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Posted Dec 30, '13 at 5:57pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

It's surprisingly poetic anyway.

Thanks~ It was for a discussion of one of my online classes, which is why the end it mentions expectations and stuff.

Now that I'm on break I might start attempting to write once more, but I'm trying to locate my old thread so I can repost everything from there to here.
 

Posted Dec 30, '13 at 6:48pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

I don't even know where my old posts were coming from, and I really hope that the one I'm posting isn't a repost.... I don't think it is... ehhhh whatever oh well if it is a repost.

Can't you hear the bells?
The children leave the schools.
The people leave the church.
The world wakes up,
All is well.
Can't you hear the bells?
It is time for you to go.
I can't leave with you,
But I do hope that you know.

I would,
If I could,
But I can't.

Can't you hear the bells?
I can hear them.
Can't you?
It is time for this to end.
We both know what we have to do.

We met just as the bells started to ring.
Too bad this couldn't of been our start.
We both realize this is the beginning of our ending.
I think I can let you go now.
So why can't you?

Can't you hear the bells?
The world is no longer
A place for us to dwell.

 

Posted Dec 30, '13 at 7:00pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

Ohohoho I remember what I was doing. I'm going through the pages of the FLP and reposting my archive into here. That's why this stuff is from '10.

I've been here a while... wow....

For those of you who don't know, the FLP is First Line Poetry, and I strongly encourage everyone to take a look and try their hand at it.

Anyways.
July 3rd, 2010

Many a sleepless night I found,
Myself thinking of you.
The way you walk,
The way you sing,
The way you talk.
The more I think of you,
The more I dream of you,
Without ever actually sleeping.

_____

I'll be trying to post regularly, at least while I'm on my break. But please understand that all of these poems are VERY OLD and I'm just archiving them. Feel free to give feedback and critique, but they have all been written 3+ years ago so be gentle :<

 

Posted Dec 30, '13 at 7:43pm

Pieguyme

Pieguyme

1,030 posts

Since I'm on my break I'd be totally fine with helping you out on some things, if you'd like.


Thanks. I have a short story on the Short Horror Stories thread. I just kind of came up with that on the spot, so I was wondering if you could take a look at it and tell me anything I should have done that I didn't, something I shouldn't have done that I did, or any other suggestions you have. If you don't have time, that's fine. Thanks for the help.
 

Posted Dec 31, '13 at 1:06pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

4,299 posts

I don't know about anyone else, but I think it'd be interesting to see what went on in the mind of Emily years past.

 

Posted Jan 7, '14 at 8:03pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

I don't know about anyone else, but I think it'd be interesting to see what went on in the mind of Emily years past.

You're crazy, darling. Crazy.

But alas, here is more from the past.

July 3rd, 2010

I wake to the sunlight,
To find you beside me.
Nothing is more beautiful than you,
Because you are all I see.
I want to be there as you awaken.
I want to help you calm down when you feel shaken.

I will always be here
To hold your hand
To wipe your tears
To dance with you
To hold you near
To sing with you
To get rid of your fears.

I love you.
With every cell in me.
I know you love me too.
You have my heart and the key.

_____

I don't know what drugs I was on when I wrote this, but I tried to write it from a guys POV.
 

Posted Jan 7, '14 at 8:12pm

Freakenstein

Freakenstein

9,589 posts

Moderator

My feels. They be pouring out.

I don't know what drugs I was on


You were on pure sugar.
 

Posted Jan 8, '14 at 1:33pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

My feels. They be pouring out.

aw babe thanks

July 5th, 2010

The star shines alone,
The light is blinding.
But beautiful.
Then I noticed the others around it.
All just as amazing,
Yet they shine on their own.
Together, but separate.
Breathtaking.

_____

Meh, I don't like it but archive u_u I'll double this up with an equally terrible one just because I'd hate to make multiple posts that contain such garbage.


(also from July 5th, 2010)

As the sun sets it is a picture perfect moment,
I grab my camera to preserve it forever.
But I was a moment too late,
And you couldn't see the brilliance.
I will try again on a later date.

_____

School is starting again soon. Let's see how long I can keep up.
 

Posted Jan 8, '14 at 11:31pm

Riptizoid101

Riptizoid101

6,333 posts

Bit late on posting.

Anyways, your 3(4?) year old poems aren't as bad as you make them out to be. Also, I'm noticing the reoccurring motif in your old poems of happiness, beauty, individuality, etc, which puts me in a good vibe after reading them, even if they're not the "best" poems. It's the message that's conveyed, not simply the content.

Anyhoo, I demand that you give us your first 2014 poem this instant! >

 

Posted Jan 9, '14 at 7:13pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,419 posts

Anyhoo, I demand that you give us your first 2014 poem this instant! >

That's not quite how things work, darling. But maybe sometime I will get around to it.

Anyways.

July 5th, 2010

I wake to the dawn.
The early morning sun,
Is rising to greet me.
Fills me with energy,
As I wonder what I will see.

I step out into the sunlight,
Looking upon all the beautiful colors of nature.
The green on the leaves and the green of the ground.
A lavender flower petal falls without making a sound.

I walk with a purpose.
Throughout my day.
The light, bouncy, air around me,
Begs for me to play.

So I skip through the yellow fields of wheat.
I climb up the old, faithful tree.
This day is such a wonderful treat.
It is amazing just to be.

When the day begins to darken,
I begin to feel tired.
So I walk back to my home,
And dream of the beauty of nature.
I am ready for a new dawn.

_____
 
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