ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Land

2158 543280
murasaki9
offline
murasaki9
1,388 posts
Blacksmith

I love writing Haikus. My best friend taught me how to write them. He said ' It's not that hard. All you have to do is learn.' So I did and I fell in love with them. Here's my first Haiku:

Clear like Crystals
It is clear, you know
that what some don't know, we do
albeit, they will.
03/21/11

  • 2,158 Replies
murasaki9
offline
murasaki9
1,388 posts
Blacksmith

Your haikus are depressing, Endscape. But that's okay.

My life is happy
I smile just because I can
Life's never better.

Endscape
offline
Endscape
1,182 posts
Nomad

Depressing? dark is one thing but depressing?
i personally cant go on forever portraying the brighter side of life, thats fine and dandy however, obviously, there's a darker side, that has to be seen aswell, pretty or not, pleasant or not, its all about balance.....


ADHERE to these 2;
Yin and Yang walk hand and hand,
Guide us through this life

murasaki9
offline
murasaki9
1,388 posts
Blacksmith

I meant, Endscape, your haikus are dark. Is that better?

Take me to the rain
show me where the sun lies down
lay me somewhere safe

take me to the moon
show me where the stars all burn
put me somewhere safe

take me back to earth
show me where the moon comes up
I'll be somewhere safe

Endscape
offline
Endscape
1,182 posts
Nomad

...significantly.

The sun breaks the clouds
as u break my composure.
How do u do this?

Endscape
offline
Endscape
1,182 posts
Nomad

The Beauty is the Beast?

Medusa, beauty
or beast? eyes that pierce all men,
vixian or horror?

i dont know if i conveyed the message well enough... did her turn men to stone because of incredible beauty or was she really, a monster...

murasaki9
offline
murasaki9
1,388 posts
Blacksmith

Continued wishing

I want to keep on
wishing for what I don't have
it would be better

I want to keep on
hoping the world will soon end
so I can start over.

P.S. Thank you for your haikus Endscape.

Endscape
offline
Endscape
1,182 posts
Nomad

hoping the world will soon end
so I can start over.


......dont we all...
invisibleninjagirl
offline
invisibleninjagirl
29 posts
Nomad

Ahh, I'll give it a shot.

The World

We have no rights here,
Who are we to destroy it,
Our eternal home.

Not my best piece, but, it alright. You're really good, murasaki! And Endscape, your haikus are really descriptive and dark. I like 'em All of 'em.

Endscape
offline
Endscape
1,182 posts
Nomad

^appreciated -_-
Mura, being ur freind ahead of time im warning, u may not want to read this..... in a good mood..

Endscape(World End)
Let no tear be shed,
Let not one voice sing again,
Tis now it all ENDS...

The eve of our doom
Stands promptly before us all
Bearing her dark fangs...

Let no smile be seen,
Let no spirit reach heaven,
But feel no regret

Now look back on life,
As all humans do when time,
Reflect yesterday

Do not be ashamed
Cherish every last mistake;
Proof of human life

Hold your loved ones close
Face the end with pride in heart
Feel no fear, move on....

As a pirate to
the gallows, laugh in death's face,
Embrace your last stand..


unfinished piece...... maybe my worst yet... in terms of the mood.... its old but, try and get my message...
simple, but a bit more the skin deep.

EmperorPalpatine
offline
EmperorPalpatine
9,439 posts
Jester

Everything is wrong.
Nothing has ever been right.
How can we fix this?

EmperorPalpatine
offline
EmperorPalpatine
9,439 posts
Jester

Fallout: New Vegas,
I shot a fire gecko
and picked up the hide.

iMogwai
offline
iMogwai
2,027 posts
Peasant

Walking to Vegas
Walk past the Quarry Junction
****, THAT THING IS HUGE!


Based on a true story. I copied your Fallout: New Vegas theme.

Maverick4
offline
Maverick4
6,800 posts
Peasant

I shot a fire gecko


I shot a fire ge-cko (6)

Six Sylabuls.
iMogwai
offline
iMogwai
2,027 posts
Peasant

I shot a fire ge-cko (6)

Six Sylabuls.


Fire is usually pronounced like fi-uhr or something, making fire a two syllable word, and the line a seven syllable line.

As you can see, it's very mixed whether people pronounce it as a one or two syllable word, so if the writer pronounces it as a two syllable word, I say let him.
EmperorPalpatine
offline
EmperorPalpatine
9,439 posts
Jester

1=I 2=shot 3=a 4=fi 5=re 6=ge 7=cko
Some pronounce fire as "faar", 1 syllable.
I use 2, "fy-ur", because that's how I pronounce it.

Showing 136-150 of 2158