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Moabarmorgamer
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Hiya everybody, Moat here. And you all may have noticed that I haven't really been contributing much in the way of literature recently. But who can blame me? You wouldn't be writing stories or poems online either, if you were buried in as much homework as I am. *sigh*. But now I have decided it is time to kick my lazy butt into gear once again. So, without further ado, I present to you the poem that I would have submitted to the Poetry Contest, if I wasn't the new judge.
The theme is Our Environment.

Take a look around
What do you see?
Or listen to the sound
Of falling trees
You ask what's happening?
Only everything

The earth is falling down
Melting away, we will drown
Coming closer every day
But still all we can say
Is that it's okay...
And so we stay!

Look at our environment
A shattered testament
Of how we've been blind
Just standing in line
Waiting, watching
Doing nothing

And soon it will break
So for all of our sakes'
Stand up, go green
Shout out, make it clean
Don't submit to violence
To break through the silence

Just scream it
And make your voice heard
We're saving the birds
And the trees
And the pandas and these
Who can't speak for themselves
So tear down those shelves
Put up a fight
And all of the world will remember this night
As the night we all heard...
"ENVIRONMENT WILL SAVE THE WORLD!"

Hey, not very good, but not too awful. Not necessarily what I believe, but hey, it works doesn't it?
So, I would like some constructive criticism.

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TerryLasVegas
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I hug cacti.


That sounds very painful.
Moabarmorgamer
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That sounds very painful.

http://myseeds.us/products_pictures/old_man_cactus.jpg
This can't be so painful to hug, can it? It looks all soft and fuzzy. xP.
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You're not the judge. I'm the one with the shiny new gavel, see?


I'll take Wistress' old gavel for pretend judging. You dun mind, right?

P.S.-Why is it all my friends' ambition to make up silly nicknames for me? Moatsy?


Because it's as hilarious as watching me play basketball XD

I hug cacti.

[quote]That sounds very painful.

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Excruciating.
TerryLasVegas
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This can't be so painful to hug, can it? It looks all soft and fuzzy.


I can understand that, but a sauguaro?
TSL3_needed
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I can understand that, but a saguaro?


I hate 25ft green things. 15 years of looking at them is enough.
TerryLasVegas
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What about a prickly pear? Those dont look too huggable to me.

TSL3_needed
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What about a prickly pear? Those dont look too huggable to me.


They taste awesome though.
TerryLasVegas
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Yes they do. Even in candy.

Moabarmorgamer
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They taste awesome though.

Yeah; kind of tastes like roasted pumpkin seeds to me. Yummy. Especially with salt.
[faking]
You guys are so ignorant. How can you not hug and love cacti? The pain is naught to the pain that we cause ourselves by not hugging the cacti.
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*psst* I use a metal plated suit when I hug em. Makes it more bearable.
But just for the record, Christmas cacti have beautiful flowers. =D
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Yes they do. Even in candy.


Agreed.
TerryLasVegas
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I wish they sold it where I live.

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I wish they sold it where I live.


Buy some seeds off the internet. Make fresh ones ; )
TerryLasVegas
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Internet seeds always lead to failure. I cant make candy anyway.

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Internet seeds always lead to failure. I cant make candy anyway.


Darn.

If you ever go to Arizona you'll find them everywhere.
TerryLasVegas
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If you ever go to Arizona you'll find them everywhere.


That is the only time I have ever had the cactus candy.
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