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TackyCrazyTNT
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I decided I'd try and post some of my poems on here, since I liked the first line poem thread so much. I would really like some advice on how to improve. Thanks!

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TackyCrazyTNT
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I'm going to take a wild guess and say you're right. I highly doubt that either the chair or the box of chocolates would know "the girl" by name.


You are quite correct, Ernie. I wanted to show my appreciation for household items, since I doubt they get poems very often.
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Greatness Tacky. Greatness. The haikus for the house are awesome.
And the seasonal poem was funny. I can't really get into the nitty gritty, but if you do a longer poem, I will.

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Why, thank you, Moon.
Someone needs to give me some ideas on what kind of poem to do. Sonnet? Ode? Song lyrics? Some sets of couplets? Limericks?

Here's a limerick I wrote in elementary school:

Fox

There once was a very nice Fox.
He liked to pick up big rocks.
He threw them around,
They made a loud sound,
And he also lived in a box.

I know, I know. I was a brilliant poet back then. :P

Maybe I'll write some more Limericks later today. I'm in a limerick-y kind of mood.

gameinator
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Those are brilliant Tacky, that fox one was really good.
I'm not that good at poetry, most of the stuff poetry related I did when I was around 8.

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Thanks, gameinator
And that's alright about the poetry thing. Some people are good at different things. I used to take dance lessons. D:

I absolutely hate learning dance.
You don't do anything but prance.
You twirl and you fall,
I don't learn anything at all,
You swish around as if in a trance.

Wow, that sucked. D:

gameinator
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Better than most of the poems I've wrote, they're pretty funny as well.

MoonFairy
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Ooooohohohohohohohohoh Do limericks.
Limericks are fun.
By the way, have you seen the Tanka Contest?

TackyCrazyTNT
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I am checking it out as of this moment.

SupaLegit
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Hey ya Tacky, in your Tanka, the last line is kinda funny

Choices that haunt us,
Choices that make us regret
The paths that we take.
It is better to simply
To never make decisions.


I think that

It is better to simply
Never make a decision.

Would sound a bit better :O
TackyCrazyTNT
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I changed it, you butt. :/
Read into the next page.

MoonFairy
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lmfao.
You should be a regular in the Tanka, I'm determined to make it gain popularity

TackyCrazyTNT
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You should be a regular in the Tanka, I'm determined to make it gain popularity


And maybe I will. :P
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Lulz, that's what friends are for silly :P

Moon, I'll work on my Tanka skills too (hm sounds... different)
and be regular too. Besides, I need to another type of style under my belt

TackyCrazyTNT
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That winky face makes me nervous, Supa. D:

SupaLegit
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Hehe, don't be I can only be so harsh, no more no less.... I think I almost got my tanka down ;O

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