I decided I'd try and post some of my poems on here, since I liked the first line poem thread so much. I would really like some advice on how to improve. Thanks!
Aw. Tacky, you went from newb to fellow poet. ~eyes shine~ I enjoy them all except for Sounds. I have a difficult time trying not to rhyme. It comes naturally and without it, it just doesn't feel the same.
The beasts clench their straining jaws, steady their feet upon the floor, Don't move an inch, won't bend at all, Won't give up what they're fighting for
Then the raging fire swiftly quells, As a single tear falls from her eyes The moment passed, the beasts are gone, The hate dissipates towards the skies.
uh ya... pretty good, ya.. hmm, ya uhh.. uhh, ya... NEEDS MORE COWBELL!!! or at least have like an audio were a sweet little old grandmamer is reading the poems, still good though. see you later sticky-tack.
