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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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HahiHa
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The Day Lily

Daily gorgeousness,
Svelte jewel in the garden.
Obey dawn and dusk..

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I hope the syllables are alright.

Quirinus1
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I hope the syllables are alright.


Don't worry, they are.
TBear1996
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The Day Lily

A lily subdued,
Angelic yet confounding,
Born only to die.

TBear1996
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Scrap the other title , I'm keeping everything the same apart from the title.

Ante mortem - The day lilium
(Birth and death - The day lily)

A lily subdued,
Angelic yet confounding,
Born only to die.

Quirinus1
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Ante mortem - The day lilium


That actually means: Before death - The day lily
or: In front of death - The day lily
or: Against death - The day lily
TBear1996
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That actually means: Before death - The day lily
or: In front of death - The day lily
or: Against death - The day lily


My bad, i figured after I'd confirmed it D:
Maverick4
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or: Against death - The day lily


That would be 'Anti Mortem', not 'Ante Mortem'. Different words. 'Anti' against, 'Ante', before/in front of.
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That would be 'Anti Mortem', not 'Ante Mortem'. Different words. 'Anti' against, 'Ante', before/in front of.


Okay last one:

Ante Mortem - The day lilium
(Before death - The day lily)

A lily subdued,
Angelic yet confounded,
Born only to die.


We got there in the end
Maverick4
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Petals splayed like brilliant stars,


This is eight syllabuls, and you need seven:

Pet/als splyed like brill/i/ant stars.

Water emanates from


This is six syllabuls, and you need seven:

Wat/er em/a/nates from
howlett
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Well, I'm awful at haiku's, but anyway:

Created for death,
Petals shriveling daily,
Wishing for more time.

EmperorPalpatine
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brill/i/ant

I looked it up earlier for the same reason. It's actually 2 syllables "bril/liant" but people tend to make it 3. He's got 7 syllables total in that line.
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Reminder: Judging will begin tomorrow. No more poems will be accepted after that date.

And does anyone know who's judging?

acmed
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According to Dictionary.com, brilliant only has 2 syllables (bril-yuhnt]). So Jeol, your poem is good.

Quirinus1
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Pessimists ponder,
on days long past, optimists,
reap their own days fresh.

Maverick4
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I looked it up earlier for the same reason. It's actually 2 syllables "bril/liant" but people tend to make it 3. He's got 7 syllables total in that line.


Noted. Jeol, your haiku is good.

And does anyone know who's judging?


Yours truly.
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