So it's very early in the morning, I couldn't sleep anymore and in trying to find something to occupy myself I came across this idea and decided that I would give it a go. This idea is mostly born of a mental stall but I'm hoping that it will be fun and useful for any who choose to participate.
The Goal of this Thread:
Here I invite anyone interested to join me in creative writing exercises. The premise is that someone (I will give a starter) will suggest a subject and any who wish can submit a writing on said subject. I hope that someone else out there is interested!
Guidelines:
All posts most meet expectations posted on Art, Music, and Writing Rules.
Any writing on a posted subject will be welcomed, these should be: descriptive paragraphs, poems, or short stories. Short stories should be posted as links to their location so as to avoid extremely long posts. Constructive criticism and encouragement are also welcome as long as they aren't spam. Please look for the most recently posted subject before submitting writings.
When the time comes for suggesting a subject I will maintain the right to veto any I don't feel are appropriate. I want this to remain a creative thread, not a debate thread, I will thus shoot down any subjects concerning politics or religion. Any other subjects that do not breech forum rules will be acceptable. Once there are a few people involved (assuming there is any interest) I will arrange for subjects to be voted on by participants. I will ask that subject suggestions be sent to my profile. Thank You!
Starter Subject: An apple.
The crisp red skin of the apple gives way with a snap as she bites into it, revealing the soft white flesh contained within. The sweet juices rush to meet her tongue as she chews, savoring every droplet of flavor. Every bite brings more of the apples succulent aroma. Every tear of her teeth releases more of the tangy juice. Soon she is wiping juice from her chin and licking it from her fingers, reluctant to waste even a drop of it's powerful elixir. The apple's flesh is gradually torn away and only the core remains in the end.
So, I know that's not much of a starter but like I said this is an idea born of a mental stall. So show me what you've got people! Thanks!
Not supposed to mean anything. Little sister scores! Alright, I'll start writing a horror story.
Shane pulled his coat closer to him as the biting October winds whistled past his ears. His nose was red and numb, as were his fingers. He ignored all that, clutching the ebony chest in his icy fingers as if it were the most precious thing in the world. His breath came out in ragged heaves, causing a slight mist to occur. The crisp crunch of snow sounded beneath his feet as he walked, not noticing that the pristine blanket of snow was not white as it should be, but pink, streams of scarlet liquid gushing behind Shane as he walked, running from his half-mutilated stomach down his leg to the snow. He noticed none of that, the pain, the blood, the cold, his attention fixated on his prize. He had been in the forest with his friends, Angie, Lisa, and Mike, exploring the dark woods after school as usual. The snow falling down onto their heads made them laugh, and a massive snowball fight ensued. Whilst gathering snow for the fight, Shane noticed something strange. A shiny black object protruding strangely from the white snow. He ran towards it and picked it up.He called his friends, and they raced towards him, the snowball fight forgotten. Their curiosity piqued, they had decided to open the box. Inside was the most beautiful thing in the world, and each of them saw a different creature. And each wanted it for themselves. Mike had made the first grab for the box, and his hand was quickly swept aside by Angie, the two close friends getting into a fistfight, blood spurting from hammering fists. That left Lisa and Shane to fight it out over the box. Lisa had grabbed it and Shane had tackled her, taking his friend down. His mind had been crystal clear. That box was more important than anything. The creature in the box urged them all on, and the friends fought. Pounding his elbow into Lisa's nose, breaking it, Shane grabbed the box. Then Mike drew his pocketknife. He lunged at Angie first, slitting her throat. Blood sprayed across all of them, splattering the white snow with red. Then he went for Shane, jabbing at his chest. Shane managed to somewhat deflect the knife off his arm, slicing it deeply, but diverting a killing blow to his stomach instead. Then he made a grab for the knife. Shane and Mike grappled, and suddenly Shane came out victorious, wielding the knife. With no hesitation, he stabbed it into his friend's face, then whirled around and killed Lisa. Then he picked up the box and the creature gently, and hobbled home. Shane was unsure what was happening to him, just that the box and the creature were the most important things in the world. "You did well, Shane," it crooned. Shane smiled, a gruesome sight with his bloody gums and missing teeth from the fight. "Who are you?" he asked. "I'm Cupid," answered the creature. "Love is the most beautiful thing in the world. And seeing someone kill for you...makes you feel so great. It's indescribable." "I will do whatever you ask, Cupid," said Shane, with dedication. "I want you to do something for me," said Cupid, smiling. "What?" asked Shane. "Kill yourself."
The boy's body clunking to the ground echoed throughout the snow-covered houses and streets, the blood gushing through the gutters like a rain of scarlet terror.
i don't like that the creature told shane to kill himself. it would remain in the woods without anyone to fight over it. i think it would rather that shane took him into the city where you could have different episodes of people fighting over the box. anyway, i like the idea and i think it could be a video game theme defanately.
Umm....thanks? What don't you like about the creature telling Shane to kill himself? I mean, it said that it loved having people kill over it or for it, and that includes killing themselves. He did take it into the city. Notice how at the end the noise his body made was heard throughout houses and streets? That means he went to the city. And it's MAH story! Lol. Thanks for the review, though.
yeah, i really liked it. i like the theme of having this seductive craving that deceives the people. like that story called The Pearl, where the diver finds a black pearl and it destroys his family and everything that he's dedicated his life for.
I liked the fact that you started with the guy bleeding, it really got me interested to see how he got that way.
Anyway, some things didn't make sense in the story to me. Like, why would a body that's falling onto a "ristine blanket of snow" make any sound at all?
so i just realized that the gutters would be covered in snow and so there wouldn't really be a river of scarlett terror running through them.
but i was also thinking about your idea that inside the box "...was the most beautiful thing in the world, and each of them saw a different creature." that is so great! maybe you could do something more with it??
@Jessikar I liked the story. Pretty brutal. I think you could have made it a little clearer that he was taking the box back into town though, maybe mentioning it in the first section where you describe Shane walking in the bitter cold.
@Manta Yeah we are still on horror. I was thinking of choosing a new topic Monday but you can still but I won't be upset if you submit horrors for a few days after that.
All are welcome to join, at least if you have any interest in practicing writing skills or helping others do so by offering constructive criticism. I'd love to get your topic suggestions on my profile!
I will draw a new subject in an hour or so. Horrors will be welcome until Friday. Partically because I like them =P and partically because I want to see what some other people come up with.
I know that a lot of people start school this week or have recently gone back so I would like to remind everyone that school work takes priority. This thread is just a fun way for those interested in writing to practice. The only reason I'm imposing any deadlines at all is for my own benefit. I've always had a difficult time working with a time limit so that is something I'm trying to practice myself. I guess what I'm trying to say is that the deadlines I put on this are only a guideline. If you have something you really want to get feedback on that is from a previous subject feel free to submit it, just make sure to mention which subject it pretains to. I'm really enjoying reading everyones work so I hope that people continue to participate. XD
