Here is a thread dedicated to my work as a writer. This thread will mostly be filled with my poems which vary in theme but I try to fashion myself after my favourite poet T.S Eliot, who I believed captured human nature in his words. I aspire to do the same. Please feel free wo citique and review my work. However, simply saying "I like it" is not good enough, as a writer I must grow and develop so I beg you readers to give me a reason as to why or why not you liked the poem. To start off I shall provide you with one of my personal favourties.
These Are The Boring Bits
Call life what you will, A joke, A curse, A gift, An adventure. Take from it what you will, Joy, Sorrow, Love, Hate. Lose yourself in it Find your purpose Or, Find nothing at all.
A man asked, "What is the meaning of life?" A woman told him, "Whatever you make it to be." A child asked, "Is god real?" A parent told them, "Only you can decide."
Personal opinion is what we use to guide us, The opinions of others are what lose us. We can never be certain That we are certain of anything Because of change, And because things stay the same. What makes sense one day, Will confuse us another, And so it goes on. People tell others to: Get in line, Grow up, Get our lives straight, Who told these people these things? And why tell us the things that broke them?
Is it human nature to be unhappy?
Two men sit on a bench, In a park, Under a tree. They talk about family and friends They talk about work and dreams. One man says, "It is a waste of time to dream," The other says, "Yes, but to have dreams is not." Dreams are what the world is made of Bad dreams, Good dreams, Lost dreams.
Hope is never far off, As the old die, The young are born, The young grow, They become old, The old die. But while they are young, They change the world. Some for the better, Others for the worse.
Inspiration is a dream.
The only inspiration in life is life: What to do? How to do it? Can we change the world? How to change the world? Is there purpose? Are we real? Or a figment of imagination? All questions do not need answers.
Call life what you will, These are the boring bits.
Well done! One thing though. If you could make the lines even, it could look and sound better.
It's BS responses like this that make me want to shut down this thread. I'm not complaining about your "criticism" I'm complaing about the "Well done". The fact that "Well done" or, "I like it" is hardly, if ever, supported by a reason as to WHY makes writing very, very FRUSTRATING!
Wow, I think I'm a good writer! That makes you an Excellent writer! That makes you a Great writer! I like your poems. They're... they're very poignant.
Push me a little more You conceited f*cks. Let me show you the truth Behind all your f*cking lies. You think you're so perfect. That people like me Are nothing but ants!
Go on and try To hold the world in your heart. I'd love to see it not burst. A million bloody pieces Scattered for the scavengers.
Read these words and think Nothing. Nothing. NOTHING! Have me gasp my last breath. Bleed me and write up A new contract of slavery In my blood.
Let me stagger on a while longer. Because I still have words for you.
Holy crap, Wolf. O.o Is it weird that one particular user pops into my head when I read this? xD I'm going to try and be as precise as possible here. I really like the poem, because thats how I feel when people make me frustrated as well. I'm surprised anyone can turn it into poetry so well. The las two lines are my favorite, I do think. So filled with a bitter sense of triumph. I might think of some negative things later, but for now I applaud you.
Sorry, Wolf. I was going to write something, I swear, but I was reading through old threads. It's funny seeing mods before they were mods. XD ANYWAYS.
I really like the lyrics. Is there a tune to go with it? If there is, I'd love to hear it.
I can't quote right now, but I must say the last stanza was my favorite. "I'm the face in your mind that you'll never see" It's very mysterious and haunting.
I really like the lyrics. Is there a tune to go with it? If there is, I'd love to hear it.
I create the music in my head. I used to have a friend who could do my lyrics on the guitar, but, he gave up music. I really have no replacement. And I'm not musically talented, so I used to have to hum the tune. Strangely he always found the right chords.