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Parsat
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Parsat
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Blacksmith

This is a bit of a forum game, but at the same time it has the capacity to result in a bit of poetry, so it goes here. I'm going to supply a line of poetry, and the following poster is to create a poem using the line I gave as their first. Along with their poem, they supply a line for the next person to write poetry on. No restrictions on the type of line or poetry; just keep the line open ended.

Here's the first line:

A mountain pokes out awkward in the mist

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MisterGovernor
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74 posts
Nomad

As the tide rose
It reminded me of days ago
Where we frequently frolicked
Along these very sands
Now you're so very distant
In middle America
Far from the churning waters
Of the summer with me
Just like a buried beachgoer
The tides wash over my trapped head
And the memories mingled with the amber sand
I hope you know
You leave a golden glow.

Jeebus. I suck at poetry. But...

Inside a moving palace

slayguy8
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718 posts
Peasant

Insisde a moving palace
stuck for eternity
always moving
never silence

aknerd
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aknerd
1,416 posts
Peasant

^^ You need to post a new first line.

Inside a moving palace
Turrets crumbling under heavy memories
The door boarded shut
Windows covered with tinfoil
Here I wait

Hmm this one turned out pretty bad.

New Line:
Right lane must turn right

slayguy8
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718 posts
Peasant

Right lane must turn right
you in a car late at night
will you be smart
and do the right thing

or chance for a ticket
is it worth it
if you want to go right ahead
dont ask me i could be dead


Is that a UFO

EnterOrion
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EnterOrion
4,223 posts
Nomad

Is that a UFO,
Flying by my eyes?
Or is it ghost,
Full of lifeless lies?

Ectoplasmic fury from the stars,
Or superstitious abduction waiting to start.
Lifeless creatures from the void,
Roaming and killing without a heart.

Or is it the government, tricking us all,
Using the rumors to lie in secret.
We all know all that they're doing,
But are too blind to see it.

Next line: Hello, cruel world,

Parsat
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Parsat
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public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world&quot
}
}

Could not compile:
You need a semicolon.

When I wake up in the morning

Kyouzou
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Kyouzou
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Jester

public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world&quot
}
}


Was that your poem?

When I wake up in the morning
The bright sun wishes me good-morning
The song of a lark fills my ears
The breeze creates the music of spheres


In my life


In addition, the last line is referring to wind chimes.
OperationNilo
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OperationNilo
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Shepherd

Here's my response.

In my life,
there is a slug,
a nasty dark spot,
a disturbing bug.

Get away from my life,
the darkness hasn't gone,
I must get it away,
before dawn.

Here I am,
I am dark,
My life would be better,
but then there was a spark.

A light is shining,
a new hope,
Be gone now darkness,
be gone.


When I was a kid

Graham
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Graham
8,052 posts
Nomad

When I was a kid
My poems all sucked
Now I'm a man, still
No change in luck


public class CruelWorld
{
public static void main(String[] args)
{
System.out.println("Hello, cruel world&quot
}
}

Could not compile:
You need a semicolon.


Ha. I get it.

Ha. I get it.
CommanderDude7
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CommanderDude7
4,689 posts
Nomad

Ha. I get it.
I feel so proud.
I wear my smile smugly.
I walk taller than before.
I cant be defeated.
I rock.

Ugh bad one.

slayguy8
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slayguy8
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Peasant

Ugh bad one.
this poem maybe,
is it you ask.
well come and see,

if i beleave that
this poem stinks
then everyone thinks
that this poem stinks

I have a single dollar

aknerd
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aknerd
1,416 posts
Peasant

I have a single dollar
A shirt without a collar
A girl, no way to call her
Alone, with a single dollar
Reaching out of squalor
I strive to be a scholar
That I may one day call her
But the trash grows taller
And my mind shrinks smaller
Down to a single dollar
And all has lost its color
Now I'll never call her
Alone I sit and holler
Me and a single dollar

New line:
I suppose

CommanderDude7
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CommanderDude7
4,689 posts
Nomad

I suppose
That this is a poem
But what is a poem?
Simply noise that flows toegether
With the emotion of the writer

That was random

gtfawjkjg
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gtfawjkjg
1,126 posts
Nomad

That was random,
Htyuhftgyhu,
Igyhygtf,
So is half of this,

This is sideways,
Where is this?
You already have read this,
What is this?
The first letters of the first four lines!

gtfawjkjg
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gtfawjkjg
1,126 posts
Nomad

Oops.

There is a land,

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