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So it's very early in the morning, I couldn't sleep anymore and in trying to find something to occupy myself I came across this idea and decided that I would give it a go. This idea is mostly born of a mental stall but I'm hoping that it will be fun and useful for any who choose to participate.

The Goal of this Thread:

Here I invite anyone interested to join me in creative writing exercises. The premise is that someone (I will give a starter) will suggest a subject and any who wish can submit a writing on said subject. I hope that someone else out there is interested!

Guidelines:

All posts most meet expectations posted on Art, Music, and Writing Rules.
Any writing on a posted subject will be welcomed, these should be: descriptive paragraphs, poems, or short stories. Short stories should be posted as links to their location so as to avoid extremely long posts. Constructive criticism and encouragement are also welcome as long as they aren't spam. Please look for the most recently posted subject before submitting writings.
When the time comes for suggesting a subject I will maintain the right to veto any I don't feel are appropriate. I want this to remain a creative thread, not a debate thread, I will thus shoot down any subjects concerning politics or religion. Any other subjects that do not breech forum rules will be acceptable. Once there are a few people involved (assuming there is any interest) I will arrange for subjects to be voted on by participants. I will ask that subject suggestions be sent to my profile. Thank You!

Starter Subject: An apple.

The crisp red skin of the apple gives way with a snap as she bites into it, revealing the soft white flesh contained within. The sweet juices rush to meet her tongue as she chews, savoring every droplet of flavor. Every bite brings more of the apples succulent aroma. Every tear of her teeth releases more of the tangy juice. Soon she is wiping juice from her chin and licking it from her fingers, reluctant to waste even a drop of it's powerful elixir. The apple's flesh is gradually torn away and only the core remains in the end.

So, I know that's not much of a starter but like I said this is an idea born of a mental stall. So show me what you've got people! Thanks!

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Ah, well, I'm impatient. And besides, it's just mental exercise. Prep for new story!

"Hey Tom, why don't you tell us a ghost story?" said Jimmy, trying to warm his hands at the campfire. He didn't really trust Tom. They had found him in the woods, wandering, completely lost, a few hours prior. Their cell phones didn't get reception here, and they had no means of leaving(their parents would pick them up tomorrow, and the city was about 20 miles away, and they didn't even have their bikes) so they decided to let him stay with them for the night.
"Yeah Tom, I'm not really good at that kinda thing," agreed Mike. He shifted on the rough log he had chosen to sit on. He half-wished that they had chosen to go with his little sister and mom trick-or-treating instead of going on the Halloween camping trip at Lake Kalakaua. Erica might annoy him, but at least home was warm and not at all frightening. Something felt off about these woods they were camped in. He rubbed his silver cross necklace. His grandma had told him it was made of pure silver. Rubbing it always comforted him.
"Fine," said the lanky figure on the far left. The firelight illuminated his thin, pale face. His eyes almost seemed to glow. Add to that the fact that he was dressed all in black and had close cropped black hair, made him downright creepy. And then he began to talk, in the frightening, low whisper he reserved for ghost stories. It was hypnotizing.
"In the late 1700s, there was a boy who was drowned in a lake shore far from home. His name was Daniel Cooper, and he was only 13. Nobody investigated the case, because he'd been born on a Halloween, on a Friday. At that time, of course, superstition was at its' all-time high, so everyone in the small villa he lived in assumed he'd dabbled in witchcraft and so, didn't care about him. The constable said it was an accidental drowning, and everyone let it go without another thought. The next Halloween, however, Cooper took matters into his own hands, desperate to bring the people who drowned him to justice. He finally gathered the strength to speak to the people. He told them who his killers were. However, the townsfolk, still being superstitious, hailed the murderers as heroes for killing a demon. This infuriated Cooper. He again spoke to them, Halloween the next year. This time, he warned them to serve justice, or he would reap his revenge. Being frightened, the people went to the local priest. He promised them that he would protect them from Cooper, and told them not to obey him. They believed him. The local "witch hunters", the people who had killed Cooper, were now being avoided largely. They became rather sick of this. The next Halloween, Cooper swore to take his revenge on his murderers, and all the people who had let them get away. By this time, he had grown very strong. He caused plagues, droughts, and famines to come to the town all year. Finally, on the next Halloween, the desperate townsfolk pleaded and begged for Cooper to make it stop. They took the murderers and publicly executed them. But Cooper, who had developed an evil side, continued with the natural disasters anyway. Finally, the priest took action. He banished Cooper, and for almost 100 years Cooper remained dormant, unable to do anything. But then, some foolish girl who had got it in her head that she was a witch, tried to summon Cooper. She failed, but she cut herself on the knife she was using. A single drop of blood fell. This gave Cooper all his power back. He then became corrupted and hungry for power.He killed the girl and took her blood. This continued for years, until finally Cooper realized what he had been doing. He controlled himself. He took blood only once a year, on Halloween, simply to keep himself alive. But slowly, as the fertile soil the village was built on transformed into harsh mountain and woods terrain. It was unfit to live on anymore, so the residents moved away, and Cooper's power began to fade. Years later, it is rumored that he still remains."
Mike shivered, but Jimmy cheered.
"That was, without doubt, the best ghost story I've ever heard! What do you think, Mike?" Jimmy said
"It...was ok," Mike said. The ghost story had really spooked him.
"Oh. Are you scared, bro? Come on. You're scared of a ghost story? You have to look at your little sister Erica's face every day, a task that would reduce most people to whimpering in a corner, but we come across a moderately scary ghost story and you shiver?" Jimmy said
"It was really frightening," Michael said, shaking his head.
"Just remember it's not real, Mike," said Jimmy
"Oh no, this one's real," said Tom.
"Pfft. Sure," said Jimmy disbelievingly.
"It's true," said Tom. Mike tried to elbow Jimmy to stop, but Jimmy wouldn't back down.
"Uh-huh. How would you know?" Jimmy asked.
"Because I'm Daniel Cooper," growled Tom. Then he disappeared.

The next morning, when the two boys' parents came to pick them up, all they found at the campsite was a silver cross necklace, covered in blood.

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Moabarmorgamer:

*tires squeal to a sudden stop*. Allow me to clarify. I have made a typo in my name. It is Moatarmorgamer. Not moab. Moat. *sigh*
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Okay I have been super busy today and every minute I had to get at my computer was devoted to getting my story done.
So I'm just going to make a few quick comments and then post my story.

First Moat, yes you can post more than one story (though it's a little late to stop ya :P). I guess I would just say try to limit it to like five or so. I knew as soon as I drew this suggestion that this was going to come up so I don't know why I didn't address it sooner.

Second I will come back and do comments on stories I haven't gotten to yet a little later. I've been staring at text for too long and my eyes a liable to start bleeding if I don't let them rest.

Now for my story. I don't know if it's really very scary but I would love to see peoples comments on it.

Beautiful Trust

Bella was trying her best to remain calm. This was difficult because she had been bound hand and foot and forced into a large wooden trunk. The larger of the two men had placed her there and adjusted and readjust her limbs until she was folded in such a way that allowed him to close the lid on top of her. She wasn't gagged, she could yell and scream all she wanted to but she had already learned that it would accomplish nothing. The scream she had let loose when they grabbed her had come up short when she was knocked out, when she regained consciousness her hands had already been tied and by that binding she was tethered to a leg thick wooden post.
The smaller of the two men had greeted her on awakening with a huge smile. If the circumstances had been different Bella might have thought him handsome, with his bright blue eyes and his dark hair hanging down around his face in a careless sort of way. As it was though, all she had noticed was that the smile had no impression on the eyes, leaving them ice cold, and that the pleasantness of his features only served to make him more intimidating.
âYou are not gagged,â the smiling man had told her in an all too pleasant voice. âYou may scream and cry to your heart's content, there is no one around who will aid the delusions of one who does not yet understand the Way.â
He had walked away then, leaving Bella to follow his instructions. She had done just that too, screaming and crying and pleading until she could barely speak for the rawness of her throat. She had fallen then to examining her bonds, trying to work the knot that fastened her to the post loose. It was no use, the knot was complicated and tightly tied and she only succeeded in earning a rope burn around each wrist. Bella had decided that perhaps she could undo the rope where it was bound around the post but had found that knot equally unyielding. There was little left at that point but to try to learn as much about her surroundings as she could, and she had thus sat down and made a survey of the place in which she found herself.
The thick post stood in the center of a circle of dust dry earth. Outside of the circle patchy grass covered what appeared to be a farm yard. Not far away to her left had been a large barn, its weathered gray doors closed to her. A few chickens had been out scratching about in the yard but Bella hadn't been able to spot the coop and she had heard the occasional squeal of a pig coming from one side of the barn. A little distance away to her right was a small flock of sheep inside a stone walled pen, the flock ram had stared back at her in a stern way when she looked at them. Right in front of her but a way off there had been an extremely old looking house. Other than that the entire yard was surrounded by forest as far as she had been able to tell. She eventually grew tired of sitting waiting so she had gotten up and walked as far from the post as her bonds would allow her to. Her feet had come just to the edge of the dirt circle. She had wondered just how many people had been tied to that post for the ground around it to have been worn bare.
She had been left in the yard that way for sometime, occasionally getting up to pace to dirt ring. The sheep watched her the whole time as though she were some sort of puzzle. She saw no one else after the smiling man had walked away. Eventually the day had faded into night and she had sat down against the post, exhausted, and fallen asleep.
When she woke again she was being carried into the barn by the larger man. Once they had entered the barn she had been placed inside the trunk. There were quarter sized holes at intervals around the edge of the lid and through one of these she could just see the smiling man standing beside the door. The yard outside was dark but inside the barn was filled with lantern light. She could hear the brothers arguing.
âI think we should wait Paul,â said one voice.
âYou don't think Pete,â the man by the door responded. âWe're doing the work father left for us and that's it.â
âBut why are we starting the teaching so soon?â Bella heard the big man called Pete say. âWe have always given them time to adjust to the idea that they will never leave here again.â
âThis one is special, Pete,â Paul's face was split once again by his humorless smile. âWe starting right away because I can't stand to wait. All the others are just tools, this one will be brought to the way so that I can take her as my wife.â
âYour wife?â Pete sounded surprised but it was no match for the terror building inside Bella.
âYes Pete, my wife,â Paul scowled. âDo you think father intended that we should carry on his work forever? No, he expected us to do as he did and pass on the task to our sons.â
âBut we haven't got any sons Paul,â Pete stated with obvious confusion.
Paul's hand came up and slapped Pete in the face. âThat's why I'm taking a wife you fool,â he spat with rage. âWhere do you think our mother came from? Father taught her the Way, just as he taught us to do. He taught her so that she could be his wife and give him sons.â
Bella was trying to take deep slow breaths. Crammed in the box with her knees folded up against her chest made this difficult but she knew if she started panicking she was really done for. She managed to move one elbow enough to give her chest a little more space but bumped it against the side of the trunk in the process. The sound drew the brothers' attention and in a heart beat Paul was beside the box smiling at me through the hole.
âI'm glad you're awake sweet-heart,â he beamed. âIt's time for us to begin teaching you the Way of Trust.â Bella only stared at him.
âOnce you have learned you will be my wife and we will have a very happy life together,â he was absolutely beaming. This was the first time she had seen the smile have any affect on his eyes, and the affect it had was frightening. Those eyes were cold blue fire now, they held the intensity of one who knows the ultimate purpose of life and is tormented by the ignorance of the world around them. âYou will learn that you must trust me because I will always do what is best for you. You will understand that you must trust me because I am the only one in the world worth trusting. You will know that you must trust me because I will always love you.â
Then Paul gave his brother a nod and the trunk was lifted off of the ground. Bella tried to see what was going on outside of the box through the one hole she had been able to see anything through but everything was darkness. She could hear Pete breathing heavily above her. The whole world seemed to sway back and forth as he carried her. Bella was beginning to grow dazed and dizzy from exhaustion and the steady rocking of the trunk when there was a sudden lurch.
Bella was vaguely aware of the sensation of falling before the trunk came down with a splash in some body of water. The trunk floated on the surface but her weight was unbalanced enough that it tilted one direction. The holes on the lower side began taking in water first in small gulps then in steady streams. Bella tried to keep breathing, the space in the trunk that contained air was rapidly shrinking. She could hardly move but she did her best to get her face as close to the dry holes as she could. Just before the water level in the trunk took the holes under she thought she heard someone shouting. She shouted back and then held her breath.
The air in the box was gone, there was only water now. Bella held her breath tight and prayed that something would save her from this. Stars began to dance behind her eyelids and she felt as though the world was shifting around her. Something was pulling her and suddenly she was above the surface of the water. Sweet air filled her aching lungs as she began coughing and sputtering. She clutched desperately at the coat of the person who was dragging her from trunk and holding her up right as she stood panting and dripping. Then she was laughing with tears streaming down her face and she wasn't sure if it was the sheer joy of still being alive or if she had cracked.
When she had gotten her breath enough to speak Bella looked up to thank the person who had rescued her. Paul smiled at her. She screamed and tried to push away from him but he held her tightly and she was still tied up.
âYou didn't believe I would let you drown, did you?â he said with a grin that put fire in his eyes.


So it's pretty long. I hope it wasn't to painfully boring.

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(Walks in holding his back)

I liked your story LTT, really good, sorry I can't say more, I got hit in the back by a freaking truck bed... (Note to everyone: When helping your neighbors move in a heavy object, don't turn around before they put the bed down...)

gonna go to bed to rest my sore tail bone...

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@Reton8:

More of a joke than me being serious. It loosely ties in with the subject.


I thought it tied in with the subject very well. Anything that makes you feel horrified fits really and I know that's a situation that would horrify me. :O

@Bronze:
I like your story. Very short and sweet (not the best phrase but I hope you get what I mean), which is something I didn't manage to accomplish. I thought the way you discribed the sound of his heart was great and I really loved that you left the 'thing' completely to the imagination, it allows the mind to come up with it own horrific mental image.

@Moat:
I kinda guessed about the typo thing awhile ago seeing as everyone calls you Moat. I was just being lazy at the time and copying names off the list. :P
I loved your second story though. Totally creepy.

@SoulHack:
All I can say about your experiance with the truck: Ouch! I hope you feel better. But thank you very much for reading!

*goes off to seek answers regarding the quotation mark issue*
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Thankyou LLT, I usually favor stories that don't decide everything for you so that is what I tried to write.

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goes off to seek answers regarding the quotation mark issue

I've had problems with that myself, and to save you some time, I'll give you the answer straightaway. Use wordpad to c/p. Hope I helped.
I kinda guessed about the typo thing awhile ago seeing as everyone calls you Moat. I was just being lazy at the time and copying names off the list. :P

And...that's just peeving! You couldn't take the time to type four letters? Nah, nah. It's fine. I have been exhausted like that too. At least you got my name right this time.*mutters angrily to self: Why did you have to typo your name...*
I loved your second story though. Totally creepy.

Thanks! I thought it might have been a bit cliche and predictable, but the vote is in and it is clear!
I might have something more to submit in a while. Why? Because my writer's block has disappeared!
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@Moat:

Use wordpad to c/p. Hope I helped.

Yeah that definately helps. Thanks for the tip. XD
You couldn't take the time to type four letters?

lol What can I say, I'm really lazy when it comes right down to it.
a bit cliche and predictable

Well I can't say that its not at all cliche. It is a little but not enough so to take away from the story.
Why? Because my writer's block has disappeared!

Glad to hear it.

I would love to know if you have any thoughts on my story Moat (other than the annoying quotes thing). You write great horror so it would be awesome to get your opinion on it.
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I liked your story, milady. A little more closure couldn't have hurt, though. Who are the two men? What happens to Bella from that point? Are there more who believe in the Way of Trust? What about the "others", the other people to be kidnapped? Loose ends to tie up, although it's understandable why they're not, seeing as how your story was already a wall of text as it was. But still a very good story.
And you consider me a good horror writer? Thanks! Nichodemus is better than I am, and alt's pretty good too(I think they've both contributed here at some point, have they not?). And if you like my stuff, Alvin Schwartz is an amazing short horror story author.

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Ok, this one is new(although I still have some dusty old horror stories, I decided a new one would be best).

Amy whistled a lilting tune as she strode down the road, her dress flowing behind her. The new house stood three stories tall, whitewashed, and yet still appeared to hold the old-fashioned theme. Her parents had explained that the pipes were leaky and that was why they were temporarily staying in the hotel, but Amy was a curious girl and wanted to see the leaking pipes for herself. At just eight years old, she was clever and observant, sometimes nosy. She walked up the steps to the house, noting the tiny piles of sawdust around the steps. The door creaked loudly as she entered. She saw the pipes in question. A greenish slime oozed slowly out of the pipes, gurgling and hissing as it made contact with the hardwood floor. A veritable mound of the stuff had gathered up. Amy could see that it might be dangerous, but her curiosity won out, and she picked up the smallest chunk of it and put it in her dress pocket. Strangely, when Amy touched the slime it was liquid, then seemed to solidify so she could pick it up. But the young befreckled redhead saw no reason why that should matter, and skipped away from the house.

"Joseph," said Amy's mother to her father. He turned to face her, his face grimy from working in the nearby coal mine.
"Yes?" he replied wearily.
"I'm worried about Amy. She's getting pale and-" said her mom, but the father shook his head.
"She's always been pale, Rose. She's pale. It doesn't mean anything," he snapped. He'd had a rough day, and didn't really care to hear his wife's paranoid blubbering. Rose recoiled and the man regretted his sharpness.
"And the school teacher said she's started not being able to do her work," continued the mother, rubbing her hands worriedly.
"Look, Amy's a smart girl," said Joseph. "She's probably just adjusting to the new house. We just now moved in. Give her some time, and she'll snap right into the new routine."
"But the teacher said she started bullying other childr-"
"Look, Rose, Amy's a very nice girl. She would not bully others. Now can we please table this discussion until after dinner?" rebutted Joseph. Suddenly, Amy skipped down the stairs. Her hair seemed fiery, and her skin seemed transparent, perhaps with a greenish tinge. Her light green eyes darkened.
"Mommy, Daddy, what were you talking about?" she said venomously.

Amy struggled to maintain control of the green goo during church. It seemed to be wriggling to get out. Flecks of it seemed to dissolve right into her skin. It was growing. Horrified, Amy returned home and went straight into her bedroom. Suddenly, the ooze exploded, splattering Amy soundlessly with the slime. She thought angrily of how many times she'd have to wash her clothes to get the stuff out, then realized she might have more important things to worry about, as the ooze grew.

"Joseph, I'm serious. Look! The last three residents of the house disapp-"
"Rose, just be quiet, please!" exclaimed Amy's father, annoyed to no end. Suddenly they both heard screams coming from Amy's bedroom, and raced up the stairs.

Amy felt the goo growing and contracting until she was completely encased in it. She struggled to breathe. She let out a scream, and her parents rushed up, the thin mucus-like layer of slime letting her see a distorted, green-tinted image. She fought, biting, kicking, clawing, but the slime grew strong and always grew, until it was like a solid coffin of green goop. And then she felt it dissolving her. And being absorbed in.

Joseph came in time to see his daughter being swallowed by some sort of slime. He couldn't fight it, for fear of hurting her. Suddenly there was a loud, disgusting SSHLOCK!!!! and the slime began being sucked into Amy, and she transformed before his frightened eyes. Her hair turned from red to jet-black, her skin from pale to tan, her eyes from bright green to electric blue. A young boy stood before him, where Amy had once been.
"What did you do to Amy?" roared Joseph, picking up the boy by his throat.
"I was...trapped in the slime," growled the boy. "Cari took control of me when I got stuck in the slime, my body was transformed into Cari and I stayed inside the goo. And then your daughter came and I took her."
Joseph dropped the boy abruptly.
Have you seen any green leaks in your house lately?
Could you take a chunk out of it, please?
I mean, Amy's waiting.
It's been so long...
So, if you've seen any green slime around.
Pick it up.
Please.
What harm could it do?

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Loose ends to tie up

Yeah I kinda felt that way too but since it was already a wot I thought I would leave it hanging. I may eventually add more to it.

Nichodemus is better than I am, and alt's pretty good too(I think they've both contributed here at some point, have they not?).

Both have contributed comments. Alt said he was sick and that instant results are impossible and Nicho said that it sounded interesting but he might need a lot of time. I'm still hoping to see something from each of them but I'm not rushing anything since it's all just for fun and a way to practice.

The new story is great Moat. The end made me laugh. I did wonder though if the slime was really affecting her personality or if it was just coincidence.
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Just to let everyone know I am going to keep this thread going as long as I have the time to keep it up.
I will most likely draw a new subject on Monday but I will be happy to accept suggestions until then. Subject suggestions can be anything you like as long as they aren't politics or religion.

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I am almost done with my revised OS, but the doctor says I have a ruptured disk, so I am gonna be going through a lot of legal crap to sue my neighbor...

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@Soul
wow that stinks!

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Hi! Can I join? Horror's not my specialty, but I bet I could whip something up, especially if Moat could.

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