ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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sourwhatup2
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My mind has lost thought
As I try and get back up
I fall once again

There I fixed, Before last line was 6 syllables xD

Owen135731
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Haikus are so fun
Simple, yet enjoyable
Wow; this fits the theme.

Thyll
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I can't escape this
My body won't allow me
For fear I will break

howlett
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Addicted to this
Try get rid of this habbit
Wish it could leave me

So what if it sucks lol

Kyouzou
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Inhaling white smoke
coughing and hacking, lungs spasm
cancerous growths build


there it is, hopefully it's not too bad

Devoidless
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Inhaling white smoke
coughing and hacking, lungs spasm
cancerous growths build


Second verse is eight syllables. You could fix it by dropping the 'and' then making 'Lungs spasm' a separate phrase. Such as:

"Coughing, hacking. Lungs spasm"
RenegadePlayer
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MW2

bullets are blazing
My riot shield is broken
the semtex got me

I go back to war
thermal .50 cal at hand
i kill them once more.

did i win =D

RenegadePlayer
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haha =] i didnt even mean to rhym war and more :P im just a natural lol i should win for that!

Kyouzou
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Inhaling white smoke
coughing, hacking. Lungs spasm
cancerous growths build


Thanks for the help voidy

Greene
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So we aren't including the shimo-no-ku? I always thought that full Tankas read better than the Haiku. Might be fun to get a thread going where we write Rengas.

Second verse is eight syllables.


I thought that the form could sometimes be flexible on the count. I know that one of Basho's poems has a 6-7-5 pattern.

Anyhow.

Mind draws in, and holds
Slips into solipsism
Never to release
SilentQ
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Withdrawal occurs,
Headaches, nausea, fatigue,
Never ending pain.

Ehhh. Idk.

Kyouzou
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So we aren't including the shimo-no-ku? I always thought that full Tankas read better than the Haiku. Might be fun to get a thread going where we write Rengas.


What?
Greene
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The Tanka is an older form of Japanese poetry from which the modern Haiku originated. A Tanka is a 31 syllable poem that reads 5-7-5-7-7. The two seven syllable lines at the end are called the Shimo-No-Ku, or "Lower Phrase." The first 3 lines (5-7-5) are called the Kami-No-Ku, or "Upper Phrase." A Renga is a collaborative poem in which one person writes a Kami-No-Ku, and a second person responds to it with a Shimo-No-Ku, completing the Tanka.

Kyouzou
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oh ok thanks

Kyouzou
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Anyone know when the judging is?

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