I love writing Haikus. My best friend taught me how to write them. He said ' It's not that hard. All you have to do is learn.' So I did and I fell in love with them. Here's my first Haiku:
Clear like Crystals It is clear, you know that what some don't know, we do albeit, they will. 03/21/11
Best example of Haikus, all in one easy to find location? The Haiku Contest! Enter, and mention you'd like feed back. Or contact recent winners for advice. Yours aren't that bad. Like you said in the OP, Practice is essential. I sucked a poetry in general, and practice has helped me get way better. (Anybody who's familiar with Little Big Box understands this) Good job, and Keep it up!
haha I practice haiku'ing on my facebook here's some: ~Exactly!~ Paradoxical Impossibilities are Very Redundant
â~Chained Sins~ One by one it grows Heavier and heavier Ever bound to you.
â~Black Panther~ Silence stalks the night Preying on those who dare mock the darkness outside
that's just 3 of the 75 I current have made xD Idk if you can see them, they should be open for everyone to see but if you want to check them out here's the link
I think one of those pronouns needs to be kicked out of that line. Whether or not you choose to leave "us" or "them" in the poem depends only on whom you really feel should not forget that victory is yours.
Jeez! Ernie15, thank you for pointing that out! How could I make such a mistake!? I guess I just couldn't make up my mind whether I wanted 'us' or 'them' ha, ha! I meant 'us'. I didn't put the 'them' there on purpose.
I thought up another haiku: Hold on I know you are strong Hold on one more moment now The end will soon come.
I'm sorry, what? No, this isn't a thread for taking the last line of what was left by the last person and forming a poem using it. The bold 'Hold on' is supposed to be the title. This is for thread is for contributing haikus.