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Posted August 31, '08 4:47pm UTC

First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.

Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:

It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).

Also:

The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted

As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.

OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!

First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.\r\n\r\nOriginal rules, as stated by Ubertuna:\r\n\r\n[quote]It must fit the week's theme.\r\nIt must be submitted by the deadline.\r\nIt cannot have inappropriate language in it.\r\nIt cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).[/quote]\r\n\r\nAlso:\r\n\r\nThe poem must be created for this contest\r\nA user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)\r\nOnly one submission per user will be accepted\r\n\r\nAs we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the [url=http://armorgames.com/user/_poetry_]_Poetry_[/url] page.\r\n\r\n\r\nOK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!

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OperationNilo

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Shepherd

Posted October 21, '09 10:43pm UTC

I don't think he'll judge in another few days... *sigh*.

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Peasant

Posted October 22, '09 8:25pm UTC

OK everyone who has been patiently waiting for judging. I got the OK from Carlie today to judge this "weeks" poetry contest. However, I am soon leaving for work, will come home very late, get a few hours of sleep, and then back to work tomorrow for a double. Therefore, I will not be able to judge until this Saturday. I wrote a note to Parsat (our current judge) to let him know that he should judge if he logs on before Saturday. If he doesn't however, I will judge sometime on Saturday, so please be patient.
Thanks so much!

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Ernie15

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Bard

Posted October 22, '09 11:59pm UTC

Well I'm glad that I now know at least when the judging will take place.

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choazmachine

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Nomad

Posted October 23, '09 1:35am UTC

This is the longest week theme ever. Change the name to monthly? :P

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Posted October 24, '09 3:06pm UTC

OK People, before I start the judging I would like to let everyone know that Parsat will not be judging anymore. He apologizes for his tardiness in judging but is quite busy with his personal and professional life. With that being said, we are looking for a NEW JUDGE. If you feel you are qualified, please message me and Parsat. In turn, we will contact the appropriate people and hopefully we will have a new judge soon. Personally, I can not take judging on again because I am entirely too busy working these days. With that being said ... here goes the judging!

A huge THANKS to EVERYONE that participated in this "weeks" contest, and if your name wasn't mentioned this week, and you would like a comment on why, please message me and I will get back to you as soon as possible (please be aware that I am currently quite busy and it might take a few days to get back with an answer).

A round of applause to all this weeks participants as I truly had a hard time placing any poem since the majority of these poems were quite good.

The WINNER this "week" is . . .

Ernie15

The Man in the Sky

For ages on end, I've looked up at night
To spy what the eye could spy,
And how lovely it is to imagine the sight
Just to visit the man in the sky.

As the truth be revealed, this man is not small;
He is actually bigger than I,
But alas, the illusion is actually nothing at all;
He is quite a large man in the sky.

He sleeps in the daylight and wakes in the eve
As in light he can't open his eye,
How I want to reach up with my hand and retrieve
The little round man in the sky.

But his distance is great and the trip would take years
And I know I will probably die,
Though a great evil thing, it's not death that I fear;
It's neglecting the man in the sky.

While whipping white whispering winds flow west
I dream only that I can fly,
If the wind carried me I would try all my best
To shake hands with the man in the sky.

An impossible state of unhappiness starts
And as time isn't far going by,
'Cause I know that my days left are just numbered charts
Though is not true with he in the sky.

A silvery, glisteny man, oh he be!
And this quite far from a lie!
Though it isn't quite clear why the man watches me
Like a man who's afraid of the sky.

Oh I wish I could jump up and grab that old man,
Just to show him around the dry
Earth that is, there is no way I possibly can;
I'm a ground man and he's in the sky.

The road to unhappiness isn't too steep
And I know that I'll probably cry,
'Cause I know I will never be able to meet
With the little round man in the sky.

~ Although many poems this week took the approach of "the man on the moon", I liked yours the best because you &quotlayed" with the "man" in many facets. The flow and the rhyme of the poem was quite appealing also. In addition, I really felt as if you wanted to meet the "man on the moon". Very well done!

Second Place goes to ...

ubertuna

Delicate orb above the world, asunder,
Its dim vestige visible on the dew-damp grass,
Harbinger and gaurdian of the night.

Half light high above,
It shines, yet fails to illuminate,
Necrotic reflections of its brother.

Thin slip of silver,
Shallow cut in night's vastness,
Fixed to heal and open anew.

~ Simple and complex. Writing a a short poem with this much directness and creativity in such poem is quite a hard feat. In addition, you revealed a whole life-cycle within a few short sentences. Nicely done.

Third place goes to . . .

Moabarmorgamer

The beautiful moon
Our mother, our friend
Like a stormy monsoon
But this one won't end

As it gleams within the sky
Controlling our fate
A sin in our eyes
Bring us love, not hate

The seasons, the tides
The moon watches our
Puny, pitiful lives
Walking close, seeing far

But still we stand alone
The moon guards our flesh, our bone
But our blood still spills
And it's a bitter clash of wills

Why must it leave us all
Just to die, just to fall
The moon's silvery grace
Upon our unworthy face

And we can never stop asking why
Why must we cry
Why must we die
The moon is our mother
There is never another
So why does she leave us
To rot alone, in the dust

A beautiful, silvery gleam
Within the sky
Our mother, that is
But it's naught but a dream
Within the stars, with a sigh
So what is this?
The moon

Our friend
Our rival
Or our end

Ends too soon
The guardian moon
Seeing us
Leaving us
Killing us

~ I liked your assertion that the moon is our guardian and our foe. Nice play on the "two sides" of the moon. Well done.

Fourth Place goes to . . .

Reton8

Two Sided Moon

A two faced sphere slips through the sky;
Never showing its far side.

In one face a man is seen;
Smiling, frowning, kind, or mean.

The rhythmic force that pulls the tide;
Comes from this sphere of the night.

Sending the oceans high and low;
Not caring where the waters go.

For this sphere acts with great defiance;
Never staying in alliance.

~ Simple and eloquent. I liked the rhyme and rhythm of this poem also. Nice!

Fifth place goes to . . .

SomeKidsSoDealWithIt

When day fades to night,
Blanketing the world in sheets of grey,
The Moon's silver light,
Seems to rub the sins of man away.

~ Sometimes the most simplistic and direct poems are the most beautiful. This is one of those poems. Well written.

Now, for this weeks theme ... this weeks theme is "Fragility" . The deadline will be Monday, September 2nd.
Good Luck to all of you and Happy poem writing!

OK People, before I start the judging I would like to let everyone know that Parsat will not be judging anymore.  He apologizes for his tardiness in judging but is quite busy with his personal and professional life.  With that being said, we are looking for a NEW JUDGE.  If you feel you are qualified, please message me and Parsat. In turn, we will contact the appropriate people and hopefully we will have a new judge soon.  Personally, I can not take judging on again because I am entirely too busy working these days.  With that being said ... here goes the judging! :)\r\n\r\nA huge THANKS to EVERYONE that participated in this "weeks" contest, and if your name wasn't mentioned this week, and you would like a comment on why, please message me and I will get back to you as soon as possible (please be aware that I am currently quite busy and it might take a few days to get back with an answer).\r\n\r\n\r\nA round of applause to all this weeks participants as I truly had a hard time placing any poem since the majority of these poems were quite good.\r\n\r\n\r\nThe WINNER this "week" is . . .\r\n\r\n[b]Ernie15[/b]\r\n\r\n[i]The Man in the Sky\r\n\r\nFor ages on end, I've looked up at night\r\nTo spy what the eye could spy,\r\nAnd how lovely it is to imagine the sight\r\nJust to visit the man in the sky.\r\n\r\nAs the truth be revealed, this man is not small;\r\nHe is actually bigger than I,\r\nBut alas, the illusion is actually nothing at all;\r\nHe is quite a large man in the sky.\r\n\r\nHe sleeps in the daylight and wakes in the eve\r\nAs in light he can't open his eye,\r\nHow I want to reach up with my hand and retrieve\r\nThe little round man in the sky.\r\n\r\nBut his distance is great and the trip would take years\r\nAnd I know I will probably die,\r\nThough a great evil thing, it's not death that I fear;\r\nIt's neglecting the man in the sky.\r\n\r\nWhile whipping white whispering winds flow west\r\nI dream only that I can fly,\r\nIf the wind carried me I would try all my best\r\nTo shake hands with the man in the sky.\r\n\r\nAn impossible state of unhappiness starts\r\nAnd as time isn't far going by,\r\n'Cause I know that my days left are just numbered charts\r\nThough is not true with he in the sky.\r\n\r\nA silvery, glisteny man, oh he be!\r\nAnd this quite far from a lie!\r\nThough it isn't quite clear why the man watches me\r\nLike a man who's afraid of the sky.\r\n\r\nOh I wish I could jump up and grab that old man,\r\nJust to show him around the dry\r\nEarth that is, there is no way I possibly can;\r\nI'm a ground man and he's in the sky.\r\n\r\nThe road to unhappiness isn't too steep\r\nAnd I know that I'll probably cry,\r\n'Cause I know I will never be able to meet\r\nWith the little round man in the sky.\r\n[/i]\r\n\r\n ~ Although many poems this week took the approach of "the man on the moon", I liked yours the best because you "played" with the "man" in many facets.  The flow and the rhyme of the poem was quite appealing also.  In addition, I really felt as if you wanted to meet the "man on the moon".  Very well done!\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\nSecond Place goes to ...\r\n\r\n[b]ubertuna[/b]\r\n\r\n[i]Delicate orb above the world, asunder,\r\nIts dim vestige visible on the dew-damp grass,\r\nHarbinger and gaurdian of the night.\r\n\r\nHalf light high above,\r\nIt shines, yet fails to illuminate,\r\nNecrotic reflections of its brother.\r\n\r\nThin slip of silver,\r\nShallow cut in night's vastness,\r\nFixed to heal and open anew.[/i]\r\n\r\n~  Simple and complex.  Writing a a short poem with this much directness and creativity in such poem is quite a hard feat.  In addition, you revealed a whole life-cycle within a few short sentences.  Nicely done.\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\nThird place goes to . . . \r\n\r\n[b]Moabarmorgamer\r\n[/b]\r\n\r\n[i]The beautiful moon\r\nOur mother, our friend\r\nLike a stormy monsoon\r\nBut this one won't end\r\n\r\nAs it gleams within the sky\r\nControlling our fate\r\nA sin in our eyes\r\nBring us love, not hate\r\n\r\nThe seasons, the tides\r\nThe moon watches our\r\nPuny, pitiful lives\r\nWalking close, seeing far\r\n\r\nBut still we stand alone\r\nThe moon guards our flesh, our bone\r\nBut our blood still spills\r\nAnd it's a bitter clash of wills\r\n\r\nWhy must it leave us all\r\nJust to die, just to fall\r\nThe moon's silvery grace\r\nUpon our unworthy face\r\n\r\nAnd we can never stop asking why\r\nWhy must we cry\r\nWhy must we die\r\nThe moon is our mother\r\nThere is never another\r\nSo why does she leave us\r\nTo rot alone, in the dust\r\n\r\nA beautiful, silvery gleam\r\nWithin the sky\r\nOur mother, that is\r\nBut it's naught but a dream\r\nWithin the stars, with a sigh\r\nSo what is this?\r\nThe moon\r\n\r\nOur friend\r\nOur rival\r\nOr our end\r\n\r\nEnds too soon\r\nThe guardian moon\r\nSeeing us\r\nLeaving us\r\nKilling us[/i]\r\n\r\n\r\n~ I liked your assertion that the moon is our guardian and our foe.  Nice play on the "two sides" of the moon.  Well done.\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\nFourth Place goes to  . . .\r\n\r\n[b]Reton8[/b]\r\n\r\n[i]Two Sided Moon\r\n\r\nA two faced sphere slips through the sky;\r\nNever showing its far side.\r\n\r\nIn one face a man is seen;\r\nSmiling, frowning, kind, or mean.\r\n\r\nThe rhythmic force that pulls the tide;\r\nComes from this sphere of the night.\r\n\r\nSending the oceans high and low;\r\nNot caring where the waters go.\r\n\r\nFor this sphere acts with great defiance;\r\nNever staying in alliance.[/i]\r\n\r\n~ Simple and eloquent. I liked the rhyme and rhythm of this poem also. Nice!\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\nFifth place goes to . . . \r\n\r\n[b]SomeKidsSoDealWithIt[/b]\r\n\r\n\r\n[i]When day fades to night,\r\nBlanketing the world in sheets of grey,\r\nThe Moon's silver light,\r\nSeems to rub the sins of man away.[/i]\r\n\r\n~ Sometimes the most simplistic and direct poems are the most beautiful.  This is one of those poems.  Well written.\r\n\r\n\r\nNow, for this weeks theme ... this weeks theme is "Fragility" .   The deadline will be Monday, September 2nd.\r\nGood Luck to all of you and Happy poem writing! :D

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 3:10pm UTC

Oops ... Ernie15, you need to contact Carlie in order to receive your merit, please include a link to page 162 on this thread when you message her. Thanks and Congrats!

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wistress

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 3:18pm UTC

OMGosh! The deadline is Monday, November 2nd ... LOL, my bad.

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OperationNilo

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Shepherd

Posted October 24, '09 3:25pm UTC

OK. I'll try to improvise, since you backstabbed me with that theme.

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Nomad

Posted October 24, '09 3:34pm UTC

~ I liked your assertion that the moon is our guardian and our foe. Nice play on the "two sides" of the moon. Well done.

Thank you. Third place...isn't that what I got last time? Shucks. No, wait, no, third place is better than what I got last time, just slightly. Funny,because I definitely thought my Numbness poem was better than my Moon one. Oh well.

One choice can break it
One chance to make it
Look around, open your eyes
We think we are strong
Or at least, everyone tries
The facade won't last long

One person tips the scale
It could save us all
Or doom us to fail
Our sensitivity, fragility
Give us the ability
To break and to build
But which will occur
As we wait in the hills

Shatter!
And run for our homes
Go faster!
Just to find we're all alone
Collapse!
To be born again
Relax!
Just to fall in sin
Elapse!
Just to weaken again
Prolapse!
Just to live in the end

Building
Shattering
Building again
All our work blows away
Once again in the wind
Not tomorrow, not today
But maybe we can move forward
Instead of just back
Of our own accord
To find what we lack

Breaking down
Falling down
Fragile as ice
Back to the ground
It's all so precise
Anything can make it fall
But nothing can return it to tall

Crying again
Dying again
Or at least, inside
So you think you're my friend
Then why have you lied
Anything can break me down
But at least I don't break others
Just because I'm broken now

Not very good. I made it in about five seconds, so what did you expect?
P.S.- THANK YOU! We've been waiting for judging for an insanely long time now!

[quote]\r\n~ I liked your assertion that the moon is our guardian and our foe.  Nice play on the "two sides" of the moon.  Well done.[/quote]\r\nThank you. Third place...isn't that what I got last time? Shucks. No, wait, no, third place is better than what I got last time, just slightly. Funny,because I definitely thought my Numbness poem was better than my Moon one. Oh well.\r\n\r\nOne choice can break it\r\nOne chance to make it\r\nLook around, open your eyes\r\nWe think we are strong\r\nOr at least, everyone tries\r\nThe facade won't last long\r\n\r\nOne person tips the scale\r\nIt could save us all\r\nOr doom us to fail\r\nOur sensitivity, fragility\r\nGive us the ability\r\nTo break and to build\r\nBut which will occur\r\nAs we wait in the hills\r\n\r\nShatter!\r\nAnd run for our homes\r\nGo faster!\r\nJust to find we're all alone\r\nCollapse!\r\nTo be born again\r\nRelax!\r\nJust to fall in sin\r\nElapse!\r\nJust to weaken again\r\nProlapse!\r\nJust to live in the end\r\n\r\nBuilding\r\nShattering\r\nBuilding again\r\nAll our work blows away\r\nOnce again in the wind\r\nNot tomorrow, not today\r\nBut maybe we can move forward\r\nInstead of just back\r\nOf our own accord\r\nTo find what we lack\r\n\r\nBreaking down\r\nFalling down\r\nFragile as ice\r\nBack to the ground\r\nIt's all so precise\r\nAnything can make it fall\r\nBut nothing can return it to tall\r\n\r\nCrying again\r\nDying again\r\nOr at least, inside\r\nSo you think you're my friend\r\nThen why have you lied\r\nAnything can break me down\r\nBut at least I don't break others\r\nJust because I'm broken now\r\n\r\nNot very good. I made it in about five seconds, so what did you expect?\r\nP.S.- THANK YOU! We've been waiting for judging for an insanely long time now!

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Shepherd

Posted October 24, '09 3:36pm UTC

It's pretty good one Moat. I don't even stand a chance. as I said before:

I'll try to improvise, since you backstabbed me with that theme.

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 3:47pm UTC

Ah, crap. I forgot to enter. T_T

I'll do it this time! Somebody remind me to.

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wistress

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 4:06pm UTC

Thank you. Third place...isn't that what I got last time? Shucks. No, wait, no, third place is better than what I got last time, just slightly. Funny,because I definitely thought my Numbness poem was better than my Moon one. Oh well.

It may have been better in my eyes also ... however, I wasn't the judge for that one ... different opinions, different judges.

<yelling for someone to please judge this contest>

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Ernie15

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Bard

Posted October 24, '09 4:12pm UTC

Yay I won!

Am I allowed to win next round too?

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 6:26pm UTC

Careful now

moving slower than ever
I would'nt hurt you, never
gentle strokes
I realize I'm not a real gentle folk

soft skin
you've committed no sin
my eyes shut, so do yours
I've struck all the right chords

I must depart
stay alart
as I would never want to lose you

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Peasant

Posted October 24, '09 6:33pm UTC

Am I allowed to win next round too?

Sorry, rules state that a person can not place first 2 weeks in a row.
However, it doesn't rule out you placing in the next round.

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