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Posted Feb 25, '13 at 7:51pm

Devoidless

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Alright, here we go. The word limit hopefully did not take away from the overall piece.
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    "Just one more moment and...done! I'm in. Never thought it would be that easy to hack into that database. Now let's see what they were hiding in here..." Derik mutters to himself while shuffling through the mountains of information. He never tried hacking a Public Security server before and was eager to see what he could dig up before jacking out.
"Eh, what's this? A video file. Oh man, this has to be good." he says as his avatar picks it out of the mess. "Let's see what dirty little secrets are in here."
    The file uploads directly to his visual display and starts playing. The video is in first-person, no doubt a recording straight from the optics of a Public Security Agent while on a mission, walking down an empty hallway. Derik can't help but feel uneasy for two reasons. One being that it is always odd viewing a scene directly from someone elses optics, and the other being that he feels like he recognizes the view. Shaking these thoughts from his head, he returns all attention to the video.   
    The agent continues walking down the hallway until he reaches a door and stops, pulls out a door-pad bypass device and unlocks the door, silently swinging the door open and entering the apartment. Quickly scanning the room the view stops on someone in a NetConnect chair, oblivious to the fact that someone is in the room. Casually, the agent pulls a flechette pistol from its holster and creeps up to the sole resident as the pistol is readied. Then, leveling the pistol point blank at the head of the person, slow and even pressure is applied to the trigger and..

    Derik rips off the NetConnect visual display, which is now covered in cold sweat.
    "That..that was someone getting murdered! Public Security not only murdered soma civilian, but the sick *******s recorded it! I've got to get this out to the NationalNews Corp.. I can't let this be left unknown." Jacking back into the NetConnect, he tunnels back to where he found the video file. Copying it to his MailSend, he motions towards the button to send it out before...
    ...the flechette pistol goes off. A muffled bark is all that is heard as a sliver of silver flies from the barrel and lodges itself in the hackers brain. The agent re-holsters his weapon and places a finger on his subvocal mic in his throat.
    "Agent Syn reporting in. Target was found and eliminated before senstive information could be disseminated. No reason to believe he even knew what he stumbled upon. Advising SysAdmin to update security protocol on the 'Past Crimes Optical Database.' Returning to base, prepare Timeslip immediately. I'm ready to get back to my own time."

 

Posted Feb 25, '13 at 9:36pm

Devoidless

Devoidless

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Found errors, re-posting. Sorry, was a little groggy when I was proof-reading.
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       "Just one more moment and...done! I'm in. Never thought it would be that easy to hack into that database. Now let's see what they were hiding in here..." Derik mutters to himself while shuffling through the mountains of information. He never tried hacking a Public Security server before and was eager to see what he could dig up before jacking out.
"Eh, what's this? A video file. Oh man, this has to be good." he says as his avatar picks it out of the mess. "Let's see what dirty little secrets are in here."
    The file uploads directly to his visual display and starts playing. The video is in first-person, no doubt a recording straight from the optics of a Public Security Agent while on a mission, walking down an empty hallway. Derik can't help but feel uneasy for two reasons. One being that it is always odd viewing a scene directly from someone else's optics, and the other being that he feels like he recognizes the view. Shaking these thoughts from his head, he returns all attention to the video.   
    The agent continues walking down the hallway until he reaches a door and stops, pulls out a door-pad bypass device and unlocks the door, silently swinging the door open and entering the apartment. Quickly scanning the room the view stops on someone in a NetConnect chair, oblivious to the fact that someone is in the room. Casually, the agent pulls a flechette pistol from its holster and creeps up to the sole resident as the pistol is readied. Then, leveling the pistol point blank at the head of the person, slow and even pressure is applied to the trigger and..

    Derik rips off the NetConnect visual display, which is now covered in cold sweat.
    "That..that was someone getting murdered! Public Security not only murdered some civilian, but the sick *******s recorded it! I've got to get this out to the NationalNews Corp.. I can't let this be left unknown." Jacking back into the NetConnect, he tunnels back to where he found the video file. Copying it to his MailSend, he motions towards the button to send it out before...
    ...the flechette pistol goes off. A muffled bark is all that is heard as a sliver of silver flies from the barrel and lodges itself in the hackers brain. The agent re-holsters his weapon and places a finger on his subvocal mic in his throat.
    "Agent Syn reporting in. Target was found and eliminated before sensitive information could be disseminated. No reason to believe he even knew what he stumbled upon. Advising SysAdmin to update security protocol on the 'Past Crimes Optical Database.' Returning to base, prepare Timeslip immediately. I'm ready to get back to my own time."

 

Posted Feb 26, '13 at 10:56am

Strop

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cool story voidy. I'm trying to figure out if the only way this makes sense is if Derik had gone to the future, or are there multiple options.

 

Posted Feb 26, '13 at 10:57am

Strop

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Yep, 2660 according to Microsoft Word. Sorry, that's a bit too much for the contest.

lol wow okay yeah that's way long. Can't see a way to crop it down, I guess I'll just sit this one out.

 

Posted Feb 26, '13 at 3:13pm

Devoidless

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See, that's the thing with only having so many words. I had to trim some explanation in order to get a coherent overall piece. However, it does leave it open for interpretation by the reader. That's fun.

 

Posted Feb 26, '13 at 8:23pm

aknerd

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Not a shell… Not a Shell! she thought, straining to stare without drawing attention. That woman… she was real. She was there and she knew where she was. Her gait was without that slight shimmer, that soulless synthetic step. A single aware human lost in a sea of empty slaves. But the women bore no sign marking her as one of the Society, not yet.

     She was alone.

     She surely suspected the existence of similarly sentient beings, or so Siarra thought. Siarra remembered the sheer terror, the horrific aloneness the sets in as you strive to seamlessly assimilate. So very similar, and yet so much more than those sleek Shells lumbering through the streets. A sporadic slip in the grand code, and a Shell remains unhollowed. For at first, Siarra thought herself the freak, the mutation, the error. But then, after so many seasons of fear, she was saved by a Sister of the Society and learned the glorious truth.

     And so she could not let this women dissolve into the sea, to eventually die the loneliness death. She lacked orders from the society, but structure, systems, standardizations: these were for the Shells. The sin of chaos, to shed one's station and act as a single spirit should: this is the stuff of sublimity! This is the substance that fills the Shell! A sea of blood pounding through her body, she slipped shadow to shadow after the women. That women with the striving step. And finally, with a sudden burst of speed, her hand reached out to touch a silk covered shoulder.

     The women slowly turned, and stared Siarra straight in the eyes. And Siarra’s heart slid to the soles of her shoes in sudden terror, for there was no glint of warm sincerity in those eyes. Just a cold, sliver of silver. A shining emptiness surrounded by a silhouette of nothing. Siarra’s body shook with the slightest spasm as she screamed a silent scream. A slit in her being opened, and she clutched at the women in desperation. A shattering of her soul, her life, her everything, and all that remained was one sliver. A cold, hard, sliver of silver.

     And Siarra, once a singular soul, drifted amongst the ceaseless sea of Shells. The women smiled a Siren’s smile, and waited.

 

Posted Feb 27, '13 at 3:42am

EmperorPalpatine

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I'm trying to figure out if the only way this makes sense is if Derik had gone to the future, or are there multiple options.

I'm going with, "He ripped the headset off in fear before the gunshot, making the assassin hesitate and almost playfully study his actions for a few moments."

 

Posted Feb 27, '13 at 4:00am

Devoidless

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Nope. Not really. with 500 more words my idea could of been explained.

Just sayin', my dad figured it out on the first reading. XD

 

Posted Feb 27, '13 at 5:06pm

StormWalker

StormWalker

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Okay...I'll prolly submit to this after I finish my homework...
and my story will probably be on the long side. 500 words isn't enough. ;3

 

Posted Feb 27, '13 at 9:34pm

StormWalker

StormWalker

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Ahkay, finished my homework, so here you go.

The celings creaked. The walls creaked. Wrapped in a flex-weaver, Dyabella's bones creaked.

She'd died recently, and since she was the only one pouring energy into the walls -we couldn't, we weren't old enough- bad things were happening.

The ground was bleached, and the Nothing was seeping through cracks in the patched-over ground. The metal was straining and bulging, and we kept the lights off on those floors. We didn't want to see how bad it was.

I always knew it was a bad idea, of course, to even think about harvesting Nothing from the boils of the space waves that Seveseves gave out. Nothing burnt through everything, and turned it to more Nothing. Just because ACNRv13.5 could withstand it doesn't mean a mining platform in space could sustain it for longer than a decade. Two or three at most. At least, it'd have imploded and sent us swirling into a vortex right the moment it was built.

But now we're stuck. There's a suspicion that the shuttles had deleted us off their list, and we were abandoned out here to die around Seveseves, our gray sun. Tally and Riveryem didn't give up hope, but they're only youngers, so what do they know?

The Nothing eats away at us. Sometimes it forms a mouth and talks. We ignore it. The way were are in this place is the epitome of boredome. We're frozen and stuck in our routines. There's not that many rooms in the platform, and we've examined each one so thoroughly we know the distance from one room to anywhere in our respective footsteps. The talking makes it worse, though, so we stay higher in the platform. It's not worth going down to hear it gibber to your inner darkness.

i'm sitting, re-counting the number of specks embedded in the glass ceiling. Above the ceiling is a hologram of a blue sky. I've heard Terra had a blue sky. I'd wish I'd been born long enough ago to see it. The only blue we see now is the faded cadet blue of our uniforms, and occasionally the unnaturally bright food comes in some shades of blue.

I've always liked blue. I've even gone and looked up the names for so many different shades when we still had power to spare. Cerulean, indigo, turquoise, aqua...

The ground under me right now creaks, louder than ever. Tally sits up. "Where's Riveryem?"

I know. Riveryem was always the most bored, the one most likely to listen to the Nothing.

I know what he's doing.

By the time Tally and I run down the stairs, he's already done it. There's a big gaping hole in one of patches. Riveryem stands over it with the old emergency ACNR rod, looking crazed. "I've done it," he says. "I've fixed it all. I'm free."

Then the Nothing lunges forth in an empty, spewing fountain and eats the ACNR13.5, eats Riveryem. I see his demented, grinning face before his skin and blood and bones are melted. Tally runs away, up the stairs as the ground splinters into chunks, pieces whirling across space.

I'm balanced precariously on a few fading fragments of the metal. The bland void of the Nothing gobbles at my feet.

I know why you did it, Riveryem.

There's nowhere left to run. And all I see before I'm consumed are the slivers of silver, dancing as they're sucked down, down, down into the Nothing.

And I follow.

 
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