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Posted Feb 18, '09 at 8:40pm

Gantic

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Understandably, this one might be hard to understand... It's really lame though since I've been reading too much questionable content. (Was that pun even lamer?)

Corazon del Local

Unsense the barristar that divaided your hartria. Thouw it haurt snow, cauld sholt huurt shoult hingiang on. Time pastis will heal thu wund twofuld. Or juke mulp. Willcome yoursoul to cofe Corazon del Local.

 

Posted Feb 19, '09 at 4:24am

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Questionable content eh? Another thing to remind me that I'm not a real internet dweller seeing as I don't read webcomics!

 

Posted Feb 20, '09 at 12:16am

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Obviously, I find that hard to believe.

Time for yet another metaphor and wordplay.

Death's Arrow

Most men are born in the hours nine and ten, rising in effort to the strength of noon, standing upon two legs and by sixteen on four wheels. By twenty-one they begin to retire from the twilight of adolescence. Through the night their indiscretions are committed. In the darkness many lives are snuffed by two and the final flames burn out at three. The silence and solitude are clearest in the waking hours of the early morning between five and seven. The image everyday of a post apocalyptic earth is comforting. Perhaps in knowing what the world was like before these concrete trees.

 

Posted Feb 20, '09 at 9:48pm

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I wasn't going to title this one, but a title came. I don't think I've got the tone quite right either.

The Bridge

--You ever think of going back for a visit?
--Where? No. Why?
--I don't know. It's where you're from.
--No. It's where my parents are from. I don't even know why they want to go back. Life is good here. Why go back?
--Yeah, but don't you want to see what it's like?
--No. I've been there. There's nothing there for me.
--Well, wouldn't you want to go back home if you ever left?
--This is my home. I was born and raised here. I know these streets, these people. This is my culture. This, with everyone like me.
--Yeah, but...
--I don't need to go to some town no one has heard of to affirm my identity. I don't. That place means nothing to me. I know. I want it to but it doesn't. Everything I want is here. I know who I am. I know my heritage. I know it will fade down the line.
--But...
--I can deal with it. I've met my share of overcompensating, self-hating snobs and posers and deniers. I'm not self hating. I know myself. I know this. I know you. I know. I know. I know you haven't quite figured yourself out yet...
--You've thought about this a lot haven't you?
--Yes, and.... You know... we'll go. We'll go. If you still want to, we'll go. Sometime. So can we go catch a movie now or something?

 

Posted Feb 20, '09 at 10:03pm

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That "the tone isn't quite right" seems to me to be a hint or something, but for what? Such things in the eye of the beholder may indicate a reflection of a personal nature, perhaps.

ps I honestly don't read webcomics. I used to. But these days I don't even keep up with xkcd.

 

Posted Feb 21, '09 at 7:52pm

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The tone not being not quite right refers to, in this case, the characterization and its undercurrents. Vagueness compels personal taint.

xkcd has been stagnant for a while.

 

Posted Feb 21, '09 at 10:36pm

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Perhaps your protagonist in the above dialogue is too straightforward? I'm just guessing here but when writing dialogues in text I often find myself telling more that I want to explicitly, because I feel limited by the medium.

xkcd has been stagnant for a while.

In what way? I always wonder how long high-output commentaries that cover broad topics will last, especially when they become a phenomenon in themselves. By now we'd be looking more at xkcd as a culture than a cartoon...

I think possibly the real reason I stopped reading was because the one time I commented on the LJ feed some internet-hobo tried to troll me.

 

Posted Feb 21, '09 at 10:54pm

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Strop, you should read Daisy Owl. It's a relatively new but intelligent webcomic.

 

Posted Feb 23, '09 at 12:05am

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Perhaps. I've had difficulty in writing such situations consisting of dialogue. And it is often closely tied to wall-of-text's lesser known sibling block-of-dialogue which might as well be a monologue.

For xkcd, the situations and jokes seem tired, but I can't say that I entirely agree with a certain xkcd hate blog, which appears to be written by the genuinely jaded.

Flight

It is a fiercely windy day, one where it is hard to breathe with the wind in my face. A blackbird is hovering in the distance, flapping but going nowhere. It neither dips nor rises. It only pushes forward into the headwind. I look around and her hair is tossed by the wind, occasionally falling in front of her face. She combs her hair away with her fingers only to have it in her face again. A twinge in my chest diverts my gaze. Like a fighter plane, the blackbird turns slightly and flies off with the wind to its belly.

 

Posted Feb 23, '09 at 12:54am

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but I can't say that I entirely agree with a certain xkcd hate blog, which appears to be written by the genuinely jaded.

Hahahahahahaha an xkcd hate blog? The date that was created was the date it matriculated into the mainstream. Incidentally that's also the event horizon for something eventually falling back into ignominity unless you become such a cultural icon that you pass through the middle of the black hole and out the other side into eternity, like Elvis, The Beatles, and Beethoven.

Parsat: Daisy Owl is charming and lighthearted, in fact in a way I am reminded of One Swoop Fell. I'm not sure they share nearly the same agenda but the tone...

I see the appeal in, as Mike Dutton puts it, "wanting to restore the age of innocence" or something like that. In fact I wanted to indulge in a similar tone and whimsy in my own project but eh...when you make the internet your commentary space it will never come out innocent...

 
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