ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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silvermoon123
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That's four syllables, Frank. Sorry.

Depends how you say it.
3=crad-el-ing
2=crad-ling
I think it sounds less awkward with 3. I say Freakenstein should pass.
EnterOrion
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Can I be excused for ambiguity?


No.

Such is a situation with the word 'fire.' It is one syllable, but commonly pronounced as two. Were this a verbal competition, I would let through; unfortunately, this is not.

I like being evil. >
Freakenstein
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Such is a situation with the word 'fire.'


I c wat u did XD

Oh well, such a shame. I'll see if I can tweak it a bit...

People yearn for them.
Their judgements become their own,
nourishing their sheep.


I *think* that works now, since both sites confirm 3 syllables...
FallenSky
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In the sand near the
Pond, my fingers dance with grace;
Tracing tales as quills

Traditionnal approach this time; while I almost never won with it, I remember making a lot of people win for that kind of Haiku.
I'm fond of traditions ^^.

HahiHa
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Wander through darkness
Frequenting the dead spirits
Madness is growing

Whatever I try, my darker Haiku's don't seem to get anywhere as dark as I would them to be, but I guess with 3 lines it's hard.. this will have to do.

FallenSky
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but I guess with 3 lines it's hard

And that's why the metaphor is the most sublime feat of language. While a picture may express a thousand words, a metaphor can do much more, thus, a little Haiku could make flow barrels of ink by its esoteric nature.

Hurray for metaphors!
I know it's hard to cram life lessons, morals and teachings into those darned three lines.

Endscape
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a more beatiful thought of the literary element of metaphor(figurative language) has never been spoken...

GhostOfMatrix
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Mechanical waves,
Need media to travel,
Solid, liquid, gas.

pHacon
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Interplay of force;
Majestic work in action;
The states in motion.

Looking at it from the perspective my physics class gave me. The last line is referring to the stages of matter communicating the first line; rather essential to the thing as a whole, but I'm afraid it's too open to other interpretation.

Matrix... That was going to be my final line.. Heh.

dudeguy45
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my forced obsession
against your distaste for me
they both equal out

FallenSky
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a more beatiful thought of the literary element of metaphor(figurative language) has never been spoken...

Why, thank you! I feel honored.
You, sir, know how to talk to a man...Um, that sounded awkward right?

CigarStoreIndian
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These pants are too big
I fit better in the smalls
Not the size above

GhostOfMatrix
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*whistles*

*jots down that Orion is late again*

j/k

He's probably busy with something else. :/

I hope he judges in a day or two instead of making us wait a few weeks again. D:

Endscape
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...so u would hope...

GhostOfMatrix
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I wonder who's going to judge next time.

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