A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)! 2) It must fit the weeks theme 3) It must be submitted before the deadline 4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written) 5) One Submission per user 6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
Ready for a long and somewhat detailed judging? Well, whoomp! There it is:
I'll start out with the custom awards. They don't mean anything, but at least everyone can say they got a mention.
The Interruption Award - Waluigi
boiling over, em- otion destroys self-control, Anger now free
This poem would have had a much nicer flow to it had the word "emotion" been kept on one line. And the last line only has four syllables.
The Pure Evil Award - Wolf1991
Gyser of justice, Awaiting its time to gush Drowning those in wait.
I like the dark tone in this poem. Not really dangerous, but more eeeeeeeevil.
The Disaster Award - KingLemon
The seismic tremors A weak point in the crater. Ash, Fire, Screams, Death.
I can picture a disaster movie being made from this poem. Great job with the imagery!
The "Please Read the Title and the Syllable Count Correctly" Award - Stormwolf722
The Pond's cold water stills. As the silent hills whisper. To you my heart is gone, and the last words linger through time
In the future, read the theme and page given in the title rather than just the first page. Where you got the idea for a 5-7-14 haiku is beyond me.
The Political Award - GhostOfMatrix
Disruption of life, Quarrel within a nation, Rift in relations.
I liked your take on this theme, and I would have liked this poem better had the second line and the last line not rhymed.
The Comedic Solution Award - dudeguy45
A simple leak sprouts I need more than gum to mend Too late, the dam failed
I feel like I've seen someone trying to mend a ruptured dam with gum in some cartoon, but I just can't place it. This entry also had great imagery.
The "It's OUR Fault??" Award - TackyCrazyTNT
A dramatic tear, A rip that shakes the Earth's bones. How we have let go.
It sounds like this poem is blaming the humans for the earthquake! I think it would have had a nicer flow to it had you not used "a" at the beginning of two lines.
The Life and Death Award - Kyouzou
That pulsing rhythm The definition of life A puncture is death
I don't know exactly what it is, but something about putting "life" at the end of one line and "death" at the end of the next seems to rupture the subtlety of this poem.
The "One More Syllable" Award - Endscape
flow goes undisturbed black pit that erases all wormhole through time space
That last line seems a little crunched. Maybe a comma would have helped, or the word "and" if the syllable count would allow it. The first line also seems a tad bit unrelated to the other two lines.
The "Only a Doctor" Award - Strop
When right side gut pain, Becomes rebound tenderness, Ruptured appendix!
Only a doctor would think of this when given the given theme. I like how the medical terminology fit the syllable count so well.
The "I've Passed Out From All The Possibilities" Award - Pazx
Gracing her body A beautiful desire ****. I think it broke.
Dare I even ask what broke?
Now for the placement awards.
3rd Place - Wolf1991
Gyser of justice, Awaiting its time to gush Drowning those in wait.
Like I've said before, I admire the dark tone in this poem. It wasn't my favorite entry, but it certainly deserved a fine spot in the placement awards.
2nd Place - dudeguy45
A simple leak sprouts I need more than gum to mend Too late, the dam failed
This poem had some great imagery in it, and it had a very cartoonish feel to it. I didn't think it was a serious entry at first, but after reading it a few times, I realized how much I liked it.
1st Place - KingLemon
The seismic tremors A weak point in the crater. Ash, Fire, Screams, Death.
The imagery in this poem was magnificent. Made me feel like I was watching a disaster movie. Although it's only three lines, it gives the reader a lot of sound imagery as well as visual imagery. Awesome job with this poem! Go receive that merit.
wow i won? ! I had actually forgotten about this I just noticed it became stickied! NICE And to think i was going to change it to something about pimples! Just never developed a final draft of that haiku!
"The Jungle" makes me think of CoD: Black Ops haha Good luck this week peeps
