I decided I'd try and post some of my poems on here, since I liked the first line poem thread so much. I would really like some advice on how to improve. Thanks!
I know I said I would write A humor filled project D. So either I have a writing block or I can't write those stories. I promised you guys a tale today, That I very well know, I did try to sit and write, But the laughs just wouldn't show. I first wrote about cold coffee, Then of my worn out shoe. I've given up so here's a poem To placate all of you.
In short, I'm incapable of writing humor. Project A will commmence either later today or tomorrow.
Haha, nice poem tacky. And what shall your story be this time?
Read a few pages back. Option A.
And since Dragon has been pestering me, let's try a little poetic imagery. Free verse, of course, since I'm lazy.
Lake
It was an epic day, I can still remember, Climbing through Jagged rocks that bit And the gnarled roots That tried to drag me down. There was blackened dirt Under my bitten nails From scratching furrows in Tree bark and loose soil.
I broke through The cell of trees, And found myself submerged. The clouded sky above Weighed down on my lungs. And the lake beneath was clear, Fringed lightly with green, A painter's only masterpiece. The imperfections in the blue Moved slowly to my eyes, Tiny white specks tearing Furrows through the glass.
I felt so very tall, Perched atop A mountain's head. And I sat, content To watch the world Drag by.
Here's my poem for the poetry competition. I don't remember if I posted it already, but if I did, then I'm sorry for my loss of memory.
Who could have known? Where a forest once stood, Where the green had stretched, Yawning, breathing. Where the leaves had once shuddered in unison, is now Scorched to the cracked earth, Broken like toothpicks Casually flung into the fire. Who could have known? Where the kingly oak Once stood, Too proud to be bent, Where his noble subjects Of the grass and fern, Once bowed in reverence To the wind, Is now empty but for His abandoned throne.
Who could have known? Not the fawn, Fleeing from the flames, Not the hawk, Screeching to its nest. The solemn wolf Sits and howls; All is lost.
Time passes, And the wasteland is bare.
But something remains. Under the lost, Under the broken, Under the ragged throne. A tiny fragment Of an empire once grand Lies still and silent, The hope of kings curled up As it sleeps. And the sunlight will shine, And the rain will pour. And as the ground swells, The seeds of the great Will rise from the ashes.
I'd like to thank Walker for the change in title... XD
Each section I post will be a different section in the kid's life. To clarify. This is my first attempt at anything in the voice of a small child, so tell me if I'm messing anything up.
Mama is my favorite person in the whole wide world! Papa's okay but he doesn't play with me as much. I had my fifth birthday today. It was super fun! There was cake and balloons. I got to set up, because Mama was tired. All my friends from Mrs. Green's class came and we had ice cream! Even Jeanie and Bobbie came! Today was a good day! Except meanie Max pushed me down and got my dress dirty. He made me cry. Papa and Mama are fighting again. I hate it when they fight. They yell and shout mean things. It makes me really sad, and Papa breaks things. He broke my lamp yesterday. I just had ice cream! And I got a puppy! I'll call her Minnie. I love presents. At school I got a A+ on my spelling test. The teacher said I'm a good student. I like it when she says nice things. Mama and Papa don't say nice things. I wish they said nice things sometimes.
I got sent to the principal's office today. They thought I cheated! I don't cheat! Why would they think something like that? It's not fair. I studied for that test. It's alright though, because I went to Jeanie's house to play and Bobbie was there too. Jeanie and Bobbie are really fun to play with. We pretended we were on a boat far into the ocean. It was nice and quiet. I'd like to go sailing on a boat someday, all by myself. I would have lots of fun. It would be peaceful, I think. I'm in fifth grade, and we're learning lots of things in school now, like plants and animals. I like learning new things. I think I want to be a whale doctor when I grow up. I could help fishes and also I could have my own boat. Maybe I could bring Minnie to help me catch fish! She likes catching things, like bones and treats and stuff. Max is being mean again. He keeps pushing me down. I tried telling the teacher, but she didn't believe me. I don't know why. I think it's because Max is really rich and has a big house. Maybe teachers like big houses. I tried telling Mommy and Daddy too, but they were too tired to listen. I talked to Minnie instead. Mommy took me hiking last week. I made it to the very top! We were really high up! But we had to hurry down because Daddy doesn't like waiting.
