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Posted Apr 3, '12 at 3:45pm

Roccess

Roccess

176 posts

UGG my last poem didn't post D:

This is just a haiku...

Soldier
Dressed in red and gold,
Sword, shield, metal helmet,
Necklace for luck, and boots.

 

Posted Apr 3, '12 at 4:13pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,342 posts

I like your poems, Schmiddy!
I've been studying poems as part of an AP course I'm taking.
Studying them has really opened my eyes to them and helped
me to appreciate them. I don't write them, but I can critique
them, I think. :DDD

 

Posted Apr 3, '12 at 4:54pm

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

887 posts

Can I right my own poems on your forum post ?

Sure metalheart :D roccess is as u can see, and i said u could on the first page too :O

@Roccess
I like that poem about soldiers :D its very descriptive.

I like your poems, Schmiddy!
I've been studying poems as part of an AP course I'm taking.
Studying them has really opened my eyes to them and helped
me to appreciate them. I don't write them, but I can critique them, I think. :DDD

A few things murasaki :D
1. Thank you!
2. Wow.... ur studying poems =D that sounds so fun!!! Also, it explains how ur so good at them.
3. If ur good at criticizing, hmmmmm.... We could have a poetry contest here. Like with all kinds of poems :D And u could be the judge with whoever u want.... I just thought of that :P if u don't want to, thats ok, i'll just keep posting poems here :D

 

Posted Apr 3, '12 at 7:35pm

Roccess

Roccess

176 posts

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! MY FIVE STANZA HAIKU WASN'T POSTED BECAUSE OF THE STUPID reCAPTCHA! RAAAAIIIIGGG!!!

 

Posted Apr 3, '12 at 11:18pm

MetalHeart

MetalHeart

214 posts

My first is in theatre and school and shop
My second is in go and it's also in stop
My third is in left but it isn't in right
My fourth is in evening and it's also in night
My fifth is in both food and drink
My sixth is in hear and say but not think
My last is at the end of day
And my whole is free time - let's go away

 

Posted Apr 4, '12 at 3:15pm

MetalHeart

MetalHeart

214 posts

So what do you think about my poetry ?
There's rhymes at the end.

 

Posted Apr 4, '12 at 3:40pm

Roccess

Roccess

176 posts

@Metal, it's good, but it would be helpful to have a name, too xD

This poem isn't really a poem debatedly, but... lol.

Abreviations

I once had a good percentage of cash, a huge number. I quoted: I am very rich, but I wont share. Then the man quoted: You are a [censored] idiot. Then I said: Right back at you.

I 1ce had a good % of $, a huge #. I "": I am very $, but I wont share. Then the man "": You are a !*!*!*! idiot. Then I "": Right back @ you.

Lol. I know, I'm running out of ideas.

This poem is about a knick-knack I have of a metal duck bolted to a paperclip. His name is the Do-Decolicious. This story in the poem is obviously made up.

Do-Decolicious

There was once a duck who lived in a storage room,
Right behind a stock of brooms.
He was much more colorful than the other ducks,
But when the others told him, he said, "Aw, shucks."
He went on a shelf one day,
And one day for him someone came to pay.
They gave him to their granchild after they passed,
And the Do-Decolicicious knew, he was home at long last.

 

Posted Apr 4, '12 at 4:13pm

MetalHeart

MetalHeart

214 posts

Why the sadness ?
------------------
If you have problems
you must forbearance
don't do vengeance
you must be trustiness
don't be rapidness
Or you will do mistakes

 

Posted Apr 5, '12 at 2:23am

MetalHeart

MetalHeart

214 posts

Is it good ?

 

Posted Apr 5, '12 at 11:45am

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,342 posts

A few things murasaki :D
1. Thank you!
2. Wow.... ur studying poems =D that sounds so fun!!! Also, it explains how ur so good at them.
3. If ur good at criticizing, hmmmmm.... We could have a poetry contest here. Like with all kinds of poems :D And u could be the judge with whoever u want.... I just thought of that :P if u don't want to, thats ok, i'll just keep posting poems here :D

1.You are Welcome, Schmiddy!
2.I'm not as good at poems as I'd like to be but thank you!
3. What? Me? A poetry judge?? Really??? Yes!!!!!!!! I'll do it!!
Thank you!