ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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dair5
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OH NO! I'm sorry, I've messed up.

Flower Blooms

Dew dripping down stem.
The flower's bloomed, red and wide.
Seedling shows it's head.


There, now its done.

acmed
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i rep for east side
because i live on east side
and love the east side

i know it sucks and i lost lol =)


Bobbler, your poem will not be counted, as it is not fitting to the theme.

And welcome back Murasaki!
dudeguy45
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Yo... East side.. you steppin?


theres a miasma
of pollen and dust airborne
it's worth the beauty

acmed
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Yo... East side.. you steppin?


I'm all east as well man! Don't be tripping dog!

He just needs the poem to match the theme home skillet.

Don't shizzle mah nizzle on the fizzle mah hizzle...... Dawg...

TRICK TRICK
dair5
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I'm all east as well man! Don't be tripping dog!
He just needs the poem to match the theme home skillet.
Don't shizzle mah nizzle on the fizzle mah hizzle...... Dawg...
TRICK TRICK


acmed... east coast? You sure? I, I just... just... you sure? I've gotta admit though, that was funny.
lilzozo
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ok this is my first one

The pond shelters them.
Creatures on the lillypads.
Living peacefully,


That's what i got. good luck to all

shift4101
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Haiku's are easy.
But they don't always make sense.
Refridgorator.

acmed
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Haiku's are easy.
But they don't always make sense.
Refridgorator.


It's not like you're the first one who tried that.
Yours does not count. As it's A.) Not matched with the theme. And B.) Not yours. Which is considered plagiarism.
tiniesthawk
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Not to mention the misspelling and grammar mistake

Graham
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This commodity,
Rife with normalcy, still brings
infallible awe.

Ernie15
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Growth prospects are high,
Vested management interest
Shields our precious stock

acmed
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Unlike Mav, I like judging the day after the deadline. No need to wait.

So I'll go over this professionally like Maverick sort of did...
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I'm bringing back the top 5 judging and critic. If you were not placed in the top 5, you can leave a comment on my profile with your haiku, and I would be more than happy to give you feedback.

I also want to clarify something. If you want to edit or replace your haiku with a different one during the contest, PLEASE point it out in your post so I know which one to judge. This happened with DudeGuy this week, and I was confused.

There was 16 entries this week. (Just saying)

So without further ado, I give you my first judging ever for the theme Emerging Growth.
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5th Place: Graham

This commodity,
Rife with normalcy, still brings
infallible awe


Graham, you are by far the most language adroit participant here. As much as the words struck me with a great poem, it sounded a bit funny aloud. But well done, Graham. I give you a 5th place cookie.

4th Place: tiniesthawk

Beneath the soil
Awaits untapped potential
Spring -- life flourishes


This one showed a lot of emotion. I loved the standing point of it. It was very nice. I would highly suggest adding punctuation to your future haikus. That way, we can better understand the rhythm you're trying to get at. But all that aside, here's a 4th place cookie (It has chocolate chips, don't tell Graham)

3rd Place: MagicTree

The fires have ceased
The great frozen landscape gone
A new beginning


You took the theme, and beat it several times with imagination. I loved it. You match the theme and life experiences into a great haiku. Just like the last one though, punctuation would help get the rhythm on track for the reader. You might have gotten first if you did... Here's a 3rd place cookie. Go, play with it or something...

2nd Place: Dair5

Dew dripping down stem.
The flower's bloomed, red and wide.
Seedling shows it's head


I can imagine this whole scene. A flower revealing it's beauty. There is nothing bad about this poem. I really enjoyed it. You did a great job putting the haiku to life. 2nd place cookie goes to Dair5!

1st Place and Merit Winner: EmperorPalpatine

I begin my life
With limitless potential:
What shall I become?


Nailed it. I loved it. By far the best I've seen this week. The growth you have made in this contest was outstanding, and it payed off. Your words and emotion make this haiku a merit winner. Congratulations Emperor Palpatine! Please contact a mod or admin for your merit!
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All of you did a wonderful job. I wish I could give all of you 1st place, but I can't. ):

Normally I don't give advice, but why not. If you want to practice your haiku writing with suggestions from experienced haiku poets, check out Haiku Land. Our top two contenders this week are consistent participants in the thread, and it helped me be the judge. It's a great help, and could benefit here in the Haiku Contest.

Well that's that. Congrats again to Emperor Palpatine for winning his merit.

This week's theme: The Long Forsaken Road, and is due November 8th. I wish good luck to all! Happy Haiku'ing, and Happy Halloween!

dudeguy45
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This happened with DudeGuy this week, and I was confused.


Really? I didn't even consciously do that.

I sulk down this road,
No line on the horizon
Just need to keep goin'
acmed
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Really? I didn't even consciously do that.


You had one on this page, and on this page. But I judged your first one.
Ernie15
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Nobody appreciated my stock haiku.

Oh well. I didn't expect too many people to get it.

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