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Posted Apr 1, '11 at 3:35pm

ManiacalMind

ManiacalMind

173 posts

WE WE WE SO EXCITED...WE SO EXCITE...

You must have closed the song before she finished the word?

___

Can't wait to see a haiku though, good luck.

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 4:01pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

This might be the worst poem I have ever written DX
I was in a seasonal mood though, and this is my thread so I post what I want. Also, it's FRIDAY, FRIDAY. >:D

Season's Anger

Winter's harshest winds
Cut through the trees like sharp glass
Blinding us with snow

Spring melts frozen earth,
Casting torrents of water
That hurtle downhill

Then Summer, shining
Sweltering warmth, blazing hot,
Smiting those outside.

Fall will probably show up later.

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 4:05pm

ManiacalMind

ManiacalMind

173 posts

That was pretty good, pretty sharp flow to it.
That last line was just lol, just lol.

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 4:26pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Why thank you.
Did you read some of my older ones? (I try to get feedback from everyone.)

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 5:17pm

LazyOne

LazyOne

140 posts

You have a great lexicon.
The poems may not be my style, still congratulations on not repeating the same thing over and over again [As do most poets on AG.]

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 5:21pm

ManiacalMind

ManiacalMind

173 posts

Did you read some of my older ones?

Yeah, I've read all of the poems in the thread, I've just got to say nice work.

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 6:31pm

Ghgt99

Ghgt99

1,441 posts

Winter's harshest winds
Cut through the trees like sharp glass
Blinding us with snow

Spring melts frozen earth,
Casting torrents of water
That hurtle downhill

Then Summer, shining
Sweltering warmth, blazing hot,
Smiting those outside.

Fall will probably show up later.

The last line is funny. =P

Good job! 9/10

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 7:17pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Thanks :)
Not a 10/10?!?!?! lol.
I actually wasn't intending for that line to be funny; I just couldn't think of anything else for Fall.

 

Posted Apr 2, '11 at 10:49am

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

I've decided I'll try a different style of poem every time I post. A sonnet one day, a haiku the next, maybe even a prose poem if I have the time. :D

 

Posted Apr 2, '11 at 7:42pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Last Haiku, I promise. :P

You were always there,
For me to lean on, to rest,
Every single hour.
-To my Chair, from the Girl that sometimes breaks you by accident

I need you with me,
For sweet comfort when I cry,
When all else is lost
-To my box of Chocolates, from the Girl that noms.

 
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