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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Intro~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Have you ever wondered about life? Life is a curious thing. You are born, only to die. This is the same process on the planet Alaapokees. Alapokians are short little fellows, with pointed ears, and rounded noses. The tallest only come up to 4 feet tall.
Alaapokees is a small planet, only 9000 kilometers round. One tribe, deep inside Depthar, the forest of the Kingland, has a dark past. Many terrible wizards have come and taken away children, and slaughtered their parents. But there is hope. One Alaapokian named Drivthar has a special power. One only known to the tribe (the tribe's name is Wertha) Drivthar himself doesn't know about it. Until one day....
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Drivthar stood in front of the old shaken Alaapokian, rooted to the ground. Thoughts entered Drivthar's mind: "He's joking, it's all a prank. All a prank! You can't have powers! You're silly old Drivthar!" Just then, the shivering sensation came over Drivthar once more, wrapping him in a sense of heatness... Heatness? The weather was freezing, the harshest winter seen by Alaapokians in a few years was raging all around Alaapokees, so why was Drivthar feeling hot? Christrew continued: "You feel warm, yes? I thought so. Drivthar, your mother and father kept you secret for a few years... Because you are a Streptul. Streptul's are fire creatures, only emerging their powers in months after birth There is a way to shut down Streptuls' powers, and your parents did this to you. Unfortunaltely, it is only temporary. Now, once you learn to control your powers, you can choose your side. Use your inimaginable powers for the greater good of Alaapokees... Or become a monstrous villan."
