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Then I'm not responding, because Crazy is not my name.

I think I'll make a haiku. Or perhaps a set, depending on my mood.

Waiting

I'm waiting here still,
Breathing in the icy air
Waiting all alone.

Thanks, jeol! What do you think of the anger one?

Waiting

It's snowing, all white
I can see my breath, frosted,
The people walking.

I'm waiting here still,
Breathing in the icy air
Waiting all alone.

The bench is like ice,
Chilled under my fingertips,
And the snow still falls.

The snow coats my hair,
Like puffs of powdery clouds...
It's getting so dark.

I'll sit forever,
An unmoving silhouette
Frozen on a bench.

Waiting for you.

It's like a series of haikus

Waiting for you.

How about this?

I'll watch time pass by,
The years and months stretch too long,
Waiting, still, for you.

Didn't like the wording in the middle line... How about:

I'll watch time pass on,
The years and months stretching by;
Waiting, still, for you.

Ah...that does sound better. :P
And that is why you are more awesome than me.
Thanks, Supa!

No problem, I just ask I can use those lines I made in a future poem sometime ^^
Oh and thanks much for the compliment, much appreciated hehe!

Nice. I wrote a poem. It's totally mine.

IT'S FRIDAY, FRIDAY, GOTTA GET DOWN ON FRIDAY....
SOMETHINGSOMETHINGSOMETHING
WE WE WE SO EXCITED...WE SO EXCITE...

Sorry. Couldn't resist.

I'm working on yet another haiku. Maybe I'll even use the haiku for what it's intended for, to write about nature.

WE WE WE SO EXCITED...WE SO EXCITE...

This might be the worst poem I have ever written DX
I was in a seasonal mood though, and this is my thread so I post what I want. Also, it's FRIDAY, FRIDAY. >

Season's Anger

Winter's harshest winds
Cut through the trees like sharp glass
Blinding us with snow

Spring melts frozen earth,
Casting torrents of water
That hurtle downhill

Then Summer, shining
Sweltering warmth, blazing hot,
Smiting those outside.

Fall will probably show up later.

That was pretty good, pretty sharp flow to it.
That last line was just lol, just lol.

Why thank you.
Did you read some of my older ones? (I try to get feedback from everyone.)

You have a great lexicon.
The poems may not be my style, still congratulations on not repeating the same thing over and over again [As do most poets on AG.]