ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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Peasant

A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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Parsat
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Blacksmith

Eruption of light:
The awkward shoot pokes through loam
And gets an eyeful.

Schmiddy1234
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Nomad

Life
The blooming of life
A sweet remebrance of life
As it used to be

Zaork
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Nomad

Eruption of light:
The awkward shoot pokes through loam
And gets an eyeful.

The sexual innuendo is not surprising Parsat. I've been away far too long.

My bloomers are itchy

Swaying with the host
A colony spreads southward
Inching, itching dots.
HahiHa
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Regent

Still water turns green
Air fills with putrid gases
Algae are happy

... I couldn't resist...

Parsat
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Blacksmith

The sexual innuendo is not surprising Parsat. I've been away far too long.


LOL I didn't even think of that. If you like it that way...
Freakenstein
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Jester

Out from shamefulness
I tore down brick from my heart
Casting a bright smile.

amoghdayal11
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Peasant

Buds turn to blossom
The chirping birds sing to the cradles
A guest arrives

I am new to haikus, so sorry if there are any mistakes with syllables.

But I checked it at wordcalc.com, so there shouldn't be any...

nichodemus
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Grand Duke

Partially inspired by Donne...

Hush now in the dark
I stole your majesty's seal,
And wrought bright new life.

Maverick4
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Peasant

Buds turn to blossom
The chirping birds sing to the cradles
A guest arrives


Your second line has eight syllabuls, and your third line has four. Sometimes the online word things aren't very good. I've always found it to be more accurate and definitive to look up words in the dictionary if the amount of syllabuls isn't clear.
nichodemus
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Grand Duke

9 syllables not 8.

dair5
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Shepherd

Contemporary haikus don't need to follow 5,7,5. They still need 17 syllables though. And we aren't even going by contemporary rules.

nichodemus
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Grand Duke

Either way it's more than 17, and the OP explicitly states that it's 5,7,5.

dair5
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Shepherd

Either way it's more than 17, and the OP explicitly states that it's 5,7,5.


Yes. Wasn't that what I was saying?

They still need 17 syllables though.


And his didn't have 17.

And we aren't even going by contemporary rules.


Which is saying that we're using 5,7,5.

Sorry if I wasn't clear.
Zaork
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Nomad

If you like it that way...


Just seems like you have some stories to tell.
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Nomad

Rain is beautiful, and helpful, and...rain-y. Ten points to Gryffindor? Haha, that's awesome! Thank you, though And I thought the pun was punny, for what it's worth...

I'll write my haiku later, since I'm technically "doing homework".

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