ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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1337Player
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It is my refuge
I can see all things from here
Attached to nature

Notice Attached is 2 syllables. Look here for proof.

FallenSky
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The E=mcmod award; Strop

I'd really like to be able to apologize sincerely, but right now I'm laughing too much to be serious.
I'm very sorry; I'm used to see Strop participate, moreover, not only did you combo break his weakly submission but you did it with the same armatar so my mind labelled you as a poney.
But as you could deduce from my critic of your Haiku, I knew it was you Cen ^^.

Teeheegirl123
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A spaceship to Mars
I can blend into the walls
Finally at peace

Well, you could either like it or hate it depending on the style of poetry you like, one or the other.

thepossum
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It is the one place,
That has not faced intrusion,
That place is our minds.

thepossum
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Umm...rewrite.

The one place we have,
That cannot face intrusion,
Our wells of thought.

Better? Or worse?

FallenSky
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That cannot face intrusion,

Doesn't verbalizing it that way means exactly the opposite of what you tried to imply in your first Haiku?

HahiHa
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My Haven, I know,
Refuge, I need to find it.
She will be my guide.

thepossum
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Doesn't verbalizing it that way means exactly the opposite of what you tried to imply in your first Haiku?


Sort of, but the theme is haven, so I didn't want to make it seem like the mind can be intruded upon.
Zaork
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A forest (of trees)

wide open spaces
endless variance to joy
natural retreat

pHacon
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Sort of, but the theme is haven, so I didn't want to make it seem like the mind can be intruded upon.

It can, however. Just because the theme is haven doesn't mean it must be about safety; I'm sure someone could write a good haiku about the breach or want of a haven.
FallenSky
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My entry;
This is all I got!

I look at the frogs
Between the water lilies;
Enjoying the pond

That's my best shot at a Haiku ever I think. I tried to be as traditionnal as possible, and armed by ideas inspired by masters such as Basho, here I am with my traditionnal Haiku!

Katrina18
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In my memories
All future actions undone
I find solace there

Saving123
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Asylum, my home
Sanctuary in my mind
Safe insanity

User of thesaurus.com.
Well if I can think of something great and fantastic to write I guarantee that I will.
Freakenstein
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Asylum, my home
Sanctuary in my mind
Safe insanity


ouch. Looks like you got busted!
Saving123
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Asylum, my home
Sanctuary in my mind
Safe insanity

No longer quoting eachother but instead the haiku.
Busted. I like to poke through that site it makes my life better. Haha.
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