorcerer's Apprentice from Fantasia/Fantasia 2000.

Endless line of brooms
Waves splashing out of control
The sorcerer's hat

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Lol, I haven't wrote a haiku ever:

As the water sleeps
The ocean still wields it power
Hungrily licking land

Based on waves (I wanted to do tsunamis, but that wouldn't fit), and how they 'hungrily' lick the land every day and night. Fun to write Haikus, I must say.

Yodadude53
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Unlimitedpower, that was pretty good for a first haiku! To be honest, it's better than mine. :P

Ernie15
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The ocean still wields it power


I counted 8 syllables there.

Hungrily licking land


I counted 6 here. May want to revise it a bit...
Kyouzou
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Hey Unlimited before you repost i'm pretty sure you meant its in the second line

ulimitedpower
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(Can someone delete my other post? This is a corrected version of my post)

Darn, how an I miss 'one' word in my Haiku, that is important?


I counted 8 syllables there.


Yeah, I noticed it in the first line. I was going to make sure not to write 'The' before, but my grammar corrector (The one in my head) subconsciously put it there.

Hey Unlimited before you repost i'm pretty sure you meant its in the second line


Thanks! I appreciate that helpful insight to my haiku.

I counted 6 here. May want to revise it a bit...


I don't know... Lemme check Oxford for hungrily... Yeah, three syllables (Aargh!). Thanks for the tip.

Revised version:

As the water sleeps
Ocean still wields it's power
Tonguing the soft sands

Mmmh, I changed it a bit again... But I like this version a lot better.

And this time I see no flaws in my Haiku. (Tonguing has amazingly only 2 syllables.).
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