A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)! 2) It must fit the weeks theme 3) It must be submitted before the deadline 4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written) 5) One Submission per user 6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
Evil, the terror Belief corrupts the doers In darkness they sway
To start, this is a good haiku. Gives good imagery about the status of these "evil-doers". However, I fail to see how this evil of theirs is Necessary. I see how they have been corrupted by their beliefs..is it necessary in the sense of because of their beliefs they are viewed as evil? But then, that is quite the huge implication on my part..
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sourwhatup2
Darkness in his eyes Sorrow upon all their souls ''It has to be done..''
Love the imagery right at the beginning. Gives the reader an idea that the topic (the evil-doer) is evil/not-good. Then, with the 2nd line you establish himself further as evil, as well as an establishment of a theme: Hopelessness. The theme is then topped-off with the last lines, which gives this haiku a much more sorrowful tone...and exemplifies an idea that I hold true: Punctuation can do great things for a poem, or hurt it. In the case of this haiku, it did great things. The dots after the words spoken give a large hint of the words being dropped off as they are said, majorly hinting that the person committing these deeds does not truly wish to do so. Great job
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Lee_Blade
Darkness rules their soul It's guilt and sorrow they seek Innocent lives,killed...
With the first line...is it a necessary evil because the darkness is causing it? This is quite a stretch on my part.. Now, I'd like to keep going with this stretch of mine and try to make it work, but then the next line just abolishes any hope for that. The statement "it's guilt and sorrow they seek" just throws this haiku into disarray. Why are they seeking guilt? Are they hunting out guilt? Are they wanting to feel guilt? And sorrow..are they wanting to cause it? With the next line..it sure seems so. Which would make their act a voluntary act..and not necessary at all
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Freakenstein
The third eye judges cons and thieves by puppet twine Swords and teeth gave hope
This was also a very good one. From my interpretation..the cons and thieves that are being judged are those titles due to "uppet twine". This interpretation, if meant, is awesome..the idea that their evil was necessary because they were mere puppets and thus had no control for their actions. The third line seems to be an explanation for as to why they fell into their controlled lifestyle..it gave them some sort of hope. Poverty? Debts? etc My irk..the first 2 lines give hint that it is a sentence (the lowercasing of "cons" implicating that the sentence is continuing). Those 2 lines are fine..the 3rd line, however, doesn't have any punctuation before it (at end of 2nd line)..giving hint that it is also a part of the sentence...which would make that sentence a bit...unnatural.
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arcticwolf33
Hate and anger reign Rising high, controlling all Unstoppable death
This haiku seems to completely ignore the "Necessary" part of the theme and focuses solely on the "Evil" part. Evil was not the theme. Necessary evil was..I see no hint of necessity in your haiku.
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Peter20
Done for a purpose, to save the fate of many, the world must be hurt.
Very blunt..but that isn't necessarily a bad thing. With this, the reader (without a doubt) gets an understanding that the world must be hurt for a greater good. My irk..the first line could have been a separate idea. Adding it into the sentence makes it a bit awkward overall
With the beginning giving the reader a sense of evil, darkness, and pain..then ending it by offering the perspective of the evil-doer and how he must grudgingly do such deeds..this haiku has an amazing set-up and a great ambiance
You could've at least linked to a drumroll (or not).
Anyway, I'm not sure if the next round goes to me or murasaki9 (or if our patsy... I mean "respected partner", pang, should be forced... I mean "allowed" to do it again). If I don't get a response from her by around noon AGtime tomorrow, I'll do it myself.
