A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)! 2) It must fit the weeks theme 3) It must be submitted before the deadline 4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written) 5) One Submission per user 6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
Why must you tease me? Beautiful, young Day Lily. Your death is to quick.
This one was pretty interesting. It was the only one that really focused on mourning the death of the lily. It shows really good structure and grammar, so keep it up.
4) Hahiha
Daily gorgeousness, Svelte jewel in the garden. Obey dawn and dusk..
This one uses a nice vocabulary to get the point across. The way you use the words to describe how the Lily is held sway by larger forces is really good. Keep it up.
3) EmperorPalpatine
Reciprocation: Their beauty fades and withers, As night emerges.
I like how this focuses on the climax of the Lily's life, the end. You can make the claim that the Lily represents the physical beauty of a person's life, and how it fades as they grow older. Good job.
2) howlett
Created for death, Petals shriveling daily, Wishing for more time.
I like this one as it was very simply. It describes the life of the flower in a very eloquent manner, while still maintaining the simplicity of it all. Good job.
1) invisibleninjagirl
Lily, born to light. Thrives, fighting against it's fate. Lives only to die.
This is my favorite one. It starts out uplifting and with hope, before degenerating into acceptance of its faith. It has great structure, and good grammar. Congratulations, you win. Contact a moderator for your merit.
If you did not place and would like a critique, then message me your haiku and state so.
The new theme is 'A Seductive Tide', and submissions will close at 11:59 on August 30th.
I'd just like to make a suggestion, sirmed. The haiku is really good, but just to make it look proper, add some commas and periods. It just makes it better to understand when read out loud. Other than that, it was good.
