ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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Endscape
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ooo thanks for checking was not sure.

jacksonghuntington
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OH CRAP! totally forgot to get one in! ill do it in study hall later... DARN IT!

ExplosiveDynamite
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Torn apart inside,
Feeling dead on the outside,
Broken hearts, never heal.

.-.

ExplosiveDynamite
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Torn apart inside,
Feeling dead on the outside,
Broken hearts, never heal.


Meh, didn't realize it was 5-7-6

Torn apart inside,
Feeling dead on the outside,
Broken hearts- don't heal.
Pedro97
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My heart is broken
And you know how it feels like
Feel the pain of love.

This is my first try and I don't know how it works so that is it.

waluigi
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Meh, didn't realize it was 5-7-6


Sorry, but you're still wrong. It is 5-7-5.

And Pedro, your second and third lines are too long. I know you could fix the second line by taking out like, but I'm not sure about the third.
HahiHa
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Sorry, but you're still wrong. It is 5-7-5.

His first one is 5-7-6, the second is actually correctly 5-7-5
waluigi
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Oh. I thought heal was two syllables. I was wrong. Carry on.

Pedro97
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And Pedro, your second and third lines are too long.


All the words in the second line have one syllables, don't they? he third is fine. I am new on this and thanks for helping.
waluigi
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I'm sorry again. I keep thinking words with the "eel" sound have two syllables. therefore you're haiku is correct.

Pedro97
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I keep thinking words with the "eel" sound have two syllables.


Me too that is why I looked up the dictionary to see the syllables it had. And I the Haiku you have done.
Endscape
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WOWWW... that one... was powerful mr. orion.

FallenSky
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@Enter

Everything okay...buddy?

pHacon
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Emotions contract,
Viewing life and waning time.
Beat, flow continues.

Best I could think up in a minute. Forgot I was still here? Yeah, so did I.

Bearsal1121
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I MAKE HEART HAIKU
I DONT GET THE POND HAIKUS
MAKING HAIKU FUUUUUUN


The FUUUUUN is still one sillable, pick me or the great budha will kill on you.

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