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Your poems are pretty good.

The revised edition of 'wondering' sounds a bit like a poetry version of my old story 'Writer's Block.'

Your work isn't bad, surely better than mine.
:P

The revised edition of 'wondering' sounds a bit like a poetry version of my old story 'Writer's Block.'

Lost
By: Mav

Turning round and round
I know don't know where I am
Hoping to be found
I am lost

To survive is my goal
To die is not
And deep down my soul
Knows that I am lost

Seeking shelter, food, and hope
I wander this lonely place
But soon i sit and mope
Because I am lost.
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This is a work in progress

Lost
By: Mav

Turning round and round
I don't know where I am
Hoping to be found
I am lost

To survive is my goal
To die is not
And deep down my soul
Knows that I am lost

Seeking shelter, food, and hope
I wander this lonely place
But soon i sit and mope
Because I am lost.

Wandering round this wood
Wildlife scared at my pressence
This situation is not good
For I am still lost

Yet suddenly in the air
My wildest dreams revealed
A person came that really care'd
I am lost no more

The helicopter that saved my life
To me to my home
It ended alot of strife
But in the urban jungle...

I am lost

Up
By: Mav

Standing in line just waiting
The advertisements baiting
Snaring you in like a hungry fish
Saying its all you wish

Happy thoughts flood through my mind
But soon do I find
That I'm in front of the line
The pilot reassures me that I'll be fine

Rising higher, higher, higher still
My worst nightmare is now fulfilled
In this ballon above the ground
A shred of courage cannot be found

Eyes shut tight
I ponder my plight
Till the pilot says where going down
And soon we begin heading towards the town

With clammy hands and a pale face
I sit and wonder about my case
And when we land and I can leave
I hop off and through the crowd I weave

Looking back to that day
With regret all i can say
Should have i just glimpsed down
I could have seen the whole town...

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I wrote this poem for the weekly poetry contest
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I seem to be the only person posting...

I seem to be the only person posting...

touche

*runs over to alts thread*

Im not buying it...
By: Mav

Billy May's Here!
At the tv I Peer
Sighing outloud at what I hear

You should buy Sham-Wow!
I want to give you a Pow!
Just so i can hear you say ow...

...so you should Buy!
I want to cry
Advertising makes me die

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My first attempt at 3 line-rhyme poems. I hate commercials, so i just kinda wrote this. Not hating on Billy Mays or anybody though

Check it
By: Mav

Looking at my thread
Before I go to bed
Heres what runs through my head:

Wonder who looked
No one! Now there gonna get booked
Unless they look at my thread, then they get hooked.

I send out black mail
So to my thread they hail
Through my poems they sail

And yet no body posts!
And me, the gracious host
Who advertises the most.

And the poems make a beat
And I guess no one can take the heat
When they and my collections meet.
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Another attempt at 3 line-rhyme poems. Do you think I came on too strong? Did I drop enough hints?

Haiku
By: Mav

Since I have nothing
Else to do, I am writing
A Haiku today

Mav, are you getting telepathic inspiration from me or something? I have two unpublished poems about advertising >.>

Sorry Mav, but that Haiku is a far cry from your standard of excellence.

Some of the lines in Check It don't really make sense., or are thoughts that trail off and are never finished. . . .

Not bad though.