Please, if you don't like it tell me why and give me some ways to fix it.
I'm going to give away the ending and stuff since this is only an idea, but if people like it I might make it into a full on story.
In the future, a man named Desmond (place holder name) awakens to a world empty of people. He is in a city that seems to have been destroyed by a massive explosion.
By accessing several terminals throughout the story that allow him to relieve past events in the story that take place in the city.
The city is ruled by a strict dictatorship that has managed to end war, global warming, terrorism, and disease world wide. Although the world is peaceful, doing so requires a strict attention towards its population.
The cities inhabitants are not born, they're grown. When they're fully developed babies, implants are put in their brains and they are put into stasis until needed. When they are needed they are "activated," basically given life and is given to a family to care for.
The society in the city is similar to a bee hive. Everyone is a worker drone whose job plays an important role in keeping the city together. Everyone has a camera in their brains for the government to monitor their actions. Should they begin to commit crime, the government will deactivate that person, in essence kill them.
When a person is no longer able to do work, they are deactivated. No one can live luxuriously. As soon as you cannot do work, society no longer needs you.
Because of the oppression of the government, a rebellion has been formed called "Counter Strike," (not very original name I know, but makes sense,) that enlists people who are willing to join and then "disconnects" them from the rest of society so that the government can no longer watch them or deactivate them. In essence, they're free of the governments control.
The main character (not named yet) becomes a part of this rebellion and helps Counter Strike to create a weapon that will be able to destroy the government. Since guns and explosives are extremely hard to come by, this is the only means they can do it.
The weapon is far more powerful than the rebellion realizes, however they use it anyway. What the weapon does is switch the polarity of the poles, an event called "geo-magnetic reversal" and makes the earth vulnerable to colliding meteors from space. Counter Strike has tracked a meteor that is headed for the country the city is located in (not sure which country) and will have the polarity of the poles switched long enough for a meteor to destroy the city and the government.
Although the plan succeeds and the government is destroyed, the meteor proves bigger than Counter Strike intended and wipes out all life in the country. Then, subsequent barrages called "the storm of the cosmos" of meteors further bombard earth and wipe out all life.
Desmond has been kept in stasis but was randomly activated 100 years after the geo-magnetic reversal.
As it turns out, Desmond finds other survivors somewhere who managed to survive and thrive while Desmond was in stasis. After that the story ends.
oh, and i realised,if you read it over and over again,there seems to be a few loose knots/confusions,which may have never existed,only due to the intro you gave us did not have sufficient info,ill post them up once ive compiled them
it seems you're lacking the details, but that might just be me.
Your both right. I have major details and things that need to be filled in. In fact, these chapters are only beta chapters, even they are not yet complete. I still have stuff to rework, revise, and fix, and add in. I'm going to basically be writing a rough draft of every chapter then I will go through and make them the real deal.
heres a story idea: a muffin was walking through the forest and meet a worn who befriended it untill the worm got to big and ate the muffin, crumb by crumb untill every single trace that the poor muffin ever exested is gone. THE END.
Look, I know your bored, but to be honest nobody cares.
It's not very original. The same idea has been reused and recycled thousands of times. I mean, some if it is kind of unique, but most of it is similar to other ideas and stories. And no offense but... CounterStrike? Well, I can't blame you, all the cool names are taken, and now all of us have to spend hours thinking about other cool names that aren't taken yet.
Your right. This story sucks. I drew to much inspiration and made into into a mutilated cross breed of several franchises. I give up on this, I'll make a totally new story that has things no one has done.
Sorry people, but this story is cancelled. I'm going to spend my talents on a new and unique idea.
