ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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2014631
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COME ON! I want the next theme!

vinster132
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Dude, learn how to be patient...Fallen will judge it soon and will post the theme.

FallenSky
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Hello everyone, I'm very sorry for that late judging, and I won't bother stating all the reasons why it is so, since I aforementionned them on the thread...just go look...Ok, this one it's only the five rankers since you're all eager to have a new theme and I've already made you wait long enough.

5fth place - Teeheegirl123

Hands moving swiftly,
Dancing along black and white
Each note perfection

Yes, playing piano is a great example of the control we have over our bodies and how we can manipulate individual notes into mellifluous or passionate melodies. Good job!

4rth place - EnterOrion

Playing to the drums
Economic suicide
We march to our doom

Societal control's always a good subject in my book. It's troubling how you pictured the scene though; with the drums and the march of doom...Seems to me like you wanted to make a reference to these men who played drums on the slave ships to give the rowing beat...Nice parallel.

3rd place - Strop!

Oh! How I must cram,
These syllables awkwardly,
Into these three lines.

I just love Strop's way of perfectly turning the themes around to make them sound oh-so-unserious. It's quite a feat to use them themes into such a manner, good job Strop!

2nd place - Avorne

I dominate you
Bowing to your sovereign,
Bound to my impulses.

Another incredible entry by Avorne. The rhythme is perfect, and I like the imagery of the lunar dominion. It's quite a nice entry, but without the reference, it may be hard to guess what you're talking about. Nonetheless, it's a very good entry and it deserves 2nd pace!

1st place and merit winner- Aknerd

Placed in the right soil
Bending the seed's potential
I grew a caged tree

In essence, that's one of the most perfect haikus I've ever read. It fits the theme perfectly while it bases itself upon nature, which is perfect regarding the fact that it's a haiku. I love your use of the theme, growing bonzai is the work of a life; it looks so simple yet is so complicated; it's a miracle of manipulation, of twisting, of bending nature. Remarkable way to picture how men have the urge to control everything.

Nice job everyone, I'm sorry for the hurried judging, but next week I'm not moving out so we'll have a complete judging with lots of constructive criticism and all...Please note though that I took all the necessary time to analyze each haiku, I wouldn't rush a rank judging, no no no... In any case, if any of the subsidiary judges want to take the judging for next week, thay are free to advise on my profile.
Good luck to all for the next round, the next theme is one suggested by a regular here: Boredom

vinster132
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This is so boring
I am just sitting here bored
So tried and bored

That could have been bad, sorry. I was rushing through it, since I just woke up and I'm just a bit still sleepy, haha.

I'll probably get a better later.

Avorne
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The power of humans,
Amidst endless experiences
We invent boredom.

Thank you for the compliment - I definitely think the correct person was picked to win though.

wolf1991
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These walls shudder with
Every breath taken. And still
I wonder... is this life?

Nater
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I am so bored
Girl keeps telling dumb story
What a friggin drag

MoonFairy
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I was very pissed
That I did not even place
But now I am too bored

(adding a next one to complete it lol)

So I do not care
Because my entry sucked butt
It still hurts a bit...

XD lololololololololololololololoool
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Zaork
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droning sounds surround
masked shapes queries tedious
filling cavities

Strop
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I'm too tongue-in-cheek to put out something truly great (whatever this may be), so here's another one:

Sleeping or waking,
Live every day the same dream,
Jump off the building.

thechosenuno
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I wake up and go
Arrive at school my days begun
six hours I will wait

Graham
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Nomad

Banana zombies...
I wish I had some coffee.
What did you say now?

Avorne
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Sleeping or waking,
Live every day the same dream,
Jump off the building.


Is this in reference to the recent game 'Every day the same dream'? Or am I just being silly?
Pazx
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I was gonna go for something random, like
I am very bored
I might say something random
Refridgerator

but it seems most the entries are like that and I would be severely outdone. Soo...

Existance is dull
Staring into the grey void
Something will happen

1337Player
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Great topic. Here's my entry (sadly)

Bob
He is dull and drab,
He sits at a computer,
Typing in some code.


Yeah. A boring business man was the first thing that came to my mind.

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