Today I actually put titles on my poems, because I hadn't before.
I don't have a favorite poet, mainly because I don't read very much poetry. If it's a book written in poetry, I like it, but otherwise, no.
Anyway.
You may critique/review it if you like. Or give feedback, etc. Actually, please critique it. And give feedback. Please, please, give me reasons for your opinions. I like in depth comments. (Who doesn't?)
Anyway(for the second time):
Here's the first.
Inspirat
âBe the change you want to see in the worldâ ~ Mahatma Ghandi
Life does not spring from death Freedom is not a force that breaks chains Love will not erupt from hate Power does not flow from weakness
You must make your life what it is be it happy or sad slow or fast light or burdened
You must have willpower to fight against what you do not want life does not happen, before your eyes while you watch and be lazy sitting on a couch eating Doritos
Yes, you may watch television and see what you think is life but you will never be exhilarated sitting down
You need to be the one standing at the edge of the cliff trying to keep your balance while someone is pushing you down You need to be the one rushing down the slope in makeshift skis trying to get away from your captors
No house will rise from the rubble if no one works to build it you will not eat if no food comes to your mouth
What you want will not happen if you do not make it so. (I was too lazy to finish the title)
How am I to critique this? Oh, I like the one on pg4 about boys and their games, but skateboarding knowledge is actually cool. Sooooo look I just critiqued!
Why didn't you add the last stanza from the first one? It was great with it. Don't get me wrong, I like this one still, but the other one was slightly better.
Like... this new edit, it added length, and that is good, but the other felt like it was actually.... something. Like, there was a real feeling behind it... I'm not one for re-edits, I like it when you write what is on your mind, and it stays raw and unrefined. Sooo
Did you really just do that? it was the same for both, and I do believe I explained via profile chat. ;D Sooooo. If wolf makes wolf pies, you are icy and you make..... I dunno. Pick what metaphor you want your poetry to be.
You could be cake! The icing to the cake! xD OOOOHHHHHH SNAP. I could be the cake, and you could be the icing! We could make a poem together! But I dunno how that would work out.... We do have different minds that don't spit out the same.... hmm. What do you think? Do you wanna try to make a poem with me?
No, seriously, I despise how cold it is. I don't really like anything cold. I don't like ice cream. I guess if it tastes amazing I can stand it, but if the taste is anything below amazing I won't eat it.
