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Compilations for the win!!
Today I actually put titles on my poems, because I hadn't before.
I don't have a favorite poet, mainly because I don't read very much poetry. If it's a book written in poetry, I like it, but otherwise, no.
Anyway.
You may critique/review it if you like. Or give feedback, etc. Actually, please critique it. And give feedback. Please, please, give me reasons for your opinions. I like in depth comments. (Who doesn't?)
Anyway(for the second time):
Here's the first.
Inspirat
âBe the change you want to see in the worldâ ~ Mahatma Ghandi
Life does not spring from death
Freedom is not a force that breaks chains
Love will not erupt from hate
Power does not flow from weakness
You must make your life what it is
be it happy or sad
slow or fast
light or burdened
You must have willpower
to fight against what you do not want
life does not happen, before your eyes
while you watch
and be lazy
sitting on a couch
eating Doritos
Yes, you may watch television
and see what you think is life
but you will never be exhilarated
sitting down
You need to be the one
standing at the edge of the cliff
trying to keep your balance
while someone is pushing you down
You need to be the one
rushing down the slope
in makeshift skis
trying to get away from your captors
No house will rise
from the rubble
if no one works to build it
you will not eat
if no food comes to your mouth
What you want will not happen
if you do not make it so.
(I was too lazy to finish the title)
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Next one... I'm starting to feel that this is pointless, but whatever.
Memory
Oh gravity, thou art a heartless cow
â¨To not let us float on breaths of airâ¨
We could hoverâ¨
Controlled only by weightless linesâ¨
That connect us to the earthâ¨
Or we might fly free, lost within our atmosphereâ¨
With no weight, there is no here.
â¨But with no weight, there will be no fear.
Without fear, life will be wonderful
â¨We will whiz past all obstacles
â¨All life-floats
â¨And stay in space, without a careâ¨
We will never see anything elseâ¨
Just clouds and stars and air
But we will have no-one to converse withâ¨
There will be nothing to see
â¨Nothing to bring us backâ¨
To earth as we know it
â¨And we will forget everything that we consist of
Be it
â¨Loveâ¨
Or griefâ¨
Or happinessâ¨
Or even contentment
â¨We will forget it all.
Oh gravity, thou art a heartless cowâ¨
But it is better to have no heart at allâ¨
Than to have one be brokenâ¨
For losing emotion hides all weakness.â¨
But then, where is the will to live?
â¨With no gravity to push against you, you would not feel the need to
â¨Stand.â¨
With no heart to help you love, would it be your desire
â¨To hold love on your own two shoulders?
There can never be a perfect fireâ¨
It will warm and illuminateâ¨
But it can also burn and ravageâ¨
Beautiful lands that are now so desolateâ¨
So be careful of your decisions,
â¨Or you may take the bait.
Oh, jeez. That was bad. I'll try to fix that, but in the meantime....
3. Safe Place
Hiding in my safe place, hiding with my eyes shut
â¨no one can see me
â¨I almost hear counting, but there is only silence
â¨I know this isn't a game, but
â¨I feel like smiling
â¨The memories of running, of laughing
â¨barely an echo in my mind
Behind my eyelids I see flashing lightsâ¨
But it's hard to know if they're really there.â¨
I hear the windâ¨
feel the air on my skin
All is quiet.â¨
This is the placeâ¨
that I knowâ¨
Where I am not scaredâ¨
No one is hunting meâ¨
I am safeâ¨
I am quietâ¨
I am at peace.
Cross my fingers for no weird stuff.
Minced Mint Notes
The money isn't worth the price I paidâ¨
These bills are grey and crinkledâ¨
They feel soft, like peach fuzz.â¨
The green mint note isn't nearly so sharpâ¨
And I think it's going to rip
Come, Waiter, and serve me my fresh green notes,â¨
crisp, smooth, and perfect for my walletâ¨
I'll give you my old bills as payment
â¨Is that worth it? No? Well, how about you call it.
I thank you profusely
â¨for currently you give me currencyâ¨
of every kindâ" Euros, Francs, Dollars, Yen, Pounds.â¨
Even in coins.â¨
Clink, Clink, Clink.
â¨These noises replace the sound of water dripping into the sink.â¨
Instead of hearing the wind I hear paper rubbing togetherâ¨
Instead of hearing voices I hear a rush of metal, like a waterfallâ¨
Instead of hearing life,â¨I hear moneyâ¨
But, maybe I do hear life.
â¨Now, money is my life.
Thank you! I'd almost lost all faith in people who had already said they liked my poems.
Aesop Wolf
(âAesopâ is not my invention and I claim no ownership of the name.)
The wolf laughs with unrestrained glee
At the sheep it knows it will slay
The helpless lamb cries out a plea
And the wolf begins to bay
The moon howls back, a lonely tune
The wolf settles into his snack
But if only his stomach
had enough room
He'd be able to finish the task.
The title and the part about thinking in this poem are meant to correspond.
Donât Even Think About Changing
Those dark blue eyes
Stare back at me
What are you thinking, I wonder?
You seem to have traveled
to Paris and back
To Tokyo, and beyond
while sitting in a room
with thousands of words
reading through universes, abroad.
So, what are you thinking?
Are you thinking of me?
Are you thinking of you?
I will never know.
But I do know this- you are who you need to be.
This is a haiku I submitted, but some people said It was wrong, because the syllables went 7-5-5, not 5-7-5. But I still think it's a good haiku, personally.
Cherry Tree
If this tree brings petals that
Were our skin, we would
Float on breaths of air.
I'll take some time to review those later, but for now can I just ask you if you're using microsoft word?
Because the program employed by word is what makes these strange signs; just try to write on wordpad, it'll most likely revert to normal.
Ps: copying files from word to wordpad won't work, you really need to tap the '' signs in word for them to appear as such.
From a quick glance though, those seems to be quite good.
tap the '' signs in word
I meant in wordpad, of course, sorry.
Use Notepad, and change the encoding to Unicode. That will prevent the formatting error.
Unfortunately I do not have Notepad nor the ability to encode to Unicode. I also do not have the time, money, nor privileges to obtain this application.
However, I did find a way to solve my problem, however it was a bit late.
Anyway, I have a Mac, not a PC.
Oh! I found another one that I'd totally forgotten about.
No one's posted after me.... Maybe it's because my poem is so wonderful that no one could compete. just joking, I know it's not very good. Anyway:
Flowing across my vision
like choppy waves
It is dark, it is black. It swallows
my last memories of light
This dark horse
Flies across the world
this nightmare
She's tired, she's cold.
Like a ghost, she soars through reality
this ragged nightmare
Then, a crash! And bright red light slices through my
dream
my sweet, gentle dream
is no longer
I am in a nightmare
Where am I?
I am back again
on the beach where there is
cold, salty spray
Drenching this poor, sad nightmare
Her mane and tale seem as if they are made of dark grey clouds
that have been shredded with a cheese grater
Her coat is a dull silver-black
I can't see it though, through this nightmare, but
I just know
And a growing sound comes
Overwhelming me with its might
And I and this nightmare
are returned home
to a place where silence
is everywhere
and I am satisfied.
Oops, it's "tail" not "tale" but this computer's keyboard is bad. Oh well. I do know how to spell the word though.
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